Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответы должны быть более структурированными и естественными. Избегайте повторений и лишних слов, например, "patient person" повторяется несколько раз. Лучше начать с прямого ответа, затем привести конкретные примеры или объяснения.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I rarely get upset over small issues. For instance, I stay calm even when things don't go as planned, which helps me handle stressful situations effectively.

제안: Избегайте частого использования междометий и пауз, которые снижают естественность речи. Ответ должен быть более связным и конкретным, с использованием связующих слов для логичности.

예시: I often feel impatient when I receive my test or exam marks because they affect my future plans. For example, waiting for results can make me anxious and restless.

제안: Ответ должен быть более чётким и логичным. Используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями и избегайте неясных выражений, таких как "searching the of the week of the month".

예시: I feel comfortable when I have a clear plan for the upcoming months because it helps me stay patient and focused. However, I get frustrated when my schedule is uncertain or I don't know what tasks to prioritize.

제안: Сократите количество пауз и междометий, чтобы сделать речь более плавной. Ответ должен быть более структурированным и содержать конкретные примеры, почему учеба требует терпения.

예시: As a student, my studies require a lot of patience, especially during long classes and exams. For instance, I need to stay focused and calm while preparing for tests to achieve good results.

제안: Ответ неполный и содержит ошибки. Следует завершить мысль, использовать правильные выражения и более чётко сравнить настоящее и прошлое, избегая грамматических ошибок.

예시: I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. Back then, I used to get angry easily and even fought over small things like candies, but now I handle situations calmly and thoughtfully.

× I think that I'm very patient person.

✓ I think that I'm a very patient person.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'patient person'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article or determiner. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I really don't take any things too close to my heart and I don't see that for the small things.

✓ I really don't take things too close to my heart and I don't mind the small things.

The phrase 'any things' is incorrect; 'things' is a plural noun and does not need 'any' here. Also, 'I don't see that for the small things' is awkward; 'I don't mind the small things' is a more natural expression. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I think I'm very patient person.

✓ So I think I'm a very patient person.

Again, the indefinite article 'a' is missing before the singular countable noun 'patient person'. Adding 'a' is necessary for grammatical correctness.

× I think that, uh, there is, uh, uh, many things that, uh, keep me impatient

✓ I think that, uh, there are, uh, many things that, uh, keep me impatient

The phrase 'there is many things' is incorrect because 'many things' is plural. The verb 'is' should be replaced with 'are' to agree with the plural subject.

× the marks on the tests or exams really, uh, gives me the creeps and I feel very impatient.

✓ the marks on the tests or exams really, uh, give me the creeps and I feel very impatient.

The subject 'marks' is plural, so the verb should be 'give' instead of 'gives' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× But I don't really like when I don't know what to do in the searching the of the week of the month.

✓ But I don't really like when I don't know what to do during the search for the week or the month.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'In the searching the of the week of the month' is ungrammatical. The correction uses 'during the search for the week or the month' which is clearer and grammatically correct.

× my job is studying at school.

✓ my job is studying at school.

This sentence is correct as is; 'studying at school' is a proper phrase indicating location.

× it's really, uh, required to be patient, to be patient on the school classes, on exams, on tests, uh, almost and everywhere.

✓ it's really, uh, required to be patient, to be patient in school classes, during exams, during tests, uh, almost everywhere.

The prepositions 'on the school classes' and 'on exams' are incorrect. The correct prepositions are 'in' for classes and 'during' for exams and tests. Also, 'almost and everywhere' is awkward; 'almost everywhere' is better.

× Currently I'm really more patient than time.

✓ Currently I'm really more patient than before.

The phrase 'more patient than time' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'more patient than before' or 'than I was before'.

× my parents always told me that I was very angry and non tolerant person.

✓ my parents always told me that I was a very angry and non-tolerant person.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very angry and non-tolerant person'. Also, 'non tolerant' should be hyphenated as 'non-tolerant' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× I could fight for the for the every candy or every all above that I have seen.

✓ I could fight for every candy or anything above that I have seen.

The phrase 'for the for the every candy or every all above that I have seen' is ungrammatical and confusing. The correction removes redundant words and clarifies the meaning. 'Every candy' is correct, and 'anything above that' is a clearer expression.