Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: คำตอบของคุณดีที่แสดงความอดทนและยกตัวอย่างประกอบ แต่ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และความชัดเจน เช่น การใช้คำว่า "require" ควรเป็น "requires" และประโยคสุดท้ายควรชัดเจนขึ้น นอกจากนี้ควรใช้ linking words เพื่อความลื่นไหลของคำตอบ

예시: Yes, I am a very patient person because my job often requires me to handle unexpected changes. Therefore, I need to stay calm and think carefully before making decisions. For instance, when plans suddenly change, I try to remain composed and continue following the new plan.

제안: คำตอบนี้มีความสับสนและไม่ชัดเจน ควรปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ตรงประเด็นและใช้คำเชื่อมอย่างเหมาะสม รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อนและคำที่ไม่ถูกต้อง เช่น "anything news" ควรเป็น "anything new"

예시: What makes me feel impatient depends on whether I like the project or not. If I enjoy it, I can work on it for a long time. However, if I don't like it, I need to focus on the plan and stay calm before starting anything new.

제안: คำตอบนี้ควรปรับปรุงให้ชัดเจนและลื่นไหลมากขึ้น โดยลดการใช้คำซ้ำและคำไม่จำเป็น เช่น "so it might take times for a while" และเพิ่ม linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด

예시: It depends on the task. If I like it, I can work on it for a long time without any problem. However, if I don't enjoy it, I usually feel a bit bored, but I try to stay positive and make the best of the situation.

제안: คำตอบนี้ดีที่แสดงความอดทนและยกตัวอย่าง แต่มีข้อผิดพลาดในการใช้คำ เช่น "make everyone feel more pressure" ควรเป็น "reduce pressure" หรือ "help everyone feel less pressure" และควรใช้ linking words เพื่อความลื่นไหล

예시: Definitely. My job requires me to be patient and solve problems quickly, especially when unexpected challenges arise. For example, I always stay calm and try to help everyone feel less pressure so that we can work together effectively.

제안: คำตอบนี้ไม่ชัดเจนและมีโครงสร้างประโยคที่สับสน ควรปรับปรุงให้ตรงประเด็นและใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำและคำที่ไม่จำเป็น

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because at work, I have to follow plans and handle various tasks. In contrast, when I was a child, I mainly interacted with friends and students, which was less demanding.

× This require me to stay calm and think carefully before making a decision.

✓ This requires me to stay calm and think carefully before making a decision.

The subject 'This' is singular, so the verb should be 'requires' to agree in number. The original sentence uses 'require' which is plural form, causing a subject-verb agreement error.

× For example, when you plan suddenly change, I try to remain and keep going on the plan.

✓ For example, when your plan suddenly changes, I try to remain calm and keep going with the plan.

The sentence lacks clarity and correct structure. 'You plan suddenly change' should be 'your plan suddenly changes' to show possession and correct verb form. Also, 'remain' needs an object like 'calm', and 'keep going on the plan' is better expressed as 'keep going with the plan' for natural phrasing.

× Personally, it depends on the project that I like it, whether or not if I like it, I can go on the project for a long time and if I don't like it, so I have to focus on the plan and keep calm before starting anything news.

✓ Personally, it depends on whether I like the project or not. If I like it, I can work on the project for a long time, but if I don't, I have to focus on the plan and stay calm before starting anything new.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has redundant phrases like 'that I like it' and 'whether or not if I like it'. Also, 'anything news' should be 'anything new'. The correction simplifies and clarifies the sentence structure and pronoun use.

× So what I feel is umm a bit boring when I have to deal with something for a long time but I try to make it better.

✓ So what I feel is a bit bored when I have to deal with something for a long time, but I try to make it better.

The adjective 'boring' describes something that causes boredom, while 'bored' describes the feeling of a person. Since the speaker is describing their feeling, 'bored' is correct here.

× I always stay calm and try to make everyone feel more pressure so that we can work together effectively.

✓ I always stay calm and try to make everyone feel less pressure so that we can work together effectively.

The phrase 'make everyone feel more pressure' is likely incorrect in context; it should be 'less pressure' to indicate reducing stress. Also, 'feel more pressure' is not a grammatical error per se, but logically it contradicts the idea of working effectively. The correction assumes the intended meaning is to reduce pressure.

× Yes, I am more patient now because when I am working I have to do something, follow the plan and compare with the past when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I am more patient now because when I am working, I have to do tasks and follow the plan, which is different compared to when I was a child.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'Do something' is vague, and 'compare with the past' is not properly connected. The correction clarifies the meaning and improves sentence flow.

× So I have to deal with my friends or my students. So that is how different.

✓ So I have to deal with my friends or my students. That is how it is different.

The phrase 'So that is how different' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Adding 'it is' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.