Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và ngắn gọn hơn; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (chia động từ, mạo từ) và tránh lặp từ. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ với liên từ thích hợp (e.g., "because" hoặc "when").

예시: I usually eat snacks while watching movies or YouTube videos because it makes me feel relaxed. For example, I often have popcorn or fruit during a film, which helps me unwind after a busy day.

제안: Cần cấu trúc rõ ràng: đưa ra ý chính, giải thích lý do và kết luận. Tránh lặp từ, loại bỏ những tiếng ngập ngừng (uh). Sử dụng liên từ như "however" hoặc "but" để nối ý và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về loại snack lành mạnh.

예시: I think it depends on how often and what kind of snacks you eat. If someone eats sugary or fatty snacks every day, it can cause health problems; however, occasional healthy snacks like nuts or yogurt are fine and can be beneficial.

제안: Câu trả lời hiện tại nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không đúng, làm người nghe khó hiểu. Nên trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) rồi giải thích ngắn gọn rõ ràng với chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại snack bạn ăn), và dùng thì quá khứ phù hợp. Tránh từ sai chính tả như "left/trees/cations".

예시: Yes, I did eat snacks sometimes when I was young, but not very often because my family couldn't afford them. Usually I had simple treats like fruit or homemade snacks on special occasions.

제안: Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, trôi chảy và tránh lặp từ. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu sở thích, rồi giải thích lý do với ví dụ cụ thể. Loại bỏ tiếng ậm ạch và sửa ngữ pháp (thì, động từ, cấu trúc).

예시: I prefer healthy snacks, especially fruit like apples, because they taste good and are good for my health. For instance, I often have an apple as an afternoon snack because it gives me energy without being too heavy.

× Well, usually I often choose to enjoy some snacks when I watching movies or like YouTube videos since it make me feel very enjoyable and relaxed.

✓ Well, usually I often choose to enjoy some snacks when I am watching movies or YouTube videos since it makes me feel very happy and relaxed.

You should use the present continuous (be + -ing) after 'when' to describe an action happening at that time: 'I am watching'. Also use third person singular verb form 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Enjoyable' is an adjective describing things; use 'happy' or 'enjoy it' for feelings and simplify wording. Use 'YouTube videos' without 'like' in this structure.

× Well, I think it depends on the frequency and the types of snack. If you eat some kind of sugary, uh, sugary or fatty snacks every day, it will lead to some health issues and uh, but having healthy snacks.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the frequency and the types of snacks. If you eat sugary or fatty snacks every day, it can lead to health issues, but having healthy snacks is fine.

Use the plural 'snacks' when speaking generally about types. Remove redundant words ('some kind of', repeated 'sugary'). Use 'can' for general possibility and complete the sentence by contrasting unhealthy and healthy choices. Keep sentence concise for clarity.

× Yes of course I left snacks when I went later but my family can't afford them very often so I only ate trees or special cations.

✓ Yes, of course I liked snacks when I was younger, but my family couldn't afford them very often, so I only ate treats on special occasions.

Several problems: 'left' is a typo for 'liked'. Use past tense 'was younger' to indicate childhood. Use 'couldn't' as past of 'can't'. 'Trees' and 'cations' are incorrect words—should be 'treats' and 'occasions'. Ensure verb tense consistency and correct vocabulary.

× Well, I prefer some kind of healthy snacks like especially fruit one like apple, and I think it would uh, it taste, I love it taste and but it also very, uh, like beneficial for my health.

✓ Well, I prefer healthy snacks, especially fruits like apples, and I think they taste great and are beneficial for my health.

Use plural 'fruits' and 'apples' when speaking generally. Match verb forms to plural subject: 'they taste' and 'are beneficial'. Remove filler words and fix word order for natural English.