Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите короче и яснее: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных причины. Уберите повторения и исправьте грамматику (например, "eating snacks not very good" → "snacking is not very good"). Используйте связки: "because" или "so". Максимум 3–4 предложения.

예시: I rarely eat snacks now. I prefer to have three proper meals — breakfast, lunch and dinner — because snacking is not very healthy and makes me feel less hungry for main meals.

제안: Начните с прямого утверждения, затем объясните причину коротко и конкретно. Избегайте слов-паразитов ("uh"). Правьте словосочетания: "surge of blood sugar" и "abuse eating snacks" → "overeat snacks". Используйте связки: "because", "as a result" или "therefore".

예시: No, I don't think snacking is healthy because it can cause spikes in blood sugar. As a result, frequent snacking may increase the risk of conditions like diabetes, so it's better not to overeat snacks.

제안: Дайте чёткое прошлого времени начало, затем конкретно опишите последствия и решение. Избегайте разговорных вставок и неправильных выражений ("became fat" можно смягчить на "gained weight"). Используйте связки: "so", "then" или "after that".

예시: Yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks as a child, so I gained weight and my health suffered. After that, I started replacing snacks with fruits and vegetables, which improved my health.

제안: Ответьте прямо, перечислите 2–3 конкретных варианта и добавьте короткое объяснение почему. Избегайте «umm» и повторов, используйте правильный порядок слов («I really like them» вместо "I very like it").

예시: If I'm hungry between meals, I usually eat a protein bar or fruit. For example, I like apples, strawberries and other berries because they are filling and healthy.

× Well, I try to eat snacks rarely now and I prefer to eat more meals during my dinner, lunch and breakfast because eating snacks not very good for the health and I try to avoid it.

✓ Well, I try to eat snacks rarely now, and I prefer to eat full meals for breakfast, lunch, and dinner because eating snacks is not very good for health, so I try to avoid them.

Sentence contains several issues: adverb placement ('eat snacks rarely' should be 'rarely eat snacks' or 'try to eat snacks rarely' can be awkward), incorrect order of meals, article and countability ('the health' unnecessary, use 'health'), missing verb 'is' in 'eating snacks is not very good', pronoun 'it' should refer to 'snacks' (plural 'them'). Suggestion: place adverbs before the main verb or after auxiliary verbs, use correct meal order (breakfast, lunch, dinner), include the verb 'is' and use plural pronoun for plural noun. Grammar problem type ID:20,22,26

× No, it's not really healthy because it can provoke a surge of sugar level in the blood and uh, as a result can be, uh, serious diseases like diabetes. So it's uh, important to not to abuse eating snacks.

✓ No, it's not really healthy because it can provoke a surge in blood sugar levels and, as a result, can cause serious diseases like diabetes. So it's important not to overconsume snacks.

Problems: incorrect noun phrase 'surge of sugar level in the blood' should be 'surge in blood sugar levels'; missing verb 'cause' for diseases; double 'to' in 'not to to abuse'; awkward verb 'abuse eating snacks' should be 'overconsume snacks'. Suggestion: use 'surge in blood sugar levels', include appropriate verbs, and avoid doubling 'to'. Grammar problem type ID:4,26

× Yes, I ate a lot of snacks when I was a child and uh, as a result I became fat and uh, it wasn't very good influence for my health. But after I tried to replace uh, snacks with fruits and vegetables and it worked well.

✓ Yes, I ate a lot of snacks when I was a child and, as a result, I gained weight and it wasn't very good for my health. But then I replaced snacks with fruits and vegetables, and it worked well.

Issues: 'became fat' is grammatical but 'gained weight' is more natural; 'it wasn't very good influence for my health' is ungrammatical — needs 'for my health' with 'good' or 'a good influence' structure; tense and connector 'after I tried to replace' is awkward — use simple past 'I replaced' or 'I tried to replace... and it worked' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'gained weight' and correct prepositional phrases 'for my health', keep consistent past tense. Grammar problem type ID:5,26,11

× Well, if I feel very hungry between the main meals, I may eat some protein bar or I try to eat healthy food like umm, fruits, uh, for example apples and uh, strawberries and other berries. I very like it.

✓ Well, if I feel very hungry between meals, I might eat a protein bar, or I try to eat healthy foods like fruits, for example apples, strawberries, and other berries. I really like them.

Problems: modal 'may' is acceptable but 'might' fits hypothetical; 'between the main meals' is wordy — 'between meals' is natural; 'some protein bar' should be 'a protein bar'; 'healthy food' vs 'healthy foods' plural when listing; 'I very like it' is ungrammatical — use 'I really like them' (pronoun plural agrees with 'fruits/berries'). Suggestion: use correct articles ('a protein bar'), appropriate modal verbs, and correct adverb 'really' plus plural pronoun agreement. Grammar problem type ID:1,2,6,11,12,20