Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid articles and verb form mistakes, use linking words for clarity. Add one specific example and keep within 3–4 sentences. For example, say when exactly (mid-morning, afternoon) and what you eat to explain the effect.

예시: I usually have a snack during my mid-morning or mid-afternoon break. For example, I often eat a banana or a handful of almonds because they give me a quick energy boost. As a result, I can concentrate better when I return to work.

제안: Avoid overgeneralizing and improve grammar and cohesion. Start with a clear opinion, then explain with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Reduce repetition and correct tense and article errors.

예시: Yes, I think healthy snacks can be good for most people because they prevent energy crashes. For example, I usually eat fruit or a small handful of nuts with water, which helps me stay energized and focused throughout the afternoon.

제안: Improve past-tense accuracy and coherence. Begin with a clear past-time statement, then give specific examples and link them logically. Correct verbs and articles, and avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: Yes, I ate snacks often when I was young. For example, after school sports like football or running events my father would reward me with a snack when I did well, which made those moments special.

제안: Be concise and use natural word order. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific examples with brief reasons using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (articles, prepositions, contractions).

예시: I prefer healthy snacks such as fruits and nuts. For example, I often bring bananas or pineapple slices because they are easy to carry, and I keep a small pack of mixed nuts in my bag for quick energy.

× Actually I usually take a snacks after break my work or study.

✓ Actually I usually have a snack after a break from my work or study.

Use 'have' or 'eat' with 'a snack' rather than 'take a snacks'. 'Snacks' is plural but context needs singular 'a snack' or plural with no article. Also use article 'a' before 'break' and the preposition 'from' after 'break' to show what you paused. Suggestion: 'I usually have a snack after a break from work.'

× It helps me to focus my study or work because after take snack I feel more comfortable and get energy.

✓ It helps me focus on my studies or work because after taking a snack I feel more comfortable and get more energy.

Use 'focus on' plus plural 'studies' for general activity. Use gerund 'taking' after 'after'. Add 'a' before 'snack'. 'Get energy' is acceptable but 'get more energy' is clearer. Also drop unnecessary 'to' after 'helps me'.

× Yes, it's very healthy for everyone.

✓ Yes, it's generally healthy for most people.

The original sentence is grammatically possible but overly absolute. 'It's very healthy for everyone' is a semantic issue rather than grammar; I provide a natural alternative. Use 'generally' and 'most people' to qualify the statement.

× After taking snacks people get energy and focus on their work.

✓ After taking snacks, people get energy and can focus on their work.

Add a comma after the introductory phrase. The sentence is mostly correct; adding 'can' clarifies ability. Also 'taking snacks' is acceptable, but 'having snacks' is a natural alternative.

× I take a snack like fruits sometimes nuts and and little water.

✓ I have snacks like fruit, sometimes nuts, and a little water.

Use 'fruit' as an uncountable noun for types of fruit. Remove duplicate 'and'. Use 'a little water' with the article 'a'. Use commas to separate items. Alternatively 'I eat fruits' requires plural form with 'eat'.

× It will helpful for my health.

✓ It will be helpful for my health.

The adjective 'helpful' needs the linking verb 'be' in future tense: 'will be helpful'. Without 'be' the sentence lacks a proper verb form.

× Yes, I often take snacks when I was young.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young.

Use past tense 'ate' to match 'was young'. 'Often' can remain. 'Take' is present tense and inconsistent with 'was'.

× Sometimes I participated in school competition like football, cricket and sometimes marathon running.

✓ Sometimes I participated in school competitions such as football and cricket, and sometimes I ran in marathons.

Use plural 'competitions' and 'such as' to introduce examples. 'Marathon running' is awkward; use 'ran in marathons' or 'marathon races'. Maintain parallel structure and avoid repeating 'sometimes' awkwardly.

× My father give me a snacks when I achieve.

✓ My father gave me snacks when I achieved something.

Use past tense 'gave' to match past context. 'a snacks' is wrong: use 'snacks' (plural) or 'a snack' (singular). 'When I achieve' should be past 'when I achieved something' or 'when I succeeded'. Provide 'something' to complete the clause.

× I like healthy snacks like fruits and nuts.

✓ I like healthy snacks such as fruit and nuts.

Use 'such as' or 'like' both acceptable; 'fruit' as a non-count noun is more natural than 'fruits' here. If using 'like' keep plural 'fruits' but 'such as' + 'fruit' is clearer.

× I like especially in fruits, bananas and pineapples because it's very easy to carry and nuts I always take in my bag.

✓ I especially like fruits such as bananas and pineapples because they are very easy to carry, and I always keep nuts in my bag.

'I like especially in fruits' is incorrect word order; place 'especially' before the object. Use 'such as' to introduce examples. 'It's' refers to singular; use 'they are' to refer to plural 'bananas and pineapples'. 'Nuts I always take in my bag' is awkward; use 'I always keep nuts in my bag'.