Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors which affect naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

예시: I usually eat snacks only on special occasions, such as during long journeys or when I'm hanging out with friends. I believe snacking too often can be harmful, so I try to limit it. For example, when traveling, having snacks makes the time pass more pleasantly.

제안: Your answer addresses the question well and includes reasons, but some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing reduce clarity. Use correct verb forms and linking words to improve coherence. Also, be more specific about the health effects.

예시: I think eating snacks occasionally for a short period might not be harmful. However, if you eat them daily, it can negatively affect your health because snacks often contain high levels of saturated fat and sugar. Additionally, many snacks have preservatives and chemicals that may be unhealthy.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains many grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to form complete sentences with correct tense and avoid repetition. Provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details with linking words.

예시: When I was young, I used to eat snacks very often. For example, I would ask my parents to buy chips or lollipops for me every day after school. At that time, I didn't realize how unhealthy snacks could be.

제안: Your answer shows personal preference but contains unclear and incorrect expressions, such as 'special vaccination for tomato.' Make sure your sentences are clear and relevant. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons for your preference.

예시: My favorite snack is tomato chips because I enjoy their unique savory and sweet flavor. I also like to include tomatoes in my meals, such as in meat dishes or pizza, which shows how much I like this ingredient.

× Well really do I ate snacks especially when I acknowledge it's detrimental impact if I pinch eating so I only have snacks.

✓ Well, I really do eat snacks especially when I acknowledge its detrimental impact if I pinch eating, so I only have snacks.

The verb 'ate' is past tense, but the sentence context requires present tense 'eat' to match the current habit. Also, 'it's' should be 'its' to show possession. The phrase 'pinch eating' is unclear and may be a misuse, but correction focuses on tense.

× Well really do I ate snacks especially when I acknowledge it's detrimental impact if I pinch eating so I only have snacks.

✓ Well, I really do eat snacks especially when I acknowledge its detrimental impact if I pinch eating, so I only have snacks.

The pronoun 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' but here it should be the possessive pronoun 'its' to indicate ownership of the impact.

× Well really do I ate snacks especially when I acknowledge it's detrimental impact if I pinch eating so I only have snacks.

✓ Well, I really do eat snacks especially when I acknowledge its detrimental impact; if I pinch eating, so I only have snacks.

The sentence is run-on and lacks proper conjunction or punctuation to separate ideas clearly. However, the main focus is on grammar types listed, so minimal correction is applied.

× In some specific cases such as having long journey or hanging out with friends, you know that chit chat and snacks are the much made in heaven to kill your time.

✓ In some specific cases such as having a long journey or hanging out with friends, you know that chit chat and snacks are a match made in heaven to kill your time.

The phrase 'having long journey' lacks the article 'a'. Also, 'much made in heaven' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'a match made in heaven'.

× But if you binge eating, like having it on a daily basis, of course it is very detrimental to your health.

✓ But if you binge eat, like having it on a daily basis, of course it is very detrimental to your health.

After 'if you', the base verb form 'binge eat' should be used, not the '-ing' form 'binge eating'.

× Moreover, they also add some chemicals such as preservatives they never include in their ingredient list.

✓ Moreover, they also add some chemicals such as preservatives that they never include in their ingredient list.

The sentence lacks the relative pronoun 'that' to connect the clause properly.

× Although now I have a clear acknowledgement about the harmful effects of snacks. I used to be a big fan of snacks.

✓ Although now I have a clear acknowledgement about the harmful effects of snacks, I used to be a big fan of snacks.

The first sentence is a fragment; combining the two sentences with a comma corrects the sentence structure and maintains past tense for 'used to be'.

× I eat snacks.

✓ I ate snacks.

The context is about past habits, so past tense 'ate' is appropriate instead of present tense 'eat'.

× I ate snacks on a daily basis, like every day after schools I always ******* my parents to buy me chips or a bunch of lollipops.

✓ I ate snacks on a daily basis, like every day after school I always begged my parents to buy me chips or a bunch of lollipops.

'Schools' should be singular 'school' in this context. Also, '*******' is replaced with 'begged' to complete the sentence meaningfully in past tense.

× I have. At that time I had always think that. I had always thought that I.

✓ I have. At that time I had always thought that.

The verb 'think' should be in past participle 'thought' to match past perfect tense 'had always thought'.

× I do have one favorite snack.

✓ I have one favorite snack.

The phrase 'do have' is unnecessary emphasis here; simple present 'have' is sufficient.

× Actually, I had already have a specific and special vaccination for tomato.

✓ Actually, I already have a specific and special vaccination for tomato.

The past perfect 'had already have' is incorrect; present perfect or simple present 'already have' fits better here.

× I try my best to add tomato into every meals that I make meat or pizza with tomato.

✓ I try my best to add tomato to every meal that I make, meat or pizza with tomato.

The preposition 'into' should be 'to' when adding ingredients. Also, 'meals' should be singular 'meal' to match 'every'. Commas added for clarity.

× So yeah, I kind of love tomato chips too since it's savory and sweet at the same.

✓ So yeah, I kind of love tomato chips too since they're savory and sweet at the same time.

'It's' refers to singular, but 'tomato chips' is plural, so 'they're' is correct. Also, 'at the same' is incomplete; 'at the same time' is the correct phrase.