Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar (use simple present and prepositions), and add a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I usually eat snacks around midnight because I often don't eat enough at dinner. For example, my girlfriend and I often share a packet of chips and relax together before going to bed.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: state a clear opinion, explain reasons with linking words, and avoid unclear phrases. Use correct collocations (e.g., 'put it into meals', 'in the middle of the night').

예시: I don't think late-night snacking is healthy because it can disturb digestion and sleep. Ideally, snacks should be part of breakfast, lunch or dinner, but if I'm hungry in the middle of the night I sometimes have a small, light snack.

제안: Use correct past tense, pronounce or avoid fillers, and organise answer with one topic sentence plus specific examples. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'however'.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child. For example, my mother usually gave me yogurt as a healthy snack, and occasionally we had Coke to celebrate special occasions.

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition. Use plural/singular correctly, remove fillers, and combine reasons with linking words. Give one clear recent example with correct grammar.

예시: I prefer chips at midnight because they are crispy, crunchy and very flavorful. For instance, last night I had truffle-flavored chips; they were expensive but the taste was amazing.

× I usually eat snacks during midnight where I get hungry because I don't eat enough during dinner and I will eat with my girlfriend.

✓ I usually eat snacks at midnight when I get hungry because I don't eat enough at dinner, and I eat with my girlfriend.

Use 'at midnight' not 'during midnight' (preposition error). 'When' is correct for time clauses rather than 'where' (incorrect conjunction/preposition). Maintain present simple 'I eat' rather than mixing with 'will' which implies future; use consistent habitual present tense. Also use 'at dinner' for the meal time.

× I will eat chips together and we'll have a relaxing time before going to bed.

✓ We eat chips together and have a relaxing time before going to bed.

The sentence describes a habitual action, so present simple is appropriate rather than future 'will'. Also 'we'll have' should be 'have' to match habitual context.

× It's not healthy to eat snacks at all.

✓ It is not healthy to eat snacks at all.

Contraction 'It's' is acceptable in speech, but for clear written correction expand to 'It is'. No grammatical error beyond register; kept present simple as general truth.

× I believe the healthiest way to its next is put it in the breakfast, lunch or dinner.

✓ I believe the healthiest way to eat them is to include snacks in breakfast, lunch, or dinner.

Original has unclear structure and wrong pronoun 'its'. Use 'eat them' or 'have them' and 'include in' to express putting snacks into main meals. Use the plural 'snacks' and articles: 'breakfast, lunch, or dinner' without 'the'.

× However, sometimes we're just hungry in middle of the night and and I would like to eat something at that moment.

✓ However, sometimes we are just hungry in the middle of the night, and I want to eat something at that time.

Use 'in the middle of the night' (add 'the'). Remove duplicate 'and and'. Use present simple 'I want' for habitual or general present rather than 'would like' which is more conditional/polite; 'at that time' is clearer than 'at that moment' for this context.

× I often eat snacks when I was young, my mother always offer me some yogurt, which is a healthy option for the snacks and some Coke, which uh, although it's unhealthy, occasionally, uh, I will have Coke if we have something to celebrate.

✓ I often ate snacks when I was young. My mother always offered me some yogurt, which was a healthy option, and sometimes we had Coke; although it is unhealthy, I occasionally had Coke if we were celebrating.

Mixing past and present is inconsistent. Use past tense 'ate', 'offered', 'had' because speaking about childhood. 'Occasionally' placement adjusted. Use 'which was a healthy option' to match past. Use full sentences to improve clarity.

× I like to have chips for during midnight because it's crispy, it's crunchy and it's flavorful.

✓ I like to have chips at midnight because they are crispy, crunchy, and flavorful.

Use 'at midnight' not 'for during midnight'. 'Chips' is plural, so use 'they are' not 'it is'. Remove redundant 'it's' repetitions and use parallel adjectives.

× Yesterday we, I just had a truffle flavored, uh, chips.

✓ Yesterday I had truffle-flavored chips.

Simplify structure: 'I had' is past simple correct for yesterday. Use hyphenated adjective 'truffle-flavored' before the noun 'chips'. Remove unnecessary 'we' and filler words.

× Uh, it's not cheap. It's very expensive. However, it's the flavor is incredible and.

✓ They were not cheap; they were very expensive. However, the flavor was incredible.

Match past tense 'were' because the purchase happened yesterday. Remove redundant 'it's the flavor is' which is ungrammatical; use 'the flavor was incredible'. Complete the sentence and remove trailing 'and.'