Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity by correcting verb forms and pluralization. Also, make the answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy.

예시: In many situations, I solve problems calmly, so I would say I am a patient person.

제안: Focus on grammatical correctness, especially subject-verb agreement and word choice. Use more natural expressions like 'lose my temper' instead of 'lose my controls'.

예시: I tend to lose my temper when my plans or schedules don't go the way I want.

제안: Good use of linking words and detailed explanation. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and slightly shorten the answer to avoid redundancy.

예시: It depends on the situation. If a long task helps me improve my skills or advance my career, I feel motivated. However, if it's boring or pointless, I get impatient and frustrated.

제안: Clarify your answer by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use precise vocabulary and avoid repetition. Also, explain why patience is necessary in your job.

예시: Absolutely. As a future data analyst, I will work with large amounts of data, so I need to be patient to carefully analyze the numbers.

제안: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use clearer and more natural expressions to compare your patience now and as a child.

예시: I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have matured and learned to control my emotions better.

× In many situations I'm solve the problems very calmly, so I would say I am a patient persons.

✓ In many situations I'm solving the problems very calmly, so I would say I am a patient person.

The verb 'solve' should be in the present participle form 'solving' after the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. Also, 'persons' is incorrect here; the singular 'person' should be used to match the subject 'I'.

× In many situations I'm solve the problems very calmly, so I would say I am a patient persons.

✓ In many situations I'm solving the problems very calmly, so I would say I am a patient person.

The noun 'persons' is incorrect in this context; the singular form 'person' should be used to agree with the singular subject 'I'.

× I would say I lose my controls when my plans or my schedules is not working in a way I want.

✓ I would say I lose my control when my plans or my schedules are not working in a way I want.

The noun 'controls' should be singular 'control' to match the intended meaning. Also, 'plans or my schedules' is a compound subject joined by 'or', so the verb should agree with the nearer subject 'schedules' which is plural; therefore, use 'are' instead of 'is'.

× Absolutely, just since my future jobs will be data analyzed, data analyst which will be working on many numbers, so I have to be patient to see the screen and working on such a large of numbers.

✓ Absolutely, just since my future job will be data analysis, as a data analyst who will be working with many numbers, I have to be patient to look at the screen and work on such a large amount of numbers.

The phrase 'data analyzed' is incorrect; it should be 'data analysis' as a noun. 'Data analyst' is a singular job title, so 'job' should be singular. 'Working on many numbers' should be 'working with many numbers'. 'Working on such a large of numbers' is incorrect; it should be 'work on such a large amount of numbers'. Also, 'to see the screen' is better expressed as 'to look at the screen'.

× Absolutely, just since my future jobs will be data analyzed, data analyst which will be working on many numbers, so I have to be patient to see the screen and working on such a large of numbers.

✓ Absolutely, just since my future job will be data analysis, as a data analyst who will be working with many numbers, I have to be patient to look at the screen and work on such a large amount of numbers.

The plural 'jobs' should be singular 'job' to match the singular 'data analyst'. Also, 'such a large of numbers' is incorrect; it should be 'such a large amount of numbers' to correctly quantify the noun.

× Just since I was a child, my emotions are not fully developed, but since I grow up, I become a mature now, so my emotions are fully developed.

✓ Since I was a child, my emotions were not fully developed, but since I have grown up, I have become mature now, so my emotions are fully developed.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'Are not fully developed' should be past tense 'were not fully developed' to refer to the past. 'Since I grow up' should be 'since I have grown up' to indicate the action started in the past and continues. 'I become a mature now' should be 'I have become mature now' to correctly use present perfect tense. Also, 'a mature' is incorrect; 'mature' is an adjective and does not need an article.