Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で簡潔ですが、表現がやや繰り返しで自然さに欠けます。より自然で効果的な表現を使い、具体的な例を加えると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can stay focused on tasks without getting frustrated, even when they take a long time to complete.

제안: 文法の誤りと不自然な表現が目立ちます。より明確で自然な英語を使い、具体的な状況を説明すると良いでしょう。

예시: I feel impatient when there are distractions around me, such as video games or friends, because they make it hard for me to concentrate on my tasks.

제안: 文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。簡潔で正確な表現を心がけ、具体的な感情や理由を述べると良いでしょう。

예시: I don't mind doing something for a long time because I can maintain my concentration and stay motivated throughout.

제안: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、内容がやや不明瞭です。より明確で自然な表現を使い、具体的な理由を述べると良いでしょう。

예시: As a university student, I need to be patient because studying for exams requires long hours of concentration on various subjects.

제안: 内容が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。過去と現在の比較を明確にし、具体的な経験を述べると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I can focus better and sit still for longer periods during classes.

× I can keep focusing on what I should do.

✓ I can keep focus on what I should do.

'Keep' is followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'keep focusing' should be 'keep focus'.

× If there are many disruptors on this, for example if there are many video games and friends are there, I cannot keep focusing on what should I do and it will distract me.

✓ If there are many distractions, for example many video games and friends, I cannot keep focusing on what I should do and they will distract me.

'Disruptors' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'distractions'. Also, 'friends are there' is awkward; better to say 'friends'. 'What should I do' should be 'what I should do' for correct word order. 'It will distract me' should be 'they will distract me' to agree with plural subject.

× I cannot keep focusing on what should I do and it will distract me.

✓ I cannot keep focusing on what I should do and it will distract me.

In indirect questions or statements, the word order should be subject + verb, not auxiliary + subject. So 'what should I do' should be 'what I should do'.

× You're doing something for a long time is literally my thing for me, so I I'll be able to keep stay concentrating for a long time.

✓ Doing something for a long time is literally my thing, so I'll be able to keep concentrating for a long time.

The original sentence has redundant and incorrect phrases like 'You're doing' and 'keep stay concentrating'. The corrected sentence removes unnecessary words and uses 'keep concentrating' correctly.

× I I'll be able to keep stay concentrating for a long time.

✓ I'll be able to keep concentrating for a long time.

'Keep' should be followed by the base verb or '-ing' form, but not 'stay concentrating'. 'Keep stay concentrating' is incorrect; it should be 'keep concentrating'.

× I am a university student so as a study it is probably required their concentrating for a long time to study.

✓ I am a university student, so studying probably requires concentrating for a long time.

'As a study' is incorrect; it should be 'studying'. 'Their concentrating' is incorrect pronoun usage; it should be 'concentrating' as a gerund subject or object.

× So I have to prepare for the examination.

✓ So I have to prepare for examinations.

'The examination' is singular and specific; 'examinations' is more natural in this context referring to multiple subjects.

× So it is required to keep concentrating a lot of subjects.

✓ So it is required to keep concentrating on many subjects.

'Concentrating a lot of subjects' is incorrect; the verb 'concentrate' requires the preposition 'on'. Also, 'a lot of' is less formal than 'many' in this context.

× Yes, I am a patient person compared to when I was in childhood.

✓ Yes, I am a more patient person compared to when I was a child.

'Compared to when I was in childhood' is awkward; 'compared to when I was a child' is correct. Also, 'more patient' is needed for comparison.

× When I was 60 years old.

✓ When I was a child.

The sentence 'When I was 60 years old' contradicts the context of childhood. It should be 'When I was a child'.

× I cannot keep sitting on the chair while the classroom.

✓ I could not keep sitting on the chair in the classroom.

'While the classroom' is incorrect; 'in the classroom' is correct. Also, past tense 'could not' fits the context better.

× So I am very good from there.

✓ So I have improved a lot since then.

'I am very good from there' is ungrammatical and unclear. The intended meaning is better expressed as 'I have improved a lot since then.'