Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Are you a patient person?
수험생
I would like to call myself as a patient person depending on situations. There are situations where I would like to help someone who is really in need. I would be completely patient with them. At the same time, there are situations where people who I have helped before try to use me or try to push me off my limits. So in that situation, I would call myself as an impatient person.
시험관
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
수험생
Ignorance and avoidance are the two keen things that really make me impatient. When someone doesn't respect the others boundaries or their time, that to me is impatient.
시험관
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
수험생
As long as there is something that I really enjoy doing, I'm really happy to put in my everything, my time, my efforts to to complete the task with quality and efficiency.
시험관
Does your job require you to be patient?
수험생
I come from the events field, which means it's a service background and we here deal with a lot of clients from different countries and of different nature. So to deal with them and to provide what they actually require, I need to be patient. So I'm well trained on being patient and being calm with the people as long as they are able to cooperate with us.
시험관
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
수험생
I would definitely say a yes. I am more patient as life has taught me a lot. I was a very impatient child. I never got what I really wanted in life so I always felt that I really wanted to accomplish a lot. But now that I have started earning on my own, I know what it takes to be patient and what all you can gain when you are patient.
평가
총점
Part 1
Are you a patient person?
점수: 75.0제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and unnecessary phrases like "I would like to call myself as". Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
예시: I consider myself a patient person in most situations, especially when helping those in need. However, if people take advantage of my kindness, I tend to lose patience.
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
점수: 70.0제안: Improve clarity by choosing more precise vocabulary and avoid awkward phrases like "keen things". Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.
예시: I feel impatient mainly when people show ignorance or avoid responsibilities. For instance, when someone disrespects others' boundaries or wastes their time, it really frustrates me.
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
점수: 80.0제안: Your answer is clear but could be more natural by avoiding repetition and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
예시: If I enjoy the task, I am happy to invest my time and effort to complete it efficiently and with good quality.
Does your job require you to be patient?
점수: 78.0제안: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.
예시: I work in the events industry, which involves serving diverse clients. Therefore, I need to be patient and calm to understand and meet their needs effectively, especially when they cooperate.
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
점수: 82.0제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by making it more concise and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
예시: Yes, I am definitely more patient now. As a child, I was impatient because I didn't get what I wanted. However, earning my own living has taught me the value of patience and its rewards.
문법
× I would like to call myself as a patient person depending on situations.
✓ I would like to call myself a patient person depending on situations.
The phrase 'call myself as' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'call myself' without 'as'. The preposition 'as' is unnecessary here and should be omitted.
× So in that situation, I would call myself as an impatient person.
✓ So in that situation, I would call myself an impatient person.
Similar to the previous sentence, 'call myself as' is incorrect. The correct form is 'call myself' without 'as'.
× When someone doesn't respect the others boundaries or their time, that to me is impatient.
✓ When someone doesn't respect others' boundaries or their time, that to me is impatience.
The phrase 'the others boundaries' is incorrect. It should be 'others' boundaries' with the possessive apostrophe. Also, 'that to me is impatient' is incorrect because 'impatient' is an adjective; the noun 'impatience' fits better here.
× I come from the events field, which means it's a service background and we here deal with a lot of clients from different countries and of different nature.
✓ I come from the events field, which means it's a service background and we here deal with a lot of clients from different countries and of different natures.
The phrase 'of different nature' should be pluralized to 'of different natures' to agree with 'clients' and indicate variety.
× So I'm well trained on being patient and being calm with the people as long as they are able to cooperate with us.
✓ So I'm well trained in being patient and being calm with people as long as they are able to cooperate with us.
The correct preposition after 'trained' is 'in', not 'on'. Also, 'the people' is better as 'people' in this context.
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