Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. For example, explain briefly why you are not patient and give a specific reason.

예시: I am not a very patient person because my busy routine often makes me feel rushed. For instance, when I have many tasks to complete quickly, I tend to become impatient.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat disorganised and contains grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly and provide specific examples. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and improve sentence structure.

예시: I feel impatient when I am late for appointments because I worry about being late. Also, when I work on tasks with uncertain outcomes, I get stressed and frustrated because I want to know the results quickly.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to improve coherence and correct grammar, such as 'therefore' or 'so'. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your ideas.

예시: I find it difficult to concentrate on tasks that take a long time, which makes me frustrated and less patient. Therefore, I take long breaks to stay active and maintain my interest.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and better sentence structure. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, my job demands a great deal of patience and concentration. When I perform treatments I enjoy, the duration doesn't bother me. However, tasks I dislike cause me frustration.

제안: Your answer is thoughtful and relevant but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid informal expressions like 'cause'.

예시: Unfortunately, I am less patient now than when I was a child. However, I try to be patient around my children because I don't want them to sense the frustration I sometimes feel from work or other adult stresses.

× I am not a patient person and I would like a lot to be 1, but my routine sometimes is very happy and that accelerates me to be a bit more rushy person and as well impatience in certain tasks.

✓ I am not a patient person and I would really like to be one, but my routine is sometimes very busy and that makes me a bit more rushed and also impatient in certain tasks.

The original sentence uses 'happy' incorrectly to describe a routine; 'busy' is the appropriate adjective. 'Rushy' is not a correct adjective; 'rushed' should be used. 'Impatience' is a noun, but an adjective 'impatient' fits better here. Also, 'I would like a lot to be 1' is awkward; 'I would really like to be one' is correct.

× If I am late to go somewhere I feel impatient and as well if I am working for something which I don't know which result I'm gonna get and give me so much stress and frustration because I need to know as soon as possible what result will have and.

✓ If I am late to go somewhere, I feel impatient, and also if I am working on something and don't know what result I will get, it gives me so much stress and frustration because I need to know as soon as possible what the result will be.

The sentence has pronoun and sentence structure issues. 'Working for something' should be 'working on something'. 'Which result I'm gonna get' is informal and unclear; 'what result I will get' is better. 'Give me' should be 'it gives me' to refer to the situation. The sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring for clarity.

× This is another problem which I have is doing something for a long time because I can't concentrate that much and that gives me so much frustration and reduces my patience and interest in that task.

✓ Another problem I have is doing something for a long time because I can't concentrate that much, and that gives me so much frustration and reduces my patience and interest in that task.

The phrase 'This is another problem which I have is' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'Another problem I have is'. The rest of the sentence is correct in preposition use.

× So I try to do a big breaks and that keeps me more active.

✓ So I try to take big breaks and that keeps me more active.

'Do a big breaks' is incorrect; 'take big breaks' is the correct collocation. Also, 'a' should not be used before the plural 'breaks'.

× So usually when I do treatments which I enjoy, doesn't matter how long they are.

✓ So usually when I do treatments which I enjoy, it doesn't matter how long they are.

The sentence lacks a subject for the verb 'doesn't matter'. Adding 'it' as the subject corrects the sentence and ensures subject-verb agreement.

× For me is is easy but if I am doing task which I don't prefer a lot, that gives me so much frustration.

✓ For me, it is easy, but if I am doing a task which I don't prefer much, that gives me so much frustration.

'For me is is easy' is missing the subject 'it' and has a repeated 'is'. 'Doing task' needs an article 'a task'. 'Don't prefer a lot' is awkward; 'don't prefer much' is better.

× Unfortunately, it's the opposite. However, I have realized that I am patient only when I have to be around my kids 'cause I don't want them to feel my frustration which can be accumulated during the work or maybe other stressful things which adults experience.

✓ Unfortunately, it's the opposite. However, I have realised that I am patient only when I have to be around my kids because I don't want them to feel my frustration, which can accumulate during work or other stressful things that adults experience.

'Cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate. 'Can be accumulated' is better as 'can accumulate'. 'During the work' should be 'during work'. 'Which adults experience' is better as 'that adults experience' for restrictive clauses.