Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하게 만들고, 명확한 이유와 구체적인 예시를 추가하여 답변을 풍부하게 하세요.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I always complete my chores and exercises thoroughly, even if they take a long time.

제안: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 답하지 않고 의미가 불분명합니다. 인내심을 잃게 만드는 상황을 구체적으로 설명하고, 논리적으로 연결된 문장을 사용하세요.

예시: I feel impatient when my plans don't go as expected, especially if unexpected problems arise that delay my progress.

제안: 답변이 불명확하고 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 감정을 명확히 표현하고, 어떻게 대처하는지 구체적으로 설명하세요.

예시: I sometimes feel stressed when I have to work on something for a long time, but I usually divide the task into smaller parts to manage it better.

제안: 문법과 표현이 부자연스럽고 명확하지 않습니다. 학생으로서 인내심이 필요한 상황을 구체적으로 설명하고, 자연스러운 문장으로 답변하세요.

예시: Actually, as a student, I need to be patient when studying difficult subjects or preparing for exams.

제안: 답변이 비교적 명확하지만, 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고 어휘 선택이 제한적입니다. 감정 변화와 인내심 향상에 대해 더 자연스럽고 구체적으로 설명하세요.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to get angry easily and even throw toys, but now I can control my emotions and stay calm in difficult situations.

× Yes I am, because when I do chores or exercise I usually finish all all things.

✓ Yes I am, because when I do chores or exercise I usually finish all the things.

The phrase 'all all things' is incorrect due to repetition and missing article. It should be 'all the things' to correctly refer to the tasks completed. This is a singular/plural and article usage issue.

× That I should do so.

✓ That I should do.

The sentence 'That I should do so.' is incomplete and awkward. Removing 'so' makes it a clearer statement. This is a sentence structure error.

× My plans are that dumb.

✓ My plans are that bad.

Using 'dumb' to describe plans is informal and inappropriate here. 'Bad' is a more suitable adjective. This is an incorrect use of adjectives.

× I sometimes feel compressed when I have to do something for a long time, but.

✓ I sometimes feel compressed when I have to do something for a long time.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'but' without completing the thought, making it incomplete. Removing 'but' corrects the sentence structure.

× Barstow and I divide them.

✓ I divide them into parts.

The original sentence is unclear and possibly contains a typo ('Barstow'). Clarifying the action improves sentence structure.

× And I do. So.

✓ So, I do that.

The sentence fragments 'And I do. So.' are incomplete and unclear. Combining them into a complete sentence improves clarity.

× Actually I'm a student so there are much jobs needed to be patient about the study.

✓ Actually I'm a student so there are many jobs that require patience in studying.

'Much jobs' is incorrect; 'many jobs' is correct for countable nouns. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Is needed.

✓ It is needed.

The sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'It' corrects the sentence structure.

× When I was so charged I was less patient.

✓ When I was so angry I was less patient.

'Charged' is incorrect in this context; 'angry' is the appropriate adjective to describe emotion.

× But nowadays I am more patient and I can relax my feelings.

✓ But nowadays I am more patient and I can control my feelings.

'Relax my feelings' is an incorrect phrase. 'Control my feelings' is more appropriate and clear.