Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by making the sentences more natural and adding linking words for better flow. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas effectively.

예시: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it significantly reduces the effort of washing clothes by hand. Consequently, it makes my household chores much easier and saves me a lot of time.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is a bit lengthy and slightly repetitive. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more concise while providing specific reasons.

예시: Yes, I believe washing and sweeping machines are essential in every household because they save a lot of manual labour and time. As a result, people can avoid fatigue and focus on other important tasks.

제안: Your answer is relevant and clear, but the sentence structure can be improved for naturalness. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid informal contractions like "don't 'cause".

예시: I always read the instructions before using a machine to ensure I operate it safely and avoid causing harm to myself or others. Moreover, this helps prevent any damage to the machine, which is important for its longevity.

제안: Your answer repeats the previous response and contains informal language. Try to provide a fresh perspective, use formal vocabulary, and structure your answer with linking words for clarity.

예시: Yes, reading the instructions is crucial not only for personal safety but also to prevent damaging the machine. Since repairs can be expensive and time-consuming, following the guidelines helps save money and effort in the long run.

× Undoubtedly my favorite machine is washing machine.

✓ Undoubtedly my favorite machine is the washing machine.

The noun 'washing machine' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific item. Omitting the article makes the sentence grammatically incorrect in English.

× Thanks to this, my whole household chores become much easier.

✓ Thanks to this, my whole household chores become much easier.

The phrase 'household chores' is plural, so the verb 'become' is correctly used here. No correction needed.

× I definitely think it's important to have a washing machine and sweeping machine as a mandatory things in your household because the amount of manual work you need to do and the amount of time you need to put in these, you're almost tired by the end of the day and you can't focus on other work.

✓ I definitely think it's important to have a washing machine and a sweeping machine as mandatory things in your household because of the amount of manual work you need to do and the amount of time you need to put in these; you're almost tired by the end of the day and you can't focus on other work.

The phrase 'a washing machine and sweeping machine' requires an article 'a' before each singular noun. Also, 'as a mandatory things' is incorrect because 'things' is plural; it should be 'as mandatory things' without 'a'. Additionally, 'because the amount' should be 'because of the amount' to correctly use the preposition.

× because the amount of manual work you need to do and the amount of time you need to put in these, you're almost tired by the end of the day and you can't focus on other work.

✓ because of the amount of manual work you need to do and the amount of time you need to put into these, you're almost tired by the end of the day and you can't focus on other work.

The correct preposition after 'because' in this context is 'because of' to indicate the reason. Also, 'put in these' should be 'put into these' to correctly express investing time in something.

× To make the best use of the machine, I always read the instructions so that I don't 'cause myself or any other person living in the household or I don't damage the machine as well.

✓ To make the best use of the machine, I always read the instructions so that I don't cause harm to myself or any other person living in the household, and I don't damage the machine as well.

The contraction 'don't 'cause' is incorrect; it should be 'don't cause'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; adding 'cause harm to' clarifies the meaning. The conjunction 'or' should be replaced with 'and' to connect the two negative consequences properly.

× I think I'll answer the same as before because obviously it's important to read the instructions for your own safety and also to not damage the machine in anywhere because it's costly and you don't wanna waste your money and time and efforts fixing that.

✓ I think I'll answer the same as before because obviously it's important to read the instructions for your own safety and also to not damage the machine anywhere because it's costly and you don't want to waste your money, time, and effort fixing it.

The preposition 'in' before 'anywhere' is incorrect; 'anywhere' does not require a preposition here. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech. The phrase 'time and efforts' should be 'time and effort' as 'effort' is uncountable here. Lastly, 'fixing that' is better as 'fixing it' referring to the machine.