Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and includes irrelevant information about taking naps instead of focusing on when you eat snacks. Try to answer the question directly by stating specific times or situations when you eat snacks, and keep your answer concise and relevant.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon between classes when I feel hungry. This helps me stay energized and focused for the rest of the day.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing phrases like 'three shoes and two shoes options' and incomplete sentences. Focus on giving clear reasons why your snacks are healthy, mention specific healthy snacks, and explain their benefits clearly and completely.

예시: Yes, I think eating snacks like peanuts and fresh fruits is healthy because they provide vitamins and energy, which help me stay active throughout the day.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions such as 'I often told some unhealthy foods' and 'chocolates are winter.' Try to use correct past tense and clear descriptions. Also, explain why you liked those snacks and how they made you feel.

예시: Yes, when I was young, I often ate unhealthy snacks like chocolates because I enjoyed their sweet taste and they made me feel happy.

제안: Your answer is generally good but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, avoid phrases like 'which is my appetite' and instead explain why you like the sweet flavor. Adding a specific example would enrich your answer.

예시: I like to eat fresh fruits as snacks because their sweet flavor satisfies my appetite. Moreover, fresh fruits provide essential vitamins and nutrients that keep me healthy.

× I use three shoes and two shoes options buy peanuts and fresh food.

✓ I use three or two options to buy peanuts and fresh food.

The phrase 'three shoes and two shoes options' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the student intended to say 'three or two options'. Also, 'buy' should be preceded by 'to' to indicate purpose. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the quantifier usage.

× The snacks provide a sense of vitamins and healthy sets which help with my energy level stable throughout the day.

✓ The snacks provide vitamins and healthy nutrients which help keep my energy level stable throughout the day.

The phrase 'a sense of vitamins and healthy sets' is incorrect. 'Vitamins' and 'nutrients' are countable or uncountable nouns and should not be preceded by 'a sense of'. Also, 'help with my energy level stable' is incorrect; it should be 'help keep my energy level stable'. The correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Additionally, eating the kinds of snacks prevents me from being.

✓ Additionally, eating these kinds of snacks prevents me from feeling tired.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'prevents me from being'. The correction completes the sentence by specifying what the snacks prevent, making it grammatically correct and meaningful.

× Yes I do, when I was young I often told some unhealthy foods for snacks.

✓ Yes I did, when I was young I often ate some unhealthy foods for snacks.

The verb 'told' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'ate' to indicate consuming food. Also, 'Yes I do' should be 'Yes I did' to match the past tense question. The correction aligns the verb tense and meaning appropriately.

× For example, I love eating chocolates very much since chocolates are winter and nice to feel happy after having it.

✓ For example, I love eating chocolates very much since chocolates are sweet and nice, and they make me feel happy after eating them.

The phrase 'chocolates are winter' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or misuse. It should be 'sweet and nice'. Also, 'to feel happy after having it' is awkward; it should be 'they make me feel happy after eating them'. The correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I like fresh fruit plus snacks because fresh fruit has the sweet flavor, which is my appetite.

✓ I like fresh fruit and snacks because fresh fruit has a sweet flavor, which appeals to my appetite.

The phrase 'fresh fruit plus snacks' is awkward; 'and' is more appropriate. Also, 'the sweet flavor' should be 'a sweet flavor' as it is a general statement. 'Which is my appetite' is incorrect; it should be 'which appeals to my appetite'. The correction improves naturalness and grammatical accuracy.