Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be concise.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I have been studying English for 10 years. Additionally, I dedicate about 10 hours every weekend to practice, which has helped me develop patience over time.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to explain your feelings logically.

예시: I feel impatient when playing games because I'm not really interested in them. For example, I can't play games for more than an hour as I quickly lose interest and become frustrated.

제안: Your answer conveys the main idea but is repetitive and unclear. Try to organize your thoughts better and use linking words to explain your techniques clearly.

예시: I usually find doing something for a long time quite boring. However, to avoid this, I take regular breaks every hour, which helps me stay focused and refreshed.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, my job as a hotel receptionist requires a lot of patience. I often communicate with guests from different countries who don't speak Japanese, so I have to concentrate and be patient, especially since my English is not perfect.

제안: Your answer has good content but is unclear due to hesitations and grammar mistakes. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to explain your reasoning.

예시: I am more patient now than when I was a child because passing exams required a lot of patience. These challenges helped me develop tolerance, which is very useful in my daily life.

× I do same thing for a long time which for example 10 years such as 10 years I study for.

✓ I do the same thing for a long time, for example, I have studied for 10 years.

The phrase 'same thing' needs the definite article 'the' to specify the particular thing. Also, '10 years' should be connected properly to the verb 'study' with correct tense and prepositions.

× I study English for 10 years and also I study for for 10 hours, 10 hours in the weekend, which is really helpful to be a patient person.

✓ I have studied English for 10 years and also study for 10 hours on weekends, which is really helpful to be a patient person.

When talking about an action that started in the past and continues to the present, the present perfect tense 'have studied' is appropriate. Also, 'on weekends' is the correct preposition for days.

× I think gaming game is impatient for me because I'm not such a game person.

✓ I think playing games makes me impatient because I'm not really a game person.

'Gaming game' is incorrect; 'playing games' is the correct phrase. Also, 'impatient' describes a person, so the sentence should reflect that.

× I don't like use, I don't like playing games.

✓ I don't like to use, I don't like playing games.

After 'like', both the infinitive 'to use' and gerund 'playing' can be used, but 'use' alone is incorrect without 'to' or '-ing'.

× So if I play game for if I game play game, I can't.

✓ So if I play games, I can't.

The singular 'game' should be plural 'games' when referring to playing in general.

× I can't continue to play games for one hours and it's really impatient for me.

✓ I can't continue to play games for one hour and it makes me really impatient.

'One hours' is incorrect; 'hour' should be singular. Also, 'impatient' describes a person, so the sentence should reflect that.

× For long time, I think, uh, I think it's really boring.

✓ For a long time, I think it's really boring.

The phrase 'for long time' requires the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× I do some techniques such as, uh, break, break, uh, such as taking a break, uh, each year, each an hour.

✓ I use some techniques such as taking a break every hour.

'Each year' is incorrect in this context; 'every hour' is appropriate. Also, 'do some techniques' should be 'use some techniques'.

× my job is hotel reception.

✓ My job is hotel receptionist.

'Hotel reception' refers to the place; the job title is 'hotel receptionist'.

× I speak to a lot of people who came from, who came from, who comes from uh, different countries.

✓ I speak to a lot of people who come from different countries.

The relative clause should use present tense 'come' to match the general truth.

× So they don't understand the Japanese.

✓ So they don't understand Japanese.

When referring to the language, the article 'the' is not used before 'Japanese'.

× So I need to, uh, concentrate on this conversation and it's need to patience.

✓ So I need to concentrate on this conversation and it requires patience.

'It's need to patience' is incorrect; 'it requires patience' is the correct expression.

× I'm more patient than I was a child because, uh, some events like, uh, passing examination requires me a lot of patience.

✓ I'm more patient than I was as a child because some events like passing examinations require me to have a lot of patience.

'Passing examination' should be plural 'passing examinations' to match 'some events'. Also, 'requires' should agree with plural subject 'events'.

× So I got patients, uh, through these challenging then it gives me a lot, uh, which is really helpful to live my life and I think it's really good, uh, tolerance.

✓ So I gained patience through these challenges, which has been really helpful in my life, and I think it's really good tolerance.

'Patients' is incorrect; the correct word is 'patience'. 'Challenging' should be plural noun 'challenges'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.