Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to form a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and ensure sentences are complete and coherent.

예시: My favourite machine at home is the computer because it allows me to search for information easily. Moreover, it helps me learn new things and improve my knowledge.

제안: Your answer is confusing due to the use of double negatives and unclear reasoning. Make sure to express your opinion clearly and support it with logical reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they save time and effort in daily chores. For example, using a washing machine makes laundry much easier and faster.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains incomplete sentences and repetition. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking words to explain your reasons coherently.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine because it helps prevent accidents such as fires or electric shocks.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using plural forms correctly and adding linking words for coherence. Also, try to provide a bit more detail to enrich your response.

예시: Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important because it helps people avoid accidents like fires or electrical incidents caused by improper use.

× My favorite machine in my home is computer because I can search anything by using it and it makes me intelligent because I can be. Known to many things.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the computer because I can search for anything by using it and it makes me intelligent because I can learn about many things.

The noun 'computer' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific item. The phrase 'search anything' is incorrect; it should be 'search for anything' because 'search' is followed by the preposition 'for' when indicating what is being searched. The fragment 'I can be. Known to many things.' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; it is corrected to 'I can learn about many things' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× I don't think washing machines and sweeping machines are not vital because many people don't help them, which means they are not necessarily in People's Daily lives.

✓ I don't think washing machines and sweeping machines are vital because many people don't use them, which means they are not necessarily part of people's daily lives.

The phrase 'don't help them' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'use' when referring to operating machines. 'People's Daily lives' should be 'people's daily lives' with lowercase 'daily' as it is not a proper noun. Also, the double negative 'don't think... are not vital' is confusing; it is clearer to say 'don't think... are vital'.

× Yes, I always read instructions before using any machines because it has a possibility to. 'Cause some fire or electric shocks shocks.

✓ Yes, I always read instructions before using any machines because there is a possibility of causing fire or electric shocks.

The phrase 'it has a possibility to' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'there is a possibility of'. The fragment 'Cause some fire or electric shocks shocks' is ungrammatical and repetitive; it is corrected to 'causing fire or electric shocks' to express the risk properly.

× Yes, I think reading instruction is very important because without reading it people may cause some fire or electrical incidents.

✓ Yes, I think reading instructions is very important because without reading them people may cause fires or electrical incidents.

The noun 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to the guidelines provided. The pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'instructions'. Also, 'some fire' is better expressed as 'fires' in plural to indicate possible incidents.