Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence saying when you usually eat snacks, then give one or two specific reasons or situations using linking words (e.g. "because", "so", "for example"). Avoid filler sounds ("mmm") and pronunciation errors ("snakes" → "snacks").

예시: I don't eat snacks very often nowadays because I'm trying to stay fit. For example, I usually only have a small snack after exercising or when I'm very hungry between meals.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with a specific reason and a short example. Use linking words like "because" and avoid trailing off. Expand slightly (1–3 supporting details) to make your answer complete.

예시: I don't think most snacks are very healthy because they usually lack nutrients and contain a lot of sugar. For example, packaged chips and sweets fill you up but don't provide vitamins or protein.

제안: Answer the question directly about your own childhood rather than generalising. Use a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I used to..." or "No, I rarely..."), then give one or two specific examples or reasons. Correct pronunciation and avoid unclear phrases like "recharging our."

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks as a child because my parents would give me biscuits and fruit after school. For instance, I remember having a piece of fruit and a cookie while doing homework.

제안: Start with a clear statement of your preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words ("because", "compared to") and avoid repetition and pronunciation errors. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer eating fresh fruits because, compared to other snacks, they have more vitamins and fiber. For example, I often choose an apple or a banana because they are tasty and keep me full longer.

× MMM to be honest I'm not often eating snakes because I need to keep fit and I don't want to make my weights higher and also I only eat snacks when.

✓ MMM, to be honest, I don't often eat snacks because I need to keep fit and I don't want to gain weight, and I only eat snacks occasionally.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'I'm not often eating' is incorrect for habitual action; use simple present 'I don't often eat' (Grammar Problem Type 27 and 6). Word choice and collocation: 'make my weights higher' is unnatural; correct phrase is 'gain weight'. Sentence fragment: original ends with 'when' without completing clause, so change to 'occasionally' to complete thought. Suggestion: use simple present for routines, choose common collocations (gain weight), and avoid sentence fragments.

× Actually, I think it's not very healthy. The snacks often don't have so many nutrients and.

✓ Actually, I think it's not very healthy. Snacks often don't have many nutrients.

Article and count expression: 'The snacks' unnecessarily definite; use plural 'Snacks' for general statement (Grammar Problem Type 22). Word choice: 'so many nutrients' is acceptable but 'many nutrients' is more natural. Sentence fragment: original ends with 'and' incomplete; remove trailing conjunction to complete sentence. Suggestion: avoid trailing conjunctions and use appropriate articles for generalizations.

× I'm sure I think that there is no younger people or children don't like snakes.

✓ I'm sure young people and children all like snacks.

Tense and structure: original mixes 'there is no younger people' (singular 'is' with plural 'people') and a negation with 'don't like' causing confusion (Grammar Problem Type 5 and 27). Also word choice: 'snakes' is a misspelling of 'snacks'. Rewritten as affirmative generalization: 'young people and children all like snacks.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement ('there are' for plural), avoid double negatives, and correct vocabulary.

× I'd say the snakes often help us relieve ourselves and recharging our.

✓ I'd say snacks often help us relieve stress and recharge our energy.

Verb form: 'recharging' after 'and' should mirror the verb 'relieve' so use base form 'recharge' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Word choice and collocation: 'relieve ourselves' is vague; 'relieve stress' is clearer. 'Our' needed an object; 'energy' completes 'recharge our energy.' Also 'snakes' should be 'snacks.' Suggestion: use parallel verb forms after conjunctions and provide clear objects for pronouns.

× I love fruits because I think to compare with other other snakes they are they have more nutrients and they they also testy and help me.

✓ I love fruit because, compared with other snacks, it has more nutrients, tastes better, and helps me.

Plural/adjective use and word choice: 'fruits' can be 'fruit' for general preference; 'to compare with' should be 'compared with' (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 6). Repetition and redundancy: remove duplicate words 'other other' and 'they are they have' and 'they they.' Spelling: 'testy' should be 'tasty.' Pronoun agreement: refer to 'fruit' with singular 'it' and ensure verbs agree ('has' not 'have'). Suggestion: reduce repetition, use correct participle 'compared,' correct spelling, and ensure subject-verb agreement when switching singular/plural.