Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'who have patience' nên là 'who has patience'. Bạn cũng nên sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn như 'patient' thay vì 'patience' trong trường hợp này. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ, đồng thời nên thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I am not a very patient person because I tend to get angry easily and struggle to control my emotions. However, I hope to improve my patience in the future by practicing mindfulness and self-control.

제안: Bạn cần cải thiện cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, 'reading aisles' không rõ nghĩa, có thể bạn muốn nói 'reading long passages'. Ngoài ra, câu có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc không chính xác, cần sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

예시: I feel impatient when I have to read long passages because it requires a lot of concentration and patience, which I sometimes find difficult to maintain.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'I will really excited' nên là 'I will be really excited'. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn với câu chủ đề và câu bổ sung, sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ như 'boring' nhiều lần.

예시: It depends on the activity. If I enjoy it, I feel excited and can do it for a long time without getting bored. However, if I don't like it, I usually lose interest quickly and feel bored.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, cần dùng từ đúng như 'patient' thay vì 'patient person' lặp lại. Hãy cố gắng trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể.

예시: Yes, my studies require me to be patient because I have to learn many rules and read a lot of materials, which can be challenging but helps me improve my patience.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý đến thì động từ và ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'when I were a child' nên là 'when I was a child'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn với câu chủ đề và câu bổ sung, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

예시: I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child. As a child, I used to get angry easily and wanted everything immediately, but now I can wait calmly and control my emotions better.

× Well, I have to say that I'm not the person who have patience because I feel that I easily to be angry and I cannot handle my feeling.

✓ Well, I have to say that I'm not the person who has patience because I feel that I easily get angry and I cannot handle my feelings.

The relative clause 'who have patience' requires the verb to agree with the singular subject 'person', so 'have' should be 'has'. Also, 'I easily to be angry' is incorrect; it should be 'I easily get angry' to use the correct verb form. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to refer to emotions in general.

× I feel that I easily to be angry and I cannot handle my feeling.

✓ I feel that I easily get angry and I cannot handle my feelings.

The phrase 'easily to be angry' is incorrect; the verb 'get' should be used without 'to' to express becoming angry. Also, 'handle my feeling' should be 'handle my feelings' to correctly refer to emotions.

× So I think in the future if I have a chance I will learn how to be a patient person.

✓ So I think in the future, if I have a chance, I will learn how to be a patient person.

Adding commas after introductory phrases improves clarity. The modal verb usage 'will learn' is correct here.

× I don't know that I can say this thing, but I feel like reading aisles is really makes me feel impatient because I have to read a long passage with my own patient so I cannot read all of that paragraph.

✓ I don't know if I can say this, but I feel like reading aisles really makes me feel impatient because I have to read a long passage with my own patience, so I cannot read all of that paragraph.

The phrase 'reading aisles is really makes' has redundant verbs; 'is' should be removed to agree with the singular subject 'reading aisles'. 'My own patient' should be 'my own patience' as 'patience' is a noun. Also, 'that paragraph' is better than 'all of that paragraph'.

× I have to read a long passage with my own patient so I cannot read all of that paragraph.

✓ I have to read a long passage with my own patience, so I cannot read all of that paragraph.

The word 'patient' is an adjective or noun meaning a person receiving medical care; the correct noun here is 'patience' meaning the ability to wait calmly.

× Well, I think it depends on what are the things.

✓ Well, I think it depends on what the things are.

In indirect questions, the word order should be subject + verb, not verb + subject. So 'what are the things' should be 'what the things are'.

× If it's my favorite thing, I will really excited to do it for a long time and I will not feel boring.

✓ If it's my favorite thing, I will be really excited to do it for a long time and I will not feel bored.

'Really excited' needs the verb 'be' to form 'will be really excited'. Also, 'feel boring' is incorrect; it should be 'feel bored' because 'boring' describes something that causes boredom, while 'bored' describes the feeling.

× But if it's not my favorite, I always feel boring the first time I do it.

✓ But if it's not my favorite, I always feel bored the first time I do it.

Same as above, 'feel boring' should be 'feel bored' to correctly express the feeling.

× I can say your study require me learn how to be a patient, patient person like I have to because I I learn a lot.

✓ I can say your study requires me to learn how to be a patient person because I learn a lot.

The subject 'your study' is singular, so the verb should be 'requires'. Also, 'require me learn' should be 'requires me to learn' to use the correct infinitive form. The repeated 'patient' is redundant and 'like I have to' is unnecessary.

× So I have to read a lot of rules.

✓ So I have to read a lot of rules.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× So it's I think it's evoke my my patient that to gain when I love.

✓ So I think it evokes my patience to improve when I love.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Evoke' should be 'evokes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'My patient' should be 'my patience'. The phrase 'that to gain when I love' is unclear; 'to improve when I love' is a possible correction but the meaning remains ambiguous.

× I think I am more patient when I grow up because when I were a child I always want to do everything I want like I easily angry.

✓ I think I am more patient now that I have grown up because when I was a child I always wanted to do everything I wanted and I easily got angry.

The past tense of 'grow' is 'grew' or the present perfect 'have grown up' to indicate completed action. 'Were' should be 'was' for singular subject 'I'. 'Want' should be 'wanted' to match past tense. 'Easily angry' should be 'easily got angry' to use correct verb form.

× I always feel that I have to do something but when I grow up I feel like I easily patient.

✓ I always felt that I had to do something, but now that I have grown up, I feel like I am more patient.

The tense should be consistent; past tense 'felt' and 'had' for past time. 'I feel like I easily patient' is incorrect; it should be 'I feel like I am more patient' to use correct verb and adjective.