Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, explain why you feel impatient and how it affects you.

예시: No, I am not a patient person. I usually want to finish tasks quickly without taking enough time to think carefully. This sometimes makes me feel stressed because I rush without planning properly.

제안: Avoid repeating words and filler sounds like 'uh'. Give specific examples and use linking words to make your answer coherent. For instance, explain situations that make you impatient and why.

예시: I feel impatient when I have to wait for others, such as waiting for a meeting to start or waiting to go to school. This makes me anxious because I dislike wasting time.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words. Also, avoid mixing tenses and be more specific about your feelings.

예시: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel frustrated because it is tiring. Therefore, I sometimes want to avoid my responsibilities, as if I am a child who cannot solve problems.

제안: Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your job requirements.

예시: I work as a scientist, so my job requires me to be patient. For example, I need to focus carefully on each procedure and pay attention to every detail to get accurate results.

제안: Make your answer clearer by using correct grammar and explaining your point more fully. Avoid vague statements and provide reasons or examples.

예시: I have never been very patient, even as a child. I think I might have had ADHD, which made it hard for me to wait or stay calm in difficult situations.

× Patient person. I'm not a patient person at all. I always need to I'm I always need to get anything done immediately without take enough money to think carefully about it and I'm always need to need to anyone to back me up in my opinion.

✓ I'm not a patient person at all. I always need to get things done immediately without taking enough time to think carefully about them, and I always need someone to back me up in my opinion.

The original sentence has multiple sentence fragments and awkward phrasing, making it difficult to understand. The phrase 'without take enough money' is incorrect; it should be 'without taking enough time'. Also, 'need to need to anyone' is incorrect; it should be 'need someone'. The sentence structure needs to be corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think I feel impatient when I, I have to wait anyone, uh, for our meeting or going to school or going to anywhere. Uh, and also I'm, uh, I feel impatient, uh, when I wait.

✓ I think I feel impatient when I have to wait for anyone, uh, for our meeting or going to school or going anywhere. Also, I feel impatient when I wait.

The phrase 'wait anyone' is incorrect; the verb 'wait' requires the preposition 'for' before the object. Also, 'going to anywhere' should be 'going anywhere'. The sentence is repetitive and contains filler words that can be removed for clarity.

× When I have to do something for longer time, I always feel I'm frustrated and I want to escape from the responsibilities that I have had and I also feel like a child which he can't handle any problems.

✓ When I have to do something for a longer time, I always feel frustrated and want to escape from the responsibilities I have, and I also feel like a child who can't handle any problems.

The phrase 'for longer time' is missing the article 'a'. 'I'm frustrated' should be 'frustrated' to fit the sentence structure. 'Which he can't handle' is incorrect; it should be 'who can't handle' when referring to a person. Also, 'that I have had' is better as 'I have' for present relevance.

× I work as a scientist so my job required required me to be patient. Any procedure I have done need me to be to be more focused and need me to be attention to each deals that have done.

✓ I work as a scientist, so my job requires me to be patient. Any procedure I do needs me to be more focused and to pay attention to each detail that is done.

The verb 'required' is past tense but the context is present, so it should be 'requires'. 'Have done' is present perfect but should be simple present 'do' to match the context. 'Need me to be to be more focused' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'needs me to be more focused'. 'Need me to be attention' is incorrect; it should be 'needs me to pay attention'. 'Each deals' is incorrect; 'deals' should be singular 'detail'.

× When I was a child I thought I have a ADHD. I can't be patient, whether now or in the past.

✓ When I was a child, I thought I had ADHD. I couldn't be patient, neither now nor in the past.

The verb 'have' should be in past tense 'had' to match 'thought'. 'A ADHD' is incorrect because 'ADHD' starts with a vowel sound and is an uncountable noun, so no article is needed. 'Can't be patient' should be 'couldn't be patient' to match past tense. 'Whether now or in the past' is better expressed as 'neither now nor in the past' for clarity.