Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify sentences, correct grammar, and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "I like something too much on."

예시: I usually snack when I go to the cinema because films can be long. For example, I often buy popcorn or fish and sometimes a chocolate bar if I want something sweet.

제안: Give a direct opinion with reasons and avoid hesitations and repetition. Use linking words to explain why you think snacks are unhealthy and include a brief example or consequence.

예시: No, I don't think snacks are healthy because they usually contain a lot of sugar and fat. For instance, fast food and many packaged snacks can lead to weight gain and low energy.

제안: Good structure and clear contrast between past and present. To improve, add a specific example or brief reason why you changed habits and use a linking word for cohesion.

예시: I used to snack a lot when I was young because sweets were always available, and my mother warned me about it. However, now I rarely snack because I prefer small, healthy meals like yogurt and fruit.

제안: Well-structured and specific. To reach a higher band, refine grammar (pluralization and article use) and vary vocabulary a little. Add a brief comparison or additional detail to enrich the answer.

예시: I like donuts, especially sweet ones, and I usually treat myself to one on special occasions, such as getting a high score on a test. I prefer them to cookies because they're softer and more satisfying.

× I usually snack when go to the cinema because it is a long film and I like something too much on.

✓ I usually snack when I go to the cinema because it is a long film and I like to have something to eat.

Missing subject 'I' before verb 'go' is a sentence structure/verb usage error; 'like something too much on' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'I go' for present habitual actions and 'like to have something to eat' for a natural expression.

× For example, I often eat popcorn or fish and chips and sometimes I buy a chocolate bar if I want something sweet.

✓ For example, I often eat popcorn or fish and chips, and sometimes I buy a chocolate bar if I want something sweet.

The sentence lacked a comma before the conjunction 'and' connecting two independent clauses. Also no article problem in items, but punctuation improves clarity. Keep items as plural/uncountable nouns (popcorn) or countable with articles as appropriate.

× Absolutely no snack for me. Snacks.

✓ Absolutely no snacks for me.

Fragmented sentence 'Snacks.' is incomplete. Use plural 'snacks' with 'no' to express refusal. Combine into one complete sentence for clarity.

× It is an unhealthy food because it is 'cause it is.

✓ They are unhealthy foods because they are.

Mismatch between singular/plural and awkward filler 'cause it is'. 'Snacks' is plural so use 'they are unhealthy foods'. Remove tautological 'because they are' or complete the reason (e.g., 'because they are high in fat and sugar').

× Include, uh, fast food.

✓ This includes fast food.

Fragment: 'Include' is a verb that needs a subject. Use 'This includes fast food' to indicate that snacks include fast food. Avoid filler 'uh' in formal answers.

× Now I rarely eat snacks anymore.

✓ Now I rarely eat snacks anymore.

Sentence is grammatically correct; it uses present simple to describe habitual action. No change needed.

× I'm keen on sweet Donuts.

✓ I'm keen on sweet donuts.

Capitalization error: 'Donuts' should be lowercase in this context. Also 'keen on' is correct; 'donuts' is a plural noun and should be lowercase.

× I usually treat myself to one on special occasions, for example when I get a high score on the test.

✓ I usually treat myself to one on special occasions, for example when I get a high score on a test.

Article use: 'the test' implies a specific test; 'a test' is more natural when speaking generally. Keep 'one' referring to a single donut; plural/singular agreement is correct otherwise.

× They're my favorite sweet snack because they're soft and very satisfying.

✓ They're my favorite sweet snack because they're soft and very satisfying.

Sentence is correct. 'They're' correctly refers to 'donuts' (plural). No change needed.