Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid contradictions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific examples. Also, avoid redundancy and grammatical errors like 'quiet things' instead of 'quite things'.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person in most situations. However, I sometimes lose patience when things become very stressful or difficult for me. Overall, I try to stay calm and composed in daily life.

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'any typical reasons'.

예시: I feel impatient when people avoid or ignore me without explanation. It makes me wonder if something is wrong, which causes frustration.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be more concise and natural. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas and avoid awkward phrasing such as 'I would not do that in the 1st place'.

예시: It depends on the task. If I enjoy it, I can do it for a long time happily. However, if I don't like it, I usually avoid it, but if necessary, I will complete it.

제안: Try to answer directly about your current or future job and use clearer sentence structures. Avoid repetition and improve grammar, for example, 'in that matters' should be 'in that matter'.

예시: Although I am a student preparing to study in the United States, my education requires a lot of patience. I enjoy studying, which helps me stay patient during my learning process.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using better grammar and linking words. For example, use 'because' to explain reasons and correct phrases like 'we are child' to 'we are children'.

예시: Definitely, I am more patient now than when I was a child because children tend to get easily distracted. As we grow and mature, we develop better focus and patience.

× I would say I'm a pretty patient person in few of the matters.

✓ I would say I'm a pretty patient person in a few matters.

The phrase 'in few of the matters' is incorrect because 'few' without an article implies almost none. The correct phrase is 'a few matters' to indicate some matters. Also, 'of the' is unnecessary here.

× I'm not patient with quiet things which are hard on me or it just makes me stress.

✓ I'm not patient with quiet things which are hard on me or that just make me stressed.

The word 'quiet' should be 'quiet' or 'quiet things' is unclear; assuming 'quiet' is correct, the verb 'makes' should agree with plural 'things' as 'make'. Also, 'stress' as a verb is incorrect here; 'make me stressed' is correct.

× So in that terms I'm not a patient person.

✓ So in those terms, I'm not a patient person.

The phrase 'in that terms' is incorrect because 'terms' is plural and should be preceded by 'those' instead of 'that'.

× For example, I get impatient and people are constantly laid or avoiding me or ignoring me for any typical reasons and that really makes me impatient to know why.

✓ For example, I get impatient when people are constantly late or avoiding me or ignoring me for any typical reasons, and that really makes me impatient to know why.

The word 'laid' is incorrect; the correct word is 'late' to indicate people not arriving on time. Also, 'impatient and people are' is incorrect; it should be 'impatient when people are' to connect the clauses properly.

× But if I had to, I surely would have done that.

✓ But if I had to, I would surely do that.

The sentence mixes conditional forms incorrectly. 'Would have done' is past conditional, but the context is present/future hypothetical. The correct form is 'would do' for present/future hypothetical situations.

× I am going to United States for higher education, and if you're talking about education, then it's mostly really important to stay patient and in that matters.

✓ I am going to the United States for higher education, and if you're talking about education, then it's mostly really important to stay patient in those matters.

The country name 'United States' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'in that matters' is incorrect; it should be 'in those matters' because 'matters' is plural.

× Definitely because when you're a child, we tend to get more distracted from different things.

✓ Definitely because when you're a child, you tend to get more distracted by different things.

The pronoun shifts incorrectly from 'you're' (you are) to 'we'. It should be consistent; using 'you' throughout is appropriate when speaking generally.

× We do not stick on one thing because we are child.

✓ We do not stick to one thing because we are children.

The verb 'stick' is followed by the preposition 'to', not 'on'. Also, 'child' should be plural 'children' to agree with 'we'.

× We do not have mind growth.

✓ We do not have mental growth.

The phrase 'mind growth' is unnatural; 'mental growth' is the correct collocation.

× We are not mature enough at that point of the life.

✓ We are not mature enough at that point in life.

The correct preposition is 'in' for 'point in life', and 'the' before 'life' is unnecessary.

× So I think I am more patient now than I was a child.

✓ So I think I am more patient now than I was as a child.

The phrase 'than I was a child' is missing the preposition 'as' to compare states properly.