Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Also, correct grammar errors such as missing articles ('a impulsive person' should be 'an impulsive person'). Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with brief reasons.

예시: No, I am not a patient person because I tend to act impulsively and find it hard to wait calmly.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Be more specific about situations that cause impatience.

예시: I usually feel impatient when things don't go according to my plans because I like to have control over situations.

제안: Avoid vague expressions like 'I can't describe how I feel appropriately.' Instead, express your feelings clearly. Use linking words to organize your answer logically and keep sentences concise.

예시: When I have to do something for a long time, I feel challenged, so I plan carefully to stay focused and complete the task successfully.

제안: Correct grammatical errors and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain why patience is necessary. Be more specific about how you manage your impatience.

예시: Yes, my job as a full-time auditor requires a lot of patience because my team sometimes makes mistakes, but I try to stay calm and help them improve.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to compare past and present. Be concise and clear in expressing your growth.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned to control my emotions as I have grown older.

× I'm really impulsive person and indecisive.

✓ I'm really an impulsive person and indecisive.

The noun 'person' is singular and requires the singular article 'an' before it. Omitting the article causes a singular and plural issue.

× I think thing that makes me mostly impatient is that if someone doesn't, uh, workout the way I thought, like the way I plan things doesn't work out and then I feel very impatient and uh, aggressive about that.

✓ I think the thing that makes me mostly impatient is if someone doesn't, uh, work out the way I thought, like the way I plan things doesn't work out and then I feel very impatient and, uh, aggressive about that.

The phrase 'I think thing' is missing the article 'the' before 'thing' to indicate a specific thing. Also, 'workout' should be two words 'work out' as a phrasal verb here. These are singular/plural and word form issues.

× I think thing that makes me mostly impatient is that if someone doesn't, uh, workout the way I thought, like the way I plan things doesn't work out and then I feel very impatient and uh, aggressive about that.

✓ I think the thing that makes me mostly impatient is if someone doesn't, uh, work out the way I thought, like the way I plan things doesn't work out and then I feel very impatient and, uh, aggressive about that.

The verb 'workout' is incorrectly used as one word; it should be the phrasal verb 'work out' (two words) in present participle form to mean 'go as planned'.

× like the way I plan things doesn't work out and then I feel very impatient and uh, aggressive about that.

✓ like the way I plan things don't work out and then I feel very impatient and, uh, aggressive about that.

The subject 'things' is plural, so the verb should be 'don't' instead of 'doesn't' to agree in present tense.

× Well, I can't describe how I feel appropriately, but yeah, I have to plan certain things that how can I execute that thing and how can I sustain in that for a longer time.

✓ Well, I can't describe how I feel appropriately, but yeah, I have to plan certain things, like how I can execute that and how I can sustain it for a longer time.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect word order in the clause 'that how can I execute that thing'. It should be rephrased for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× how can I sustain in that for a longer time.

✓ how can I sustain that for a longer time.

The verb 'sustain' does not require the preposition 'in' after it. The correct form is 'sustain that'.

× Sil Samberg working full time as an auditor and it it requires a lot of patience because my team really makes some silly mistakes and triggers me to be impatient.

✓ I am Sil Samberg, working full time as an auditor, and it requires a lot of patience because my team really makes some silly mistakes and triggers me to be impatient.

The original sentence lacks a subject and has repeated words ('it it'). Adding the subject 'I am' and removing the duplicate 'it' corrects the sentence structure.

× my team really makes some silly mistakes and triggers me to be impatient.

✓ my team really makes some silly mistakes and triggers me to be impatient.

This sentence is correct in present tense and subject-verb agreement; no correction needed here.

× there are significant improvement, improvements in myself as I grow up as a as an adult.

✓ there are significant improvements in myself as I grow up as an adult.

The word 'improvement' should be plural 'improvements' to agree with 'are significant'. Also, the phrase 'as a as an adult' has a repeated article; it should be 'as an adult'.

× as a as an adult.

✓ as an adult.

The phrase contains a repeated article 'a as an'; only 'an' is needed before 'adult'.