Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够自然流畅，表达不完整且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连词连接细节，避免冗余。

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because when I face difficulties at work or in life, I usually stay calm first and then think carefully about the best solution.

제안: 表达不清晰且语法错误较多，内容不具体。建议明确说明导致不耐烦的具体原因，并用连词连接句子。

예시: I usually try to be patient, but I feel impatient when I am rushing to catch a train or airplane because I am afraid of being late.

제안: 回答中断且语法错误多，表达不连贯。建议简洁明了地表达感受，并提供具体原因，避免重复和停顿。

예시: I usually feel impatient when I have to do something for a long time because it becomes boring and I feel stuck without any new ideas.

제안: 回答较为完整但有语法和用词错误，且口语填充词较多。建议减少语气词，使用更准确的词汇，并用连词使句子更流畅。

예시: Yes, my job requires patience because I work with financial reports, collecting data and analyzing it carefully, paying attention to every detail.

제안: 回答中断且语法不准确，表达不够连贯。建议直接回答问题，使用简单句表达比较，并提供具体原因。

예시: Generally speaking, I am more patient now than when I was a child. My parents also told me so because I can focus more on my studies and work.

× I can see that myself a patient person because when I meet the issues or difficulties in my work or life, I prefer to climb down at 1st and then to think about the solution for it to make sure all the.

✓ I can see that I am a patient person because when I meet issues or difficulties in my work or life, I prefer to calm down first and then think about the solution to make sure everything is fine.

原句中“climb down”用法错误，正确表达应为“calm down”（冷静下来）。此外，句子结构不完整，缺少“am”来连接主语和表语。建议使用正确的动词短语和完整句子结构。

× Most of the time I usually to try to be patient, but sometimes I can't control myself as emotion, especially when I was in a hurry to catch up the train or airplane because I freed.

✓ Most of the time I usually try to be patient, but sometimes I can't control my emotions, especially when I am in a hurry to catch the train or airplane because I feel stressed.

原句中“to try”前多余“to”，应直接用动词原形“try”。“myself as emotion”表达错误，应为“my emotions”。“catch up the train”应为“catch the train”。“freed”用词错误，应为“feel stressed”或类似表达。

× Most of the time I usually to try to be patient, but sometimes I can't control myself as emotion, especially when I was in a hurry to catch up the train or airplane because I freed.

✓ Most of the time I usually try to be patient, but sometimes I can't control my emotions, especially when I am in a hurry to catch the train or airplane because I feel stressed.

句中“was in a hurry”时态不符合上下文，应使用现在时“am in a hurry”，因为描述的是一般情况。

× Most of the time I usually to try to be patient, but sometimes I can't control myself as emotion, especially when I was in a hurry to catch up the train or airplane because I freed.

✓ Most of the time I usually try to be patient, but sometimes I can't control my emotions, especially when I am in a hurry to catch the train or airplane because I feel stressed.

“myself as emotion”表达不正确，应使用“my emotions”来表示情绪。

× Uh, well, uh, first of all, uh, I would like to be uh, impatient, uh, because it I felt boring and stucked in the box and I can't find the solution for it.

✓ Uh, well, first of all, I would like to say I am impatient because I feel bored and stuck in a box and can't find a solution for it.

“would like to be impatient”表达不自然，应为“would like to say I am impatient”。“felt boring”应为“feel bored”，因为“boring”形容事物，“bored”形容人。动词“stucked”错误，应为“stuck”。

× Uh, well, uh, first of all, uh, I would like to be uh, impatient, uh, because it I felt boring and stucked in the box and I can't find the solution for it.

✓ Uh, well, first of all, I would like to say I am impatient because I feel bored and stuck in a box and can't find a solution for it.

“felt boring”时态和用法错误，应为现在时“feel bored”，描述当前感受。

× Yes, uh, because my job is related with the financial, uh, rapport, uh, and I need to collect data and to do some analysis.

✓ Yes, because my job is related to financial reports, and I need to collect data and do some analysis.

“related with”用法错误，正确搭配是“related to”。“rapport”拼写错误，应为“reports”。

× Yes, uh, because my job is related with the financial, uh, rapport, uh, and I need to collect data and to do some analysis.

✓ Yes, because my job is related to financial reports, and I need to collect data and do some analysis.

“rapport”应为复数“reports”，因为通常指多份报告。

× So, uh, it need to spend patience on it and I need to, uh, take care all the details.

✓ So, it needs patience, and I need to take care of all the details.

“need to spend patience”表达不自然，应为“needs patience”。“take care all the details”缺少介词“of”。

× So, uh, it need to spend patience on it and I need to, uh, take care all the details.

✓ So, it needs patience, and I need to take care of all the details.

“take care”后应加介词“of”，构成固定短语“take care of”。

× Uh, generally speaking, uh, and uh, my parents also gave the feedback said, uh, I'm more patient, uh, than I was a child, uh, because I can focus, uh, more time on my own things, uh, the study or working and besides.

✓ Generally speaking, my parents also gave feedback saying that I'm more patient than I was as a child because I can focus more time on my own things, like studying or working, and so on.

“gave the feedback said”结构错误，应为“gave feedback saying”。“than I was a child”缺少介词“as”。

× Uh, generally speaking, uh, and uh, my parents also gave the feedback said, uh, I'm more patient, uh, than I was a child, uh, because I can focus, uh, more time on my own things, uh, the study or working and besides.

✓ Generally speaking, my parents also gave feedback saying that I'm more patient than I was as a child because I can focus more time on my own things, like studying or working, and so on.

“focus more time on”后应加介词“on”，且“the study or working”应为“studying or working”。