Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit vague and slightly repetitive. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific examples or reasons. Also, avoid redundancy like 'patience is good for everyone' and 'patience is very important' in the same sentence.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I believe staying calm helps me handle difficult situations better. For instance, when waiting in long queues, I remain composed instead of getting frustrated.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. Use correct sentence structures and link your ideas logically. Also, be more specific about what makes you impatient and why. Avoid vague phrases like 'feel me impatient' and 'increase my curiosity to know about more the object'.

예시: I feel impatient when I see advertisements for new smartphones, especially iPhones, because I am eager to learn about their features and get one soon.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer explanations. Also, link your ideas logically and avoid unrelated details. For example, explain how you feel and what you do to manage it.

예시: When I have to work for a long time, I usually feel tired because my energy decreases. To stay focused, I take short breaks and eat healthy snacks to boost my confidence and stamina.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid mistakes like 'do patients'. Also, provide a clearer explanation with linking words.

예시: Yes, my job requires patience because managers assign various tasks to employees, and completing them carefully ensures good results.

제안: Your answer is on the right track but has grammatical errors and could be more concise. Use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement. Also, explain clearly how exercises help increase patience, linking your ideas smoothly.

예시: I am more patient now than when I was a child because I practice physical exercises like yoga and morning walks, which help me stay calm and focused.

× There are several type of activities which feel me impatient.

✓ There are several types of activities which make me impatient.

The noun 'type' should be plural 'types' because it refers to 'several' which indicates more than one. Also, 'feel me impatient' is incorrect; the correct verb phrase is 'make me impatient' to express causing a feeling.

× It increase my curiosity to know about more the object.

✓ It increases my curiosity to know more about the object.

The verb 'increase' should be in third person singular form 'increases' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, the phrase 'to know about more the object' is incorrect; the correct order is 'to know more about the object'.

× For example, I like to know more about mobile phone because it is very interesting for me and I feel impatient when I see any iPhone ad.

✓ For example, I like to know more about mobile phones because they are very interesting to me and I feel impatient when I see any iPhone ad.

The noun 'mobile phone' should be plural 'mobile phones' to generalize. Also, 'interesting for me' should be 'interesting to me' as the correct preposition. Additionally, 'any iPhone ad' is acceptable but could be more natural as 'an iPhone ad'.

× I feel very tired when I do any task for a long time because it decrease my capacity and then I prefer to take a healthy diet for fill me more confident.

✓ I feel very tired when I do any task for a long time because it decreases my capacity and then I prefer to take a healthy diet to make me more confident.

The verb 'decrease' should be 'decreases' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'for fill me more confident' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to make me more confident'.

× Every job requires patience because there are different type of task which is provided by manager to their employee and the task is performed well when they do patients in their work.

✓ Every job requires patience because there are different types of tasks which are provided by managers to their employees and the tasks are performed well when they do patience in their work.

'type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'different'. 'task' should be plural 'tasks'. 'is provided' should be 'are provided' to agree with plural 'tasks'. 'manager' and 'employee' should be plural 'managers' and 'employees' to match 'their'. The phrase 'do patients' is incorrect; it should be 'have patience' or 'show patience'.

× I am more patient now than my past because I do different type of physical exercise which increase my patience level.

✓ I am more patient now than in the past because I do different types of physical exercises which increase my patience level.

'type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'different'. 'exercise' should be plural 'exercises' to match 'different types'. 'my past' is better expressed as 'in the past'.

× For example, yoga and morning walk is a good exercise to increase the level of patience.

✓ For example, yoga and morning walks are good exercises to increase the level of patience.

'morning walk' should be plural 'morning walks' to match 'yoga' as two activities. The verb 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject. 'exercise' should be plural 'exercises'.