Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Tapai ko uttar ma thap clarity ra grammar sudhar garnu parcha. 'Freeze' bhanda 'freezer' bhanne thik huncha. Sentence haru lai thulo ra spashta banau, ra redundancy hataunu parcha. English ma sentence haru 5 sentence bhitra simit rakhnu parcha.

예시: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator because it keeps food fresh and hygienic. I especially like the freezer compartment, which allows me to store snacks for a long time. This way, I can enjoy late-night snacks anytime. Overall, the fridge is very useful and important in my daily life.

제안: Tapai ko uttar ma clarity ra coherence ko kami cha. Linking words ko prayog garera sentence haru lai logical banau. Redundancy hataera sentence haru lai concise ra clear banau. Vocabulary ma thap variety rakhnu parcha.

예시: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important nowadays. Since houses are larger and busier, doing all the cleaning manually is difficult. Therefore, these machines help save time and effort. They make household chores much easier and more efficient.

제안: Tapai ko uttar ma grammar ra sentence structure ma sudhar garnu parcha. 'Sort it up' ko sato 'search it' bhanne thik huncha. Sentence haru lai thulo ra clear banau ra linking words ko prayog garera coherence badhau.

예시: No, I usually do not read the instructions carefully before using a machine. Instead, I prefer to search for tutorials or videos on YouTube. These visual guides help me understand how to use the machine better and more clearly.

제안: Tapai ko uttar ma grammar, vocabulary ra sentence structure ma dherai sudhar garnu parcha. 'Solve the instruction' ko sato 'follow the instructions' bhanne thik huncha. Sentence haru lai clear, concise ra logical banau. Linking words ko prayog garera coherence badhau.

예시: Yes, I definitely think it is important to read the instructions before using a machine. Following the instructions helps to use the machine correctly and maintain it for a longer time. The instructions clearly explain what should and should not be done, which prevents damage and ensures safety.

× The favorite machine that is at my home is the fridge that keeps the food always clean and also hygienic.

✓ The favorite machine at my home is the fridge that keeps the food always clean and hygienic.

The phrase 'that is at my home' is unnecessarily wordy; 'at my home' suffices. Also, 'food always clean' is awkward; 'always clean' is better placed after 'keeps the food'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Uh, even I can enjoy my late late night snacks that is kept on the freeze for a long period of time.

✓ Uh, I can even enjoy my late night snacks that are kept in the freezer for a long period of time.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'freeze' should be 'freezer' as the noun for the appliance. 'Late late night' is redundant; 'late night' is sufficient.

× That's why freeze is one of my favorite machine at home.

✓ That's why the freezer is one of my favorite machines at home.

'Freeze' should be 'freezer' as the noun. 'Machine' should be plural 'machines' because of 'one of my favorite'. Also, the definite article 'the' is needed before 'freezer'.

× I do think that washing machine and sweeping machines are very much important, uh, in nowadays because, uh, the washing machine, uh, the, because nowadays the houses are quite uh, big and tall.

✓ I do think that washing machines and sweeping machines are very important nowadays because the houses are quite big and tall.

'Washing machine' should be plural 'washing machines' to match 'sweeping machines'. 'Very much important' is incorrect; 'very important' is correct. 'In nowadays' is incorrect; 'nowadays' alone is correct.

× So, uh, it's not a one man job for which the machines are most needed.

✓ So, it's not a one-man job, which is why machines are most needed.

'One man job' should be hyphenated as 'one-man job'. The sentence structure is awkward; rephrasing improves clarity.

× No, generally I don't read the instruction while using the machine beside using the instruction that is given in the instruction paper.

✓ No, generally I don't read the instructions while using the machine besides using the instructions given in the instruction paper.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps. 'Beside' should be 'besides' meaning 'in addition to'.

× I usually sort it up in online or in YouTube.

✓ I usually look it up online or on YouTube.

'Sort it up' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'look it up'. Prepositions 'in online' and 'in YouTube' are incorrect; correct prepositions are 'online' and 'on YouTube'.

× That helps me clear out the instruction more in a more imaginary way.

✓ That helps me understand the instructions more clearly in a more visual way.

'Clear out the instruction' is incorrect; 'understand the instructions' is better. 'Imaginary way' is incorrect; 'visual way' or 'more illustrative way' is appropriate.

× Yes, I definitely think that we need to solve the instruction before using it because it helps to keep the machine fresh for a very much long time.

✓ Yes, I definitely think that we need to follow the instructions before using it because it helps to keep the machine in good condition for a very long time.

'Solve the instruction' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'follow the instructions'. 'Fresh' is not appropriate for machines; 'in good condition' is better. 'Very much long time' is incorrect; 'very long time' is correct.

× As we know that in in the instruction section the things that is to be done and not to be done is clearly mentioned which else the is.

✓ As we know, in the instruction section, the things that are to be done and not to be done are clearly mentioned.

'Things' is plural, so verbs should be 'are' not 'is'. The sentence is incomplete and awkward; removing 'which else the is' clarifies meaning.