Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が少し冗長で、文法的な誤りもあります。より自然で効果的な表現にするために、簡潔にし、文法を正しく使うことを意識しましょう。例えば、"it can wash and also it can dry"の部分は"it can wash and dry"と短縮できます。

예시: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it is very useful and convenient. I use it every day since it can both wash and dry my clothes quickly.

제안: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。質問に直接答えた後、理由を明確に述べ、接続詞を使って論理的に話を展開しましょう。

예시: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help save time. Nowadays, many people are busy with work and raising children, so these machines make household chores easier.

제안: 回答が意味不明瞭で、文法的な誤りも多いです。質問に対して直接的に答え、経験や理由を具体的に述べるようにしましょう。

예시: I don't usually read the instructions before using a machine, but sometimes I make mistakes and break things. Therefore, I think it's important to check the instructions carefully.

제안: 回答は基本的に理解できますが、より自然で流暢な表現に改善できます。接続詞を使い、理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because they help me use machines properly. Also, machines often have many functions that I might not know about unless I read the manual.

× I love to use washing machine because it's really useful and convenient for me.

✓ I love to use the washing machine because it's really useful and convenient for me.

The noun 'washing machine' is singular and countable, so it requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific machine in the home.

× I use that every day and also that is very useful because it's it can wash and also it can dry my laundry and it takes very few short time to do that.

✓ I use it every day and it is very useful because it can wash and also dry my laundry, and it takes very little time to do that.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used to refer to the washing machine; 'it' is the correct pronoun for objects. Also, 'very few short time' is incorrect; 'very little time' is the proper quantifier for uncountable nouns like 'time'.

× Yes I do, because I nowadays I have to spend a lot of time and on working or raising children or so we need to reduce the time for housewives.

✓ Yes, I do, because nowadays I have to spend a lot of time working or raising children, so we need to reduce the time housewives spend on these tasks.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly placed after 'and'; it should be used with 'spend time working' without 'and on'. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I don't usually have any interaction but sometimes I I took any mistakes to use machine and I have broken some things, so I think I need to check the information about my thing.

✓ I don't usually read any instructions, but sometimes I make mistakes when using machines and have broken some things, so I think I need to check the information about my machine.

The word 'interaction' is incorrect here; 'instructions' fits the context. 'I took any mistakes' is incorrect; 'I make mistakes' is correct. 'My thing' is vague; 'my machine' is clearer.

× Yes, I think so. That's because if I read instructions in detail, I can use machines properly and sometimes they have a lot of functions that I can imagine. So I need to use that by instructions.

✓ Yes, I think so. That's because if I read instructions in detail, I can use machines properly, and sometimes they have many functions that I cannot imagine. So I need to use them according to the instructions.

'That' is incorrectly used; 'them' refers to machines. 'By instructions' is incorrect; 'according to the instructions' is the proper phrase. Also, 'a lot of functions that I can imagine' is better expressed as 'functions that I cannot imagine' to convey the intended meaning.