Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more coherent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating when you snack, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (tense, articles, plurals) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I usually eat snacks when I am studying, especially in the two weeks before an exam. For example, I often have a small biscuit with coffee because it helps me stay focused and relieves some of the stress of revision.

제안: Give a direct opinion, then support with specific reasons and avoid filler sounds. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., calories, nutritious) and linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand'. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

예시: I don't think eating snacks regularly is healthy because many snacks, such as chips, are high in fat and calories. However, eating them occasionally to relieve stress is fine, but daily snacking would be harmful to my health.

제안: Answer directly then add one or two specific memories using past tense. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and avoid unnecessary repetition. Correct verbs and collocations (watch cartoons, choose sweets).

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. Whenever I went to the supermarket with my mother, I would choose candies or Oreos to enjoy while watching cartoons on TV.

제안: State your favorite snack clearly, then describe how you eat it with specific actions and vocabulary. Use correct sequencing words (first, then) and reduce unclear phrases. Keep within 2–4 sentences.

예시: My favorite snack is Oreos. I often twist them apart to eat the white cream first, then dip the biscuit in milk, which I find very satisfying.

× I think now I usually eat stack at the study week so it was around 2-2 week before my exam at the time When I'm whenever I'm study, I will eat the snack while drinking a coffee because it's a way for me to keep on learning and it's a way for me to relieve my stress of the exam especially in the corner of exam.

✓ I think now I usually eat snacks during study weeks, often two weeks before my exams. When I'm studying, I eat snacks while drinking coffee because it's a way for me to keep studying and to relieve my exam stress, especially during the exam period.

Errors: incorrect present participle 'study' instead of 'studying', wrong noun form 'stack' instead of 'snacks', awkward time expressions and articles. Suggestion: Use the present participle 'studying' after 'when I'm' to show continuous action, plural 'snacks', 'during study weeks' to express recurring periods, and 'exam period' or 'during exams' for clarity. Also keep parallel structure 'to keep studying and to relieve'. Use articles appropriately (no 'a' before 'coffee' when speaking generally).

× In my opinion, I don't think it's healthy for me it to eat snack because the snacks such as like the chips, I usually very high in fat and Carolyn so but I would think that MMM once in a while is good, but because it's necessary to relieve the stress. But if it's if I eat it every day, it will we will bring umm umm, no benefit to my health.

✓ In my opinion, I don't think it's healthy for me to eat snacks because snacks such as chips are usually very high in fat and calories, but I think that once in a while is okay because it helps relieve stress. However, if I ate them every day, it would bring no benefit to my health.

Errors: wrong word 'Carolyn' should be 'calories', incorrect word order 'I usually very high in fat' should be 'are usually very high in fat', extra words 'it to' and repetitions. Suggestion: Use correct noun 'calories', proper subject-verb order 'snacks ... are usually', and modal/past conditional 'if I ate them every day, it would' to express hypothetical result. Remove filler sounds and redundant phrases.

× Yes, I enjoy eating snack. When I was young, every time when I went to the supermarket with my mom, I will always choose the candy, Oreos or snack to bring home because I enjoy eating it while washing the cartoon or animations in the TV.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed eating snacks. When I was young, every time I went to the supermarket with my mom, I would always choose candy, Oreos, or other snacks to bring home because I enjoyed eating them while watching cartoons or animated shows on TV.

Errors: tense mismatch: talking about past should use past 'enjoyed' and 'would' instead of 'will'. Wrong verbs 'washing the cartoon' -> 'watching cartoons', plural consistency 'snacks' and 'them'. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout when referring to childhood, use 'would' for habitual past actions, and use 'watching cartoons/animated shows' for correct collocation.

× I love Oreos, they are my favorite snack. Sometimes I expect cooking into hoops scrap shops. The eat the white cream 1st and then dip into dip the biscuits into the milk I and sometimes I just eat it like a normal way and I find a combinations of cream and the chocolates are very satisfying too.

✓ I love Oreos; they are my favorite snack. Sometimes I split them apart, eat the white cream first, and then dip the biscuits into milk. Sometimes I just eat them normally, and I find the combination of cream and chocolate very satisfying too.

Errors: 'a combinations' should be 'the combination' (singular), 'eat the white cream 1st' -> 'eat the white cream first', 'dip into dip the biscuits' -> 'dip the biscuits', 'I expect cooking into hoops scrap shops' is unintelligible and corrected to 'I split them apart'. Suggestion: Use correct plural/singular forms, clear verbs ('split apart', 'dip'), proper word order, and avoid numbers like '1st' in speech transcription—write 'first'.