Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有點冗長且語法不夠自然，建議簡化句子結構並注意用詞正確，例如 "flower" 應為 "flour"。此外，使用連接詞讓句子更流暢。

예시: My favourite machine at home is the bread machine because it makes healthy breakfast every day without much effort. I just need to put flour and other ingredients into the machine, and it bakes fresh bread for me.

제안: 回答中有語法錯誤和用詞不當，例如 "declarative space" 不合適，建議使用更貼切的詞彙如 "clean and comfortable space"，並注意句子結構的清晰與連貫。

예시: Yes, both washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because when we are busy with work or exercise, these machines help keep our home clean and provide a comfortable living environment.

제안: 回答表達清楚，但句子稍嫌冗長且有語法錯誤，建議簡化句子並使用更自然的表達方式，例如 "operate it properly"。

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a new machine because it helps me understand all its functions and operate it properly.

제안: 回答中有重複和語法錯誤，建議避免重複使用 "so"，並用更自然的句子結構表達原因和結果。

예시: Yes, reading instructions is very important because it helps prevent problems and malfunctions, which can save us money from having to buy a new machine.

× The favorite machine in my home is the bread machine because every day I it provides me the health breakfast and with without any effort you basically I just need to put a flower and ingredients in the machine and let it blend to form the bread so it benefits a lot.

✓ The favorite machine in my home is the bread machine because every day it provides me with a healthy breakfast without any effort. Basically, I just need to put flour and ingredients in the machine and let it blend to form the bread, so it benefits me a lot.

The original sentence has several issues: 'I it provides' is incorrect; it should be 'it provides'. 'the health breakfast' should be 'a healthy breakfast' (adjective form and article). 'with without any effort' is contradictory; 'without any effort' is correct. 'put a flower' should be 'put flour' (spelling). The sentence is long and confusing; breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity.

× Yes, both washing machine and sweeping machine are absolutely important because every day when we're busy working or doing exercise, those machines can clean our home and offer us as the declarative space which can give us the comfortable environment.

✓ Yes, both washing machines and sweeping machines are absolutely important because every day when we're busy working or exercising, those machines can clean our home and offer us a clean space which can give us a comfortable environment.

The phrase 'both washing machine and sweeping machine' should be pluralized to 'both washing machines and sweeping machines' to match 'both'. 'Doing exercise' is better as 'exercising'. 'Offer us as the declarative space' is incorrect; it should be 'offer us a clean space'. 'The comfortable environment' should be 'a comfortable environment' because it is general.

× Yes, I read the instructions every time before I'm using the brand new machine because for me I think it is important to know every function in the machine and also it is a way for me to manipulate perfectly.

✓ Yes, I read the instructions every time before I use a brand new machine because I think it is important to know every function of the machine and also it is a way for me to operate it perfectly.

The phrase 'before I'm using' is incorrect; it should be 'before I use' to indicate the action before usage. 'Every function in the machine' should be 'every function of the machine'. 'Manipulate perfectly' is awkward; 'operate it perfectly' is more natural.

× Yes, it is absolutely important because by reading instructions we can refrain from having any kinds of problem and malfunctioning. So we can save a lot of money to buy another machine. So, yeah, so I think this is important for everyone.

✓ Yes, it is absolutely important because by reading instructions we can avoid having any kinds of problems and malfunctions. So we can save a lot of money from buying another machine. So, yeah, I think this is important for everyone.

'Refrain from having any kinds of problem and malfunctioning' is incorrect; 'avoid having any kinds of problems and malfunctions' is better. 'Save a lot of money to buy another machine' should be 'save a lot of money from buying another machine'. The sentence is repetitive with 'So, yeah, so'; removing one 'so' improves flow.