Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Good honesty and content, but make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler phrases ("I mean", "If I'm being honest") and reduce repetition ("whenever I have to" and "whenever I feel hungry"). Use one or two supporting details with a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I usually avoid snacks because I'm on a diet at the moment. However, if I'm hungry between meals, I have a small healthy snack such as fruit or nuts. This helps me manage my appetite without breaking my diet.

제안: Answer is relevant and uses examples, but make it more personal and precise. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then use linking words (For example, However) and give one specific comparison. Avoid generalising phrases like "anything that you like."

예시: I think it depends on the snack. For example, healthy choices such as fruits or homemade low-sugar treats are good for you, whereas processed snacks like chips are unhealthy because they are high in salt and fat.

제안: Good use of a personal example and clear topic sentence. Improve verb tense consistency and reduce small errors ("what I take" -> "what I ate", "I usually have" -> "I usually had"). Use one linking word to connect the general statement to the example.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was young I wasn't conscious about my diet, so I ate whatever I wanted. For example, in primary school my mum often baked apple cookies for me, and I loved them because they were sweet and comforting.

제안: Clear preference and reason given, but be more specific about examples and avoid minor grammatical slips ("less in sugar" -> "lower in sugar" or "with less sugar"). Use linking words to add variety (For example, Recently). Keep within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Nowadays I prefer nutritious snacks because I'm taking care of my health. For example, I often make homemade pastries with less sugar and gluten-free ingredients, or I snack on plain yogurt with fruit.

× If I'm being honest, I mean on a diet right now so as much as possible I refrain from eating snacks, but whenever I have to I usually take snacks whenever I feel hungry.

✓ If I'm being honest, I mean I'm on a diet right now, so as much as possible I refrain from eating snacks, but when I have to I usually have a snack if I feel hungry.

The original sentence mixes verb patterns and uses 'take snacks' which is unnatural. Use 'I'm on a diet' (present continuous for current state) and 'have a snack' or 'eat a snack' instead of 'take snacks'. Also replace the redundant 'whenever...whenever' with 'when...if' to improve clarity. Suggestion: use natural collocations (on a diet, have a snack) and avoid repetition. (English (Philippines))

× It really depends on what type of snacks you are eating.

✓ It really depends on what type of snacks you eat.

Using present continuous 'are eating' implies an action happening right now. For general statements about habits or types, use simple present 'eat'. Suggestion: use simple present for general truths and habits. (English (Philippines))

× For example, if you are health conscious you'll probably make your own desserts or snack on fruits.

✓ For example, if you are health-conscious you'll probably make your own desserts or snack on fruit.

Hyphenate 'health-conscious' as a compound adjective. 'Fruits' is plural but when talking about fruit in general as a snack, the uncountable 'fruit' is more natural. Also keep pronoun 'you' is fine. Suggestion: use correct adjective form and uncountable noun when speaking generally. (English (Philippines))

× But if you don't care about your weight at all then you can choose chips or anything that you like.

✓ But if you don't care about your weight at all, then you might choose chips or anything you like.

'Can' implies ability rather than likelihood or choice; 'might' or 'would' better expresses possibility or typical choice. Remove unnecessary 'that'. Also add comma for clarity. Suggestion: choose modals that match meaning (can=ability, might=possibility). (English (Philippines))

× When I was young, I was not conscious about what I take, so I eat everything I like.

✓ When I was young, I was not conscious about what I ate, so I ate everything I liked.

The time frame is past ('When I was young'), so verbs should be in past tense. Using present tense 'take' and 'eat' is inconsistent. Change to 'ate' and 'liked'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time reference; use past tense for past situations. (English (Philippines))

× For example, I remember when I was in primary school, I usually have this apple cookies that my mom bakes for me.

✓ For example, I remember when I was in primary school, I usually had these apple cookies that my mom baked for me.

The sentence refers to past habitual actions, so use past tense 'had' and 'baked'. Also 'apple cookies' is plural so use 'these' not 'this', and plural verb agreement. Suggestion: use past tense and correct demonstrative for plural nouns. (English (Philippines))

× It was so delightful and I loved it.

✓ They were so delightful and I loved them.

Refers back to 'apple cookies' which is plural, so pronouns and verbs must match plurality: use 'they/were/them' not 'it/was/it'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents. (English (Philippines))

× Nowadays, I prefer to eat nutritious and healthy snacks because I'm taking care of my body.

✓ Nowadays, I prefer to eat nutritious and healthy snacks because I'm taking care of my body.

Sentence is mostly correct, but 'Nowadays' with 'prefer' is fine; however 'I'm taking care of my body' is acceptable as present continuous for ongoing action. No grammatical changes needed. Suggestion: sentence is correct; maintain present continuous for ongoing actions. (Included for completeness) (English (Philippines))

× For example, I make homemade pastries that are less in sugar and gluten free.

✓ For example, I make homemade pastries that are lower in sugar and gluten-free.

Use 'lower in sugar' rather than 'less in sugar'. 'Gluten free' as a compound adjective should be hyphenated 'gluten-free'. Suggestion: use 'lower in' for measurable quantities and hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns. (English (Philippines))