Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and prepositions, and avoid filler phrases. Limit to 2–3 sentences and link ideas with a short connector. Pronunciation/grammar: use 'I usually have a snack at 5:00 PM' and avoid 'taking' for meals.

예시: I usually have a snack at around 5:00 PM. It’s a mid-afternoon snack before dinner, so I don’t get too hungry by the evening.

제안: Answer directly and explain logically using correct grammar. State your position, give a clear reason, and use linking words (because/so). Avoid confusing phrases like 'gain loss my weight' and repeated words. Say whether the timing or type of snack affects health.

예시: Not usually, because I am trying to lose weight. Because I eat dinner at 7:00 PM, having a big snack at 5:00 PM makes me eat more overall, so I avoid heavy snacks early in the evening.

제안: Use past simple consistently and remove fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples and a brief result or reflection. Replace vague phrases like 'take his next' and avoid 'uh' and 'you know'.

예시: Yes, I ate snacks often when I was young. I usually ate fast food such as burgers, sausages and sandwiches, which later affected my health because they were high in fat and salt.

제안: Be concise and specific: give a clear topic sentence, name 2–3 examples, and give one short reason using linking words. Avoid fillers and improve phrasing (e.g. 'rich in vitamins').

예시: I prefer healthy snacks, such as nuts and fruits like dates, bananas and apples, because they are rich in vitamins and minerals. They keep me full longer and are better for my health.

× I usually taking my snacks at 5:00 PM and I think it should be a mid time snack or the snack before your. Dinner.

✓ I usually take my snacks at 5:00 PM and I think it should be a midafternoon snack or the snack before your dinner.

The verb 'taking' is incorrect because after 'usually' you need the base form (simple present) for habitual actions. Replace 'taking' with 'take'. Also 'mid time snack' is nonstandard; use 'midafternoon snack'. Remove the unnecessary period before 'Dinner' and use lowercase 'dinner'. Suggestion: Use simple present after adverbs of frequency (I usually take...).

× No, I think it's not healthy for me because I want to gain loss my weight and for this I have to dinner.

✓ No, I don't think it's healthy for me because I want to lose weight and for this I have dinner at 7:00 PM.

The phrase 'gain loss my weight' is ungrammatical and confused. Use the verb 'lose' to express reducing weight: 'I want to lose weight'. 'I have to dinner' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'I have dinner' and specify time if needed. Also use negative 'I don't think' rather than 'I think it's not' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use clear vocabulary for intentions (lose weight) and correct subject-verb order (I have dinner).

× I have to dinner at 7:00 PM and if I take a meal in 5:00 PM it it is not healthy for me.

✓ I have dinner at 7:00 PM and if I eat a meal at 5:00 PM it is not healthy for me.

Use 'have dinner' or 'eat' rather than 'take a meal'; 'take' is possible but less natural here. Use 'eat' with the time 'at 5:00 PM'. Remove the duplicated 'it'. Maintain simple present for habitual facts: 'I have dinner' and 'if I eat'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual routines and correct preposition 'at' with clock times.

× Yes, when I was young, I uh, take his next regularly and that time I used to like uh, some fast food like you know, burger, sausage, umm, sandwich, etcetera, which was very harmful for my health.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I used to take snacks regularly and at that time I liked some fast food, such as burgers, sausages, sandwiches, etc., which were very harmful to my health.

When referring to past habitual actions, use 'used to' with the base verb: 'used to take'. The original mixes present 'take' with past context. Also 'that time' should be 'at that time'. Use past tense 'liked' and plural nouns for countable items: 'burgers, sausages, sandwiches'. Use 'were harmful to my health' rather than 'was very harmful for my health'. Suggestion: For past habits use 'used to' + base verb and make countable foods plural.

× I usually like to eat rather healthy snacks, umm, that I can mention about nuts or any kind of fruits, especially for dates, banana, apple, etcetera.

✓ I usually prefer to eat fairly healthy snacks, for example nuts or fruits, especially dates, bananas, apples, etc.

'I usually like to eat rather healthy snacks' is understandable but 'rather' awkward; 'prefer' or 'fairly' is better. 'That I can mention about' is ungrammatical – use 'for example' or 'such as' to introduce examples. Use plural forms for countable fruits: 'bananas, apples'. Suggestion: Use 'for example' or 'such as' to introduce examples and make countable nouns plural.

× I think it's full of minerals and vitamins and everyone should take, uh, this type of healthy foods as a snack.

✓ I think they are full of minerals and vitamins and everyone should eat this type of healthy food as a snack.

'It's' incorrectly refers to plural 'nuts and fruits'; use 'they are'. 'Take ... food' is awkward; use 'eat'. 'This type of healthy foods' mixes 'type' (singular) with plural 'foods'; use 'this type of healthy food' or 'these types of healthy foods'. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number matches the noun (they for plurals) and match 'type' with singular or plural correctly.