Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite long and a bit unclear. Try to be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two clear supporting details. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

예시: No, I am not a patient person. I often get angry over small things, and waiting makes me feel restless because it doesn't suit my nature or intentions.

제안: Your answer has good content but some sentences are unclear and grammar mistakes affect understanding. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and be specific. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will improve clarity.

예시: I feel impatient when I have to go on sudden trips because I don't like last-minute plans. Also, when my mom cooks delicious food, I can't wait to try it. Moreover, I get impatient waiting for my academic results because I care about my performance.

제안: Your answer is good with contrasting ideas and linking phrases. However, some phrases are informal or unusual for IELTS. Use more natural expressions and avoid overly complex idioms. Also, correct minor grammar errors.

예시: If the activity is interesting, I feel very happy because it helps me learn and be creative. However, if it is boring, I feel quite frustrated and lose interest quickly.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to organize your answer with clear sentences and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid informal or incorrect words like 'notorious' for children.

예시: Currently, I am not working. However, in the future, my job will require patience because I will work with toddlers who are often impatient and active. Therefore, I will need to pay close attention to them.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammar errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct tenses and clearer expressions. Also, link your ideas smoothly and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. As a child, I was very curious and impatient, especially when it came to my collection of Barbie dolls. Nowadays, I understand the value of time better and know how to use it wisely.

× I am a short time person and also I get angry on small things and when it comes to patient I become more curious than before because I think that waiting for me is not a perfect thing as it doesn't suit my behaviour as well as my intentions.

✓ I am a short-tempered person and also I get angry over small things and when it comes to patience I become more curious than before because I think that waiting for me is not a perfect thing as it doesn't suit my behaviour as well as my intentions.

The phrase 'short time person' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'short-tempered person' to describe someone who gets angry quickly. Also, 'patient' should be 'patience' as it is a noun here. 'Angry on' should be 'angry over' or 'angry about' to correctly use the preposition with 'angry'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I get angry on small things

✓ I get angry over small things

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'angry'. The correct preposition is 'over' or 'about' when expressing the cause of anger. Hence, 'angry on small things' should be 'angry over small things'.

× waiting for me is not a perfect thing as it doesn't suit my behaviour as well as my intentions.

✓ waiting for me is not a good thing as it doesn't suit my behaviour as well as my intentions.

The phrase 'not a perfect thing' is awkward; 'not a good thing' is more natural in this context. Also, 'waiting for me' is correct, but the overall sentence can be improved for naturalness.

× Whenever I have to go on a sudden RIP that really make me to feel impatient.

✓ Whenever I have to go on a sudden trip, that really makes me feel impatient.

The phrase 'on a sudden RIP' is incorrect; it should be 'on a sudden trip'. Also, 'make me to feel' is incorrect; the correct form is 'makes me feel' without 'to'. The verb should agree with the singular subject 'that' as 'makes'.

× that really make me to feel impatient.

✓ that really makes me feel impatient.

The subject 'that' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' instead of 'make'. Also, 'make me to feel' is incorrect; the correct form is 'makes me feel' without 'to'.

× when whenever my mom is cooking something and it smell like delicious then I get out of control

✓ whenever my mom is cooking something and it smells delicious, then I get out of control

The phrase 'when whenever' is redundant; only 'whenever' is needed. 'It smell like delicious' is incorrect; it should be 'it smells delicious'. The preposition 'like' is unnecessary here.

× it smell like delicious

✓ it smells delicious

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'smells' instead of 'smell'. Also, 'like' is unnecessary before 'delicious'.

× Besides that especially I get impatient on my results.

✓ Besides that, especially I get impatient about my results.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'impatient'; the correct preposition is 'about'. Also, a comma after 'Besides that' improves sentence clarity.

× They as I really like to school good in academics.

✓ I really like to do well in academics.

The sentence is unclear and contains errors. 'They as I' is incorrect and should be removed. 'Like to school good' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'like to do well in academics'.

× I really like to school good in academics.

✓ I really like to do well in academics.

'Good' is an adjective and cannot modify the verb 'school' here. The correct adverb is 'well' to describe how one performs in academics.

× If the particular activator is interesting, then I feel over the moon while doing it because I can enhance my knowledge as well as can be more creative towards ideas.

✓ If the particular activity is interesting, then I feel over the moon while doing it because I can enhance my knowledge as well as be more creative with ideas.

'Activator' is incorrect; the correct word is 'activity'. 'Creative towards ideas' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'with ideas'.

× If the particular activator is interesting

✓ If the particular activity is interesting

'Activator' is a wrong word here; the intended word is 'activity' which fits the context.

× can be more creative towards ideas

✓ can be more creative with ideas

'Creative' is usually followed by 'with' when referring to ideas, not 'towards'.

× On the other side of the coin, if the activity is boring then I feel really down in the dumps because I get lot bored while doing that activity.

✓ On the other side of the coin, if the activity is boring then I feel really down in the dumps because I get very bored while doing that activity.

'Lot bored' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'very bored'. Also, a comma after 'boring' would improve clarity.

× Currently, no, I'm not working so and in future the job that I want to pursue need patience because at that time I have to deal with toddlers so as they are like impatient and they like to do notorious activities.

✓ Currently, no, I'm not working and in the future the job that I want to pursue needs patience because at that time I have to deal with toddlers as they are impatient and like to do mischievous activities.

The phrase 'so and in future' is incorrect; it should be 'and in the future'. 'Need' should be 'needs' to agree with singular 'job'. 'So as they are like impatient' is incorrect; it should be 'as they are impatient'. 'Notorious activities' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'mischievous'.

× the job that I want to pursue need patience

✓ the job that I want to pursue needs patience

The subject 'job' is singular, so the verb should be 'needs' instead of 'need'.

× so as they are like impatient and they like to do notorious activities.

✓ as they are impatient and they like to do mischievous activities.

'So as' is incorrect conjunction usage here; 'as' alone is sufficient. Also, 'like' before 'impatient' is unnecessary.

× they like to do notorious activities.

✓ they like to do mischievous activities.

'Notorious' means famous for bad reasons and is not appropriate here. The correct adjective is 'mischievous' to describe playful troublemaking.

× Yes, I am more patient than I was in child because when I was a child I was very curious to know about different things, specially very impatient towards toys as I love to collect different kinds of Barbie dolls.

✓ Yes, I am more patient than I was in childhood because when I was a child I was very curious to know about different things, especially very impatient towards toys as I loved to collect different kinds of Barbie dolls.

'In child' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in childhood'. 'Specially' should be 'especially'. Also, 'love' should be 'loved' to maintain past tense consistency.

× very impatient towards toys

✓ very impatient with toys

'Impatient' is usually followed by 'with' when referring to things or people, not 'towards'.

× as I love to collect different kinds of Barbie dolls.

✓ as I loved to collect different kinds of Barbie dolls.

Since the sentence refers to past time ('when I was a child'), the verb should be in past tense 'loved'.

× But if we talk about nowadays, I'm more patient because at that time I know the real value of time and how to utilize it in a perfect way.

✓ But if we talk about nowadays, I'm more patient because now I know the real value of time and how to utilize it in a perfect way.

'At that time' refers to past, but the sentence talks about present knowledge, so it should be 'now' instead of 'at that time'.