Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và phát âm từ gây hiểu lầm, tổ chức câu rõ ràng hơn với một câu chủ đề rồi thêm chi tiết hỗ trợ. Cụ thể: sửa lỗi động từ (e.g. "eat snacks"), dùng cấu trúc hoàn chỉnh (e.g. "I usually..."), tránh từ lặp và phát âm sai ("snake" → "snack"). Thêm liên từ ngắn để mạch văn (e.g. "so", "therefore").

예시: I usually eat snacks in my free time, especially after school. However, I recently realized this was unhealthy, so I’ve switched to fruits like apples and oranges.

제안: Cần trả lời rõ ràng, dùng câu khẳng định/ phủ định chính xác và cung cấp lí do cụ thể với cấu trúc mạch lạc. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (subject-verb agreement, tense) và dùng liên từ để nối ý (e.g. "because", "so"). Tránh diễn đạt lặp và không hoàn chỉnh như "it is" hay "cut out it almost I can do".

예시: No, I don’t think snacks are healthy because many of them are fried and contain a lot of oil and salt. Therefore, I try to avoid them as much as possible.

제안: Sắp xếp câu theo cấu trúc quá khứ rõ ràng (topic sentence + supporting detail). Loại bỏ lặp lời và sai thì, dùng thì quá khứ cho hành động trong quá khứ (e.g. "used to" + base verb). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất hoặc cảm xúc để phong phú nội dung.

예시: Yes, I did. I used to eat snacks after coming home from school and often watched TV while eating. It felt very relaxing and became a regular habit.

제안: Trình bày rõ ràng món ăn ưa thích bằng cách dùng từ vựng chính xác và câu hoàn chỉnh. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (subject-verb, countable/uncountable), tránh tiếng lắp và câu rời rạc. Mô tả cụ thể hương vị, kết cấu và lý do thích để câu có nội dung hơn.

예시: I really like snacks made from coconut mixed with a little milk because they aren’t too sugary and have a pleasant aroma. I often buy them from a nearby shop.

× I typically a snake almost like free time especially after I go to school, but I recently realized that it is not healthy for me so I replaced it to fruits like apple or orange.

✓ I typically eat a snack in my free time, especially after I get home from school, but I recently realized that it is not healthy for me so I replaced it with fruits like apples or oranges.

The sentence has multiple structure and agreement issues: missing verb 'eat' and wrong noun 'snake' (word choice), incorrect preposition 'like free time' and 'after I go to school' (use 'in my free time' and 'after I get home from school'), wrong preposition 'replaced it to' (use 'replaced it with'), and singular/plural errors for 'apple/orange' (use plurals when speaking generally). Suggestion: ensure subject has a verb, use correct prepositions, use 'replace ... with', and use plural nouns for general examples.

× No, I don't because snacks is a frying food, so it is. It had too much spice and too much oil for your health, for my health, so I cut out it almost I can do.

✓ No, I don't, because snacks are fried foods. They have too much spice and too much oil for my health, so I cut them out as much as I can.

Errors include subject-verb agreement ('snacks is' should be 'snacks are'), wrong adjective 'frying' instead of 'fried', incorrect pronoun reference and object ('cut out it' should be 'cut them out'), wrong tense/auxiliary 'had' should be 'have' when describing general qualities, and awkward phrase 'almost I can do' (should be 'as much as I can'). Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs, use correct adjective forms, use correct object pronouns, and use standard expressions like 'as much as I can'.

× Yes I did I I off I used to eat snack after I go to school or and I easily watch TV while eating snacks.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to eat snacks after I got home from school, and I would often watch TV while eating snacks.

Problems: redundant fillers and disfluencies removed; tense inconsistency 'after I go to school' should be past 'got home' to match 'used to'; 'eat snack' should be plural 'eat snacks'; 'easily watch TV' is incorrect collocation - use 'often' or 'would often'. Suggestion: when describing habitual past actions use 'used to' or 'would' plus past verb forms and make time expressions past.

× I feel that it's really re relaxing in this time so.

✓ I felt that it was really relaxing at that time.

Problems: tense mismatch (talking about past: 'feel' should be 'felt'), extra fragment 're', and awkward time phrase 'in this time' (use 'at that time'). Suggestion: choose consistent past tense for past habits and use correct adverb/adjective forms.

× I really like snacks umm created by coconuts and a bit of milk because it's not too it don't have too much sugar but it it smells is really good so I usually go to buy.

✓ I really like snacks made from coconut and a little milk because they don't have too much sugar and they smell really good, so I usually go to buy them.

Issues: wrong passive/participle 'created by coconuts' should be 'made from coconut', inconsistent pronouns ('it's' vs 'they'), double words and extraneous fillers removed, plural agreement for 'snacks' requires plural verbs/pronouns, and awkward ending 'go to buy' should be 'go to buy them' or 'go and buy them'. Suggestion: ensure noun-pronoun agreement, use correct participles like 'made from', and complete verb phrases when saying you go to purchase something.