Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应更自然流畅，避免语法错误和冗余。例如，“by practicing how to play the piano and the calligraphy”表达不够地道，应简化为“by practicing piano and calligraphy”。

예시: When I was a child, I wasn't very patient, but practicing piano and calligraphy has helped me become much more patient over time.

제안: 回答不够连贯，表达不完整且有语法错误。应避免句子残缺，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: I feel impatient when I have to do boring tasks or things that don't interest me because they make time seem to pass slowly.

제안: 表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。应直接回答问题并用连接词组织句子，使意思明确。

예시: At first, I might feel impatient, but if I keep going and see progress, I usually start to enjoy the task and feel more patient.

제안: 回答较好，但句子稍显冗长。可以简化表达并使用更多连接词使句子更自然。

예시: Yes, my job teaching calligraphy requires a lot of patience because I need to stay calm and focused while helping students improve their writing.

제안: 回答内容丰富，但句子较长且重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达。

예시: Yes, I am more patient now because practicing piano and calligraphy requires long-term focus, which has helped me improve my patience.

× Well, when I was a kid I would not think I am a patient person, but by practicing how to play the piano and the calligraphy, I think now I'm becoming a much more patient person than I used to be.

✓ Well, when I was a kid I did not think I was a patient person, but by practicing how to play the piano and calligraphy, I think now I'm becoming a much more patient person than I used to be.

这里的时间是过去，所以“would not think”应改为过去式“did not think”，同时“I am”应改为过去式“I was”，以保持时态一致。

× by practicing how to play the piano and the calligraphy

✓ by practicing how to play the piano and calligraphy

“the calligraphy”前不需要冠词“the”，因为这里指的是一种活动或技能，去掉“the”更符合英语习惯。

× I find that several things can make me feel impatient. For one thing, boring.

✓ I find that several things can make me feel impatient. For one thing, boredom.

“boring”是形容词，不能单独作为名词使用，应该用名词“boredom”来表达“无聊”这个概念。

× If I find something boring to do or I am not interested in it, then I may feel impatient and other times I may be impatient about.

✓ If I find something boring to do or I am not interested in it, then I may feel impatient, and other times I may be impatient about other things.

句子末尾缺少宾语，导致句子不完整，需要补充“other things”使句子完整。

× Well, from the start I made out myself.

✓ Well, from the start I made out for myself.

短语“make out”后面需要介词“for”来表示“为自己做出决定或努力”，缺少介词导致表达不准确。

× If I could be persistent on doing this for a long time, then maybe with the progress I can find myself actually enjoying doing this and doing this may no longer feel impatient for me.

✓ If I could be persistent in doing this for a long time, then maybe with the progress I can find myself actually enjoying doing this and doing this may no longer feel impatient for me.

“persistent”后面应接介词“in”表示“坚持做某事”，用“on”是不正确的。

× my job in the calligraphy club to teach students how to write beautiful calligraphy requires me to be patient since you need to stay calm and persistent and focus on the word or character that you are now writing.

✓ my job in the calligraphy club teaching students how to write beautiful calligraphy requires me to be patient since you need to stay calm and persistent and focus on the word or character that you are now writing.

“to teach”在这里作为不定式短语用法不当，改为动名词“teaching”更符合句子结构。

× since you need to stay calm and persistent and focus on the word or character that you are now writing.

✓ since I need to stay calm and persistent and focus on the word or character that I am now writing.

前文主语是“my job requires me”，此处应保持主语一致，使用“I”而非“you”。