Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use correct grammar, avoid repeating words, and keep your answer concise and clear. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. In difficult situations, I remain calm because I believe staying patient helps to resolve problems more effectively without adding stress.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'various of things' and be specific.

예시: I feel impatient when people do not complete their work on time or arrive late. However, I practise yoga and exercise regularly, which helps me stay calm and patient.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to organise your thoughts clearly, use proper sentence structure, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your feelings logically.

예시: When I have to work on a task for a long time without breaks, I feel frustrated and impatient. Taking short breaks helps me stay focused and patient.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and some unclear expressions. Use correct verb forms and singular/plural forms. Also, organise your answer with clear sentences and linking words.

예시: Yes, I want to pursue a career in nursing, which requires a lot of patience because nurses care for many sick patients. In fact, patience is important in every profession.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has grammar mistakes and some redundancy. Try to use correct tenses and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to be stubborn and not a good listener, but now I listen carefully and handle situations calmly, whether they are good or bad.

× Sometimes in my difficult situation, I handle them very patiently as I know that if a situation is handled with patients without any stress out making that situation more difficult.

✓ Sometimes in difficult situations, I handle them very patiently as I know that if a situation is handled with patience without any stress, it does not make the situation more difficult.

The word 'patients' is incorrectly used instead of 'patience', which is the correct noun form here. Also, 'stress out making' is incorrect; it should be 'stress, it does not make'. The adjective 'difficult' should be pluralized to 'difficult situations' to match the context.

× There are various of things that can make me impatient like not doing work on time as well as not or getting late at work that makes me impatient.

✓ There are various things that can make me impatient, like not doing work on time as well as being late at work, which makes me impatient.

The phrase 'various of things' is incorrect; 'various things' is correct. Also, 'not or getting late' is unclear and should be 'being late'. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× But I do regular exercise and yoga, at least 50 minutes.

✓ But I do regular exercise and yoga for at least 50 minutes.

The preposition 'for' is needed to indicate the duration of the exercise and yoga.

× If I do and work for a long time then I feel just frustrated as doing one thing without any break that makes me impatient person, whereas doing one thing or any task for long time makes me.

✓ If I work for a long time without any break, I feel frustrated because doing one thing continuously makes me an impatient person.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'If I do and work' is incorrect; it should be 'If I work'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes I want to pursue in nursing fields so that's nursing field requires more patient as there are lot of patient who is unhealthy then I require more patient as each field or job require patience.

✓ Yes, I want to pursue a career in nursing, so the nursing field requires more patience as there are a lot of patients who are unhealthy; therefore, I require more patience as each field or job requires patience.

'Patient' is incorrectly used instead of 'patience' when referring to the quality of being patient. Also, 'patient' is used instead of 'patients' when referring to people. Articles and plural forms are corrected, and sentence structure is improved.

× Everyone should be patients in their field.

✓ Everyone should be patient in their field.

'Patients' refers to people receiving medical care; the correct adjective here is 'patient' to describe the quality of being tolerant.

× Yes, I'm more patient nowadays, not in my childhood as in my childhood I was very stubborn as well as I am not a good listener also.

✓ Yes, I'm more patient nowadays, unlike in my childhood when I was very stubborn and not a good listener.

The phrase 'not in my childhood as in my childhood' is redundant and awkward. It is corrected for clarity and conciseness. Also, 'I am not a good listener also' is better expressed as 'not a good listener'.

× But nowadays I am a good listener as well as a quiet person and handle the situation accordingly to the situation it's good or bad.

✓ But nowadays, I am a good listener as well as a quiet person and handle situations according to whether they are good or bad.

The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness. 'Accordingly to the situation it's good or bad' is incorrect; it should be 'according to whether they are good or bad'.