Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn nhưng không tự nhiên và hơi lặp; cần mở rộng câu chủ đề, tránh từ “starving” nếu muốn tông lịch sự hơn, và thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại đồ ăn, tình huống) dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

예시: I usually have a small snack around noon when I feel very hungry. For example, I often eat a yogurt or a piece of fruit between lunch and meetings so I stay energized.

제안: Có nhiều lỗi phát âm/lắp từ và cấu trúc rời rạc; ý chưa rõ và thông tin sai ngữ pháp. Nên nói trực tiếp, nêu lý do cụ thể (thành phần, tần suất) và dùng liên từ để giải thích.

예시: I don't think snacks are very healthy because many of them are high in fat and sugar. For instance, eating fried or sugary snacks regularly can lead to weight gain and low energy.

제안: Rất nhiều lặp từ, cấu trúc ngữ pháp sai và thiếu rõ ràng; cần câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, theo sau bằng chi tiết cụ thể (thói quen khi xem TV, tần suất), dùng liên từ để nối ý.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially junk food. For example, I used to eat crisps and candy every evening while watching TV because it helped me relax after homework.

제안: Câu có lỗi ngữ pháp và trật tự từ; dùng thành ngữ không chính xác (“is my cup of tea” theo ngữ cảnh có thể nhưng cấu trúc tổng thể lộn xộn). Nên trả lời rõ món yêu thích, tần suất và hoàn cảnh, tránh lỗi chia động từ.

예시: I like eating potato chips the most. My mom used to buy them for me as a treat, especially on Fridays or at the weekend when I wasn't at school.

× I often eat snacks when I'm starving, especially at noon.

✓ I often eat snacks when I'm hungry, especially at noon.

Use 'hungry' instead of 'starving' in this context; 'starving' is informal exaggeration or may be considered hyperbolic. This is a vocabulary choice related to present tense usage and appropriateness rather than tense grammar. Suggestion: Use 'hungry' for normal hunger; reserve 'starving' for extreme hunger or informal speech.

× For me it's not really healthy because snacks consist of consist of many. Fat.

✓ For me it's not really healthy because snacks contain a lot of fat.

Original has repetition 'consist of consist of' and incorrect noun phrase 'many. Fat'. Use 'contain' or 'consist of' with correct structure and 'a lot of fat' to indicate quantity. Suggestion: Use 'contain a lot of fat' or 'are high in fat'.

× It is obvious that I'm a girl who who like to eat junk food and it helps me relax and I'm every time I'm watching TV, I'm watching.

✓ It is obvious that I'm a girl who likes to eat junk food; it helps me relax, and I always watch it on TV.

Errors: duplicate 'who who', wrong verb form 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with relative pronoun referring to 'girl', incorrect word order 'every time I'm watching TV'. Also sentence fragments and repetition. Suggestion: Use 'who likes' for subject-verb agreement in relative clauses and 'I always watch it on TV' for habitual action.

× Chips is my cup of tea, so my mom off my mom often Friday for me.

✓ Chips are my cup of tea, so my mom often buys them for me on Fridays.

'Chips' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Original also has nonsensical fragment 'off my mom' and wrong word order; use 'my mom often buys them for me on Fridays'. Suggestion: Match verb number to plural noun and use correct verb 'buy' in past/present habitual context with 'on Fridays'.

× Every Saturday or Sunday when I was off school.

✓ I ate them every Saturday or Sunday when I was off school.

Fragment missing main verb; add main clause to complete sentence and keep past habitual tense 'when I was off school'. Suggestion: Combine with a verb like 'I ate them' to make a full sentence.