Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意図は伝わるが文法ミスや冗長さ、流暢さの問題がある。まずは短く明確なトピック文を作り、その後で1〜2文の具体例や理由をつなぐ練習をすること。発音と文法では冠詞や語順、不要な繰り返し（um, uhなど）を避ける。例えば“I’m not a patient person”の後に“However, I try to stay calm in difficult situations because…”のように接続詞で論理的に続ける。練習方法：①簡潔なトピック文（1文）→②理由（接続詞で導入）→③短い具体例。

예시: No, I’m not a very patient person. However, I try to stay calm in difficult situations because losing control makes problems worse. For example, when a lesson isn’t going well, I take a deep breath and refocus to solve the issue.

제안: 答えが不明瞭で言いたいことが伝わりにくい。まずは具体的な原因を一つか二つ挙げ、それに対する理由をはっきり述べること。語彙が曖昧で文法ミス（主語・動詞の一致、時制）も多い。話す際は曖昧な発声（umm, uh）を減らし、短い完全な文を使う練習をすること。例：“I get impatient when people are late because it wastes my time.”のように。

예시: I often feel impatient when people are late because it wastes time and disrupts my plans. For instance, if a student arrives late to class, I feel stressed because I have less time to cover the lesson.

제안: 内容は伝わるが表現が不自然で文法や語彙の選択ミスが目立つ。まずはトピック文で感情を表し、次に理由と対策を一つ示す構成にすること。語彙は“reluctant”や“persistent”の使い方を正しく学ぶ。長時間の作業に対する対処法（休憩を取る、タスクを分ける）を具体的に述べると良い。

예시: I usually feel reluctant when I have to work on something for a long time because I lose focus. To manage this, I break the task into smaller parts and take short breaks every hour, which helps me concentrate.

제안: 答えは概ね適切だが繰り返しや不明瞭な表現が多い（“feed a patient”は誤用の可能性あり）。まず明確なトピック文で“Yes, my job requires patience”と述べ、その後に具体的理由を短く述べる。不要な“uh”を省き、語彙を正確に使う（例えば “handle unexpected situations”）。また、例を一つ加えると説得力が増す。

예시: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I teach English and students learn at different speeds. For example, when a student struggles with pronunciation, I repeat explanations calmly and try different methods.

제안: 意図は理解できるが文法と語順の誤りが多く、表現が混乱している。まず肯定的なトピック文（“Yes, I am more patient now”）を述べ、次に理由を一つか二つ、時には具体例を加える。過去と現在を比較する表現（“when I was a child” vs “now”）を正しく使う練習をすること。

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have more life experience. For instance, I used to get upset quickly, but now I can stay calm and think of solutions before reacting.

× No, I'm not a patient person, rather I get a easily annoyed and worried.

✓ No, I'm not a patient person; rather, I get easily annoyed and worried.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'easily' which is an adverb. Also 'get a easily annoyed' mixes a verb pattern. Remove 'a' and use 'get easily annoyed and worried'. Use a semicolon or conjunction 'but' to connect contrasting clauses. Suggestion: 'No, I'm not a patient person; rather, I get easily annoyed and worried.'

× However, when I'm in a difficult situation, I try to control my feelings to stay calm as possible.

✓ However, when I'm in a difficult situation, I try to control my feelings to stay as calm as possible.

The adverbial phrase 'as calm as possible' needs the pattern 'stay as + adjective + as possible'. The original missed 'as' before 'calm' and after 'stay'. Correct pattern: 'stay as calm as possible'.

× There are no specific things which makes me feel impatient.

✓ There are no specific things that make me feel impatient.

Subject-verb agreement and relative clause: 'things' is plural so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Also 'that' is more natural than 'which' in restrictive clauses in spoken English. Suggestion: 'There are no specific things that make me feel impatient.'

× However, when I did OK, when I daring where's my walk, I tend to be feel impatient because umm calm mind, uh.

✓ However, when I am doing okay or when I am unsure where I'm going, I tend to feel impatient because my mind is not calm.

Original contains several broken fragments and wrong verb forms: 'did OK' should be 'doing okay' for present continuous; 'daring where's my walk' is unclear — interpreted as 'unsure where I'm going' using 'am unsure' or 'am not sure where I'm going'. 'Tend to be feel' is ungrammatical; use 'tend to feel'. 'Calm mind' needs a verb: 'my mind is not calm'. Ensure coherent sentence structure and correct verb tenses.

× Since I am a person who fail more easily, I feel reluctant to do something which I need to do for a long time.

✓ Since I am a person who fails more easily, I feel reluctant to do something that I need to do for a long time.

Subject-verb agreement: in a relative clause with 'who' referring to 'person' the verb must be third person singular 'fails'. Also use 'that' for a restrictive relative clause in spoken English. Keep present simple for habitual traits.

× However, I can do and I understand the importance of doing things for long time.

✓ However, I can do it and I understand the importance of doing things for a long time.

Missing object 'it' after 'can do'. Also 'for long time' needs the article: 'for a long time'. Use complete clause 'I can do it' to be clear.

× So OK, I try to concentrate my.

✓ So, okay, I try to concentrate.

Incomplete sentence: 'concentrate my' lacks an object. 'Concentrate' can be used intransitively as 'concentrate' or with 'on' + object. Better: 'I try to concentrate' or 'I try to concentrate on my work.'

× Yes, uh, my job requires me to feed a patient, be patient because my job is uh, is to teach English.

✓ Yes, my job requires me to be patient because my job is to teach English.

Confusing phrase 'requires me to feed a patient' and duplicate 'is'. Likely intended 'be patient'. Use infinitive 'requires me to be patient'. Remove filler words for clarity.

× So, uh, get in many cases I need to deal with the unexpected things and result do not, uh, come up easily.

✓ In many cases I need to deal with unexpected things and results do not come easily.

Remove 'get' and filler. 'the unexpected things' is unnatural; use 'unexpected things' without 'the'. 'result' should be plural 'results' to match 'do not come easily'. Correct word order: 'results do not come easily.'

× So I need to be uh, patient.

✓ So I need to be patient.

Just remove filler 'uh'; sentence is fine otherwise. Present simple 'need to be' correctly expresses current requirement.

× Yeah, I think sell because as I have experienced many things, I OK my mind has become more grown up, so I can accept many difficult things with ease.

✓ Yeah, I think so, because as I have experienced many things, my mind has become more mature, so I can accept many difficult things with ease.

Multiple issues: 'sell' is a phonetic error for 'so'. 'I OK' is filler; remove. 'has become more grown up' is awkward; use 'has become more mature'. Maintain present perfect 'have experienced' and 'has become' to show change over time.

× So that's why I fear or I feel more patient when I was.

✓ So that's why I feel more patient now than I did when I was a child.

Incorrect tense and structure: 'fear' is wrong word; likely 'feel'. Compare present feeling with past: 'feel more patient now than I did when I was a child.' Use past tense 'did' for the past comparison and specify 'when I was a child' to match the examiner's question.