Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤り（"depending to"は"depending on"が正しい）を修正し、より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけましょう。また、話の流れを良くするために接続詞を使うと効果的です。

예시: I think I am a patient person, but it depends on my mood. When I'm in a bad mood, I tend to be impatient; however, when I'm feeling good, I am usually patient.

제안: 内容は理解できますが、繰り返しが多く、表現がやや冗長です。より具体的な例を加え、接続詞を使って論理的に話を展開しましょう。

예시: I feel impatient when I face difficult tasks or unexpected problems. For example, if a project at work becomes complicated, I might get frustrated, although I always try to stay patient.

제안: 回答は具体的で内容も良いですが、文法ミス（"concentrate a really long time"は"concentrate for a long time"が正しい）を直し、文を分けて話すとより自然です。

예시: I find it hard to concentrate for a long time, so I often become impatient. For example, if I'm stuck on a difficult problem at work or school, I get frustrated because I want to finish it quickly. Although I try to stay calm, sometimes it's challenging to be patient.

제안: 回答は明確ですが、"tend to be patient all the time"の表現が少し不自然です。より自然な表現にし、理由をもう少し詳しく述べると良いでしょう。

예시: My job doesn't necessarily require patience, but I try to be patient to avoid getting frustrated and to maintain good relationships with my colleagues.

제안: 内容は良いですが、"I think I am quite mature than when I was little"は文法的に誤りです。比較級の正しい使い方を学び、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: I am more patient now than when I was a child because I understand many things better and have become more mature. When I was little, I was quite immature and less patient.

× I think I am a patient person depending to my mood.

✓ I think I am a patient person depending on my mood.

The correct preposition to use with 'depending' is 'on', not 'to'. This is a common collocation error where the preposition does not match the verb.

× which is occasional.

✓ which is occasional sometimes.

The word 'occasional' is an adjective and needs to be used properly. The phrase 'which is occasional' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'which is occasional sometimes' or better 'which happens occasionally' to express frequency.

× although I try to be patient most of the times.

✓ although I try to be patient most of the time.

The phrase 'most of the times' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'most of the time' when referring to frequency in general.

× I am not good at concentrate a really long time, so I tend to be more impatient and for example if I'm stuck on a problem at work or school I start to get frustrated because I want to finish it quickly.

✓ I am not good at concentrating for a really long time, so I tend to be more impatient. For example, if I'm stuck on a problem at work or school, I start to get frustrated because I want to finish it quickly.

The phrase 'good at concentrate' is incorrect; it should be 'good at concentrating' because 'good at' is followed by a gerund. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs to be split for clarity. Adding commas and periods improves readability.

× I am not good at concentrate a really long time, so I tend to be more impatient and for example if I'm stuck on a problem at work or school I start to get frustrated because I want to finish it quickly.

✓ I am not good at concentrating for a really long time, so I tend to be more impatient. For example, if I'm stuck on a problem at work or school, I start to get frustrated because I want to finish it quickly.

The phrase 'concentrate a really long time' is missing the preposition 'for' before the duration. The correct phrase is 'concentrate for a really long time'.

× although I tend to be patient all the time to make sure I'm not frustrated and irritating to other people.

✓ although I tend to be patient all the time to make sure I'm not frustrated and irritating to other people.

No correction needed here as the pronouns are used correctly.

× I think I am quite mature than when I was little.

✓ I think I am quite more mature than when I was little.

When making comparisons with 'quite', it is better to use 'more mature' rather than just 'mature'. The phrase 'quite mature than' is incorrect; it should be 'quite more mature than' or simply 'more mature than'.