Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and shows your experience, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid redundancy such as "pay a lot of patience" which is not natural English. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because my work as a social worker requires me to listen carefully and show compassion to my clients. This experience has helped me develop greater understanding and patience.

제안: Your answer explains the situation well but is a bit wordy and ends abruptly. Try to avoid filler words and complete your thoughts fully. Use linking words to connect your ideas and express your feelings more naturally.

예시: I feel impatient when I have to wait a long time for public transportation because after work, I just want to go home, rest well, and spend quality time with my family. Delays make this difficult and frustrating.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, with hesitation and unfinished sentences. Try to organize your ideas clearly, avoid filler words, and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to contrast different examples and express your opinion more effectively.

예시: I don't mind spending a long time on important tasks like writing research essays or project proposals because they require careful work. However, for simple daily activities like brushing my teeth or mopping the floor, I prefer to finish quickly.

제안: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but some sentences are a bit long and could be simplified. Use linking words like "because" and "therefore" effectively, but avoid repeating similar phrases. Try to use more natural expressions.

예시: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I need to listen carefully to clients and understand their needs and emotions at the same time. Therefore, my work has helped me become more patient.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat repetitive and contains minor errors (e.g., "patients skills" should be "patience skills"). Try to be more concise and use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because my work as a social worker requires me to listen carefully and understand others. This has helped me improve my patience and listening skills.

× I do really need to pay a lot of patience and care for my clients in my workplace.

✓ I really need to be patient and care for my clients in my workplace.

The phrase 'pay a lot of patience' is incorrect because 'patience' is a noun and cannot be 'paid'. Instead, use the adjective 'patient' with the verb 'be' to express the quality needed. Also, 'do really need' is redundant; 'really need' suffices.

× This also trains my understanding and compassion for their needs and also condition in order to help with them.

✓ This also trains my understanding and compassion for their needs and conditions in order to help them.

The preposition 'with' after 'help' is unnecessary; 'help' is directly followed by the object. Also, 'condition' should be plural 'conditions' to match 'needs' and the context.

× So when there are delays.

✓ So when there are delays, I feel impatient.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb or clause. It should be connected to the previous sentence or completed to form a full sentence.

× I do believe we need more time to write a good ones, right?

✓ I do believe we need more time to write good ones, right?

The phrase 'a good ones' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'ones'. Removing 'a' corrects the plural form.

× I do believe we need more time to write a good ones, right?

✓ I do believe we need more time to write good ones, right?

The phrase 'a good ones' is incorrect because 'ones' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. The article should be removed to correct the plural form.

× Yes, my job required me to be very patient because we have to listen clearly to what our clients respond to us and we have to analyse our clients needs while we have to address their emotions simultaneously.

✓ Yes, my job requires me to be very patient because we have to listen clearly to what our clients say to us and we have to analyse our clients' needs while addressing their emotions simultaneously.

The verb 'required' should be present tense 'requires' to match the ongoing nature of the job. Also, 'respond to us' is better expressed as 'say to us' for clarity. 'Clients needs' needs an apostrophe to show possession: 'clients' needs'. The phrase 'while we have to address' is better as 'while addressing' to avoid repetition.

× So this really helps me to train myself and to strengthen my patients skills and listening skills on them.

✓ So this really helps me to train myself and to strengthen my patience skills and listening skills with them.

The word 'patients' is incorrect; it should be 'patience' (noun). Also, 'listening skills on them' is better expressed as 'listening skills with them' or simply 'listening skills'.