Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Verbessern Sie die Satzstruktur und Klarheit: Verwenden Sie kürzere, korrekt verbundene Sätze, vermeiden Sie Zeitinkonsistenzen (z. B. mixing von "would be" und "when I feel"). Fügen Sie ein kurzes Detail hinzu, um die Antwort natürlicher und spezifischer zu machen (z. B. wie oft pro week oder welche Filme).

예시: I don't eat snacks very often. When I do, it's usually while watching a movie or when I'm relaxing at home. For example, I might have a small bar of chocolate about once a week during a weekend film night.

제안: Kürzen und Grammatik korrigieren, um natürliche Rede zu zeigen: Verwenden Sie ein klares Thema, dann erklären Sie den Grund. Vermeiden Sie unnötige Wiederholungen und korrigieren Sie Verbformen (z. B. "to lift my mood"). Geben Sie eine kurze Balance zwischen Nutzen und Nachteil und ein Beispiel für Portionskontrolle.

예시: Yes, in moderation. I sometimes eat chocolate to lift my mood when I'm feeling down, but I limit myself to a small piece so it doesn't become unhealthy.

제안: Achten Sie auf Zeitformen und Pronomen: Verwenden Sie past tense konsistent ("didn't" / "I didn't"), und vermeiden Sie unklare Pronomen wie "she". Machen Sie die Ursache-Wirkung klar und fügen Sie ein kurzes Beispiel oder Häufigkeitsangabe hinzu.

예시: No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was younger. My parents limited sweets because they thought too much sugar would spoil my appetite and stop me from eating proper meals.

제안: Verbessern Sie Wortwahl und Vergleichsstruktur: Verwenden Sie klare Adjektive und korrekte Ausdrücke (z. B. "spare ribs-flavoured chips"). Strukturieren Sie die Antwort: nennen Sie den Snack, beschreiben Sie den Geschmack und vergleichen Sie kurz mit einem bekannten Geschmack.

예시: Lately I've enjoyed spare ribs-flavoured chips. I tried them when my brother bought a bag, and they tasted smoky and slightly sweet. I prefer them to the regular paprika-flavoured chips because they have a richer, meatier flavour.

× I don't eat snacks very often, but if I do it would be when I'm watching a movie or the time when I feel really relaxed I would eat some chocolate or chips.

✓ I don't eat snacks very often, but if I do it is when I'm watching a movie or when I feel really relaxed; I eat some chocolate or chips.

Use present simple/modal consistency for habitual or hypothetical present situations. Replace 'would' with 'is' or simple present 'I eat' because the speaker describes typical present behaviour. Also add 'when' for clarity and use a semicolon or conjunction to separate clauses. (Explanation in English as requested.)

× Yes, I do think it's healthy for me to eat snacks because sometimes when I'm feeling emotionally down I would eat some chocolate or something sweet to lifting up my mood, but I don't eat that much because I know it could be unhealthy if I eat too much.

✓ Yes, I do think it's healthy for me to eat snacks because sometimes when I'm feeling emotionally down I eat some chocolate or something sweet to lift my mood, but I don't eat that much because I know it can be unhealthy if I eat too much.

Replace 'would eat' with simple present 'eat' for habitual reactions and change 'to lifting up my mood' to the infinitive 'to lift my mood'. Replace 'could' with 'can' to express a general possibility in the present. These changes correct modal and verb form usage and improve clarity. (Explanation in English as requested.)

× No, I don't often eat snacks when I was younger because my parents were very careful about giving me the right amount of snacks for each day because eating too much sweet would be very unhealthy, especially for a child and she wouldn't eat the proper meal.

✓ No, I didn't often eat snacks when I was younger because my parents were very careful about giving me the right amount of snacks each day, since eating too many sweets was very unhealthy for a child and could stop me from eating proper meals.

Match past tense throughout: use 'didn't' instead of 'don't' and 'was' for past habitual state. Use plural 'sweets' and 'many' with countable items. Replace 'she wouldn't eat' with 'could stop me from eating' to maintain consistent subject and meaning. This corrects tense consistency and pronoun reference. (Explanation in English as requested.)

× Recently I really enjoy eating the new chips with the flavor spare ribs.

✓ Recently I've really enjoyed eating the new chips with spare-ribs flavor.

Use present perfect 'I've enjoyed' with 'recently' to link past experience to the present. Use adjective order and hyphenation 'spare-ribs flavor' for clarity and natural phrasing. (Explanation in English as requested.)

× I've never tried before but once my brother bought it home I tried a couple of them and it was very delicious.

✓ I'd never tried them before, but when my brother brought them home I tried a couple and they were delicious.

Use past perfect 'I'd never tried' to show that the lack of experience was before the past action. Use past simple 'brought' and plural pronouns 'them' and 'they' to match 'chips'. Change 'it was very delicious' to 'they were delicious' for subject-verb agreement and natural phrasing. (Explanation in English as requested.)

× It's nothing compared to the chips with paprika flavor like the normal 1.

✓ They are nothing compared to the regular paprika-flavored chips.

Use 'they are' to refer to 'chips' and 'regular' instead of 'normal 1'. Use compound adjective 'paprika-flavored' before the noun. This corrects adjective usage and awkward phrasing. (Explanation in English as requested.)