Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases.

예시: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves a lot of time and energy. For example, without it, I would have to spend a long time manually squeezing clothes, which is tiring. Therefore, this machine makes my daily chores much easier and quicker.

제안: Your answer is on topic but contains many filler words and some grammatical errors. Try to use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with subject-verb agreement and avoid repeating the same points.

예시: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time and energy. Without these machines, people would have to wash and clean manually, which is exhausting. Therefore, these machines make daily tasks much easier.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition. Also, the phrase 'obsessing compulsive disorder person' is incorrect. Try to clearly state your habit and reason, using correct vocabulary and sentence structure, and avoid repeating the same idea.

예시: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using any machine because it helps me use it safely and correctly. Following instructions prevents mistakes and potential damage to the machine.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Avoid unnecessary personal details unless relevant, and complete your thoughts clearly. Use linking words to explain why reading instructions is important.

예시: Yes, I think it is very important to read instructions before using any machine. This ensures safety and helps me understand how to use the device properly, especially when I use kitchen utensils for the first time.

× Well, my favorite machine in my home is washing machine because it saves a lot of time as well as easy to wash the clothes within minutes with the help of washing machine and it saves a time and also energy like uh, without washing machine I have to be uh, spent a lot of time on squeezing the clothes, so it makes my life easy.

✓ Well, my favorite machine in my home is the washing machine because it saves a lot of time and it is easy to wash clothes within minutes with the help of the washing machine. It saves time and also energy. Without the washing machine, I would have to spend a lot of time squeezing the clothes, so it makes my life easy.

The phrase 'washing machine' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific machine known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'a time' is incorrect; 'time' is uncountable here and does not need an article. The plural 'clothes' is correct. The verb phrase 'have to be spent' is incorrect; it should be 'would have to spend' to express a hypothetical past action. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, uh, these machines are very important because, uh, it saves a lot of time and uh, also, uh, it's very important in daily basis because, uh, without that, uh, uh, individual would spend a lot of time on washing and squeezing clothes and also spend lot of energy. So these makes the things easy.

✓ Yes, these machines are very important because they save a lot of time and are also very important on a daily basis. Without them, an individual would spend a lot of time washing and squeezing clothes and also spend a lot of energy. So these machines make things easy.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural 'machines'; it should be 'they'. The phrase 'in daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'. 'Spend lot of energy' needs the article 'a' before 'lot'. The verb 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with plural subject 'these machines'. These changes correct subject-verb agreement and article usage.

× Yes, I'm obsessing compulsive disorder person. I mostly prefer to read instructions before using the machine because it's very important to follow all the instructions before using any machine because without following instructions and individual can do lot of lot of things which is not good for.

✓ Yes, I have obsessive compulsive disorder. I usually prefer to read instructions before using a machine because it is very important to follow all the instructions. Without following instructions, an individual can do many things which are not good.

The phrase 'obsessing compulsive disorder person' is incorrect; the correct term is 'have obsessive compulsive disorder'. 'Mostly prefer' is better expressed as 'usually prefer'. The phrase 'without following instructions and individual can do lot of lot of things' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'without following instructions, an individual can do many things'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, it's very important to read the instruction before using as the machine. I'm obsessing compulsor uh, I have a obsessive compulsive tendencies and I always prefer to read instruction because it's very essential to take the safety first as uh uh, additionally, if I use any utensils of kitchen first time, so I.

✓ Yes, it's very important to read the instructions before using a machine. I have obsessive compulsive tendencies and I always prefer to read instructions because it is essential to prioritize safety. Additionally, if I use any kitchen utensils for the first time, I...

The phrase 'read the instruction before using as the machine' is incorrect; it should be 'read the instructions before using a machine'. 'Obsessing compulsor' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'have obsessive compulsive tendencies'. 'Utensils of kitchen' should be 'kitchen utensils'. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for grammar up to that point. These corrections address article usage and preposition errors.