Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ естественный и понятный, но можно улучшить связность и разнообразие лексики. Используйте более разнообразные связки и уточняющие детали, чтобы сделать ответ более плавным и информативным.

예시: My favorite machine at home is the washing machine because it greatly simplifies my daily chores. For instance, it saves me a lot of time and ensures my clothes are cleaned more thoroughly than if I washed them by hand.

제안: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткую структуру. Рекомендуется улучшить грамматику, использовать связующие слова и более чётко выражать мысли, чтобы ответ был логичным и понятным.

예시: In my opinion, washing machines are essential in modern life because they simplify daily tasks significantly. On the other hand, sweeping machines are less vital but still useful for keeping the house clean with less effort.

제안: Ответ содержит ошибки в грамматике и формулировках. Следует улучшить структуру предложений и использовать более точные выражения, а также связующие слова для плавности речи.

예시: Whether I read the instructions depends on the machine. For complex devices like coffee machines, I usually read the manual carefully. However, for simpler machines such as ovens or washing machines, I often use them without reading instructions.

제안: Ответ понятен, но содержит повторения и небольшие ошибки. Рекомендуется избегать тавтологии и использовать более разнообразную лексику для улучшения качества речи.

예시: I believe it is very important to read the instructions before using any device because they ensure safe and long-term operation. Additionally, instructions help prevent serious mistakes that could damage the machine or cause accidents.

× Moreover, it washes my clothes better than I will do it by myself.

✓ Moreover, it washes my clothes better than I do it by myself.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'will do' to compare a habitual action. In comparisons of habitual actions, the simple present tense should be used instead of the future tense. Therefore, 'will do' should be corrected to 'do'.

× It significantly simplifies People's Daily routine.

✓ It significantly simplifies people's daily routine.

The phrase 'People's Daily routine' incorrectly capitalizes 'People's' and 'Daily' and uses an unnecessary possessive form. The correct phrase is 'people's daily routine' with lowercase letters and proper possessive form to indicate the routine belonging to people in general.

× What about sweeping machines are I think they are not so vital, but it is still good item.

✓ As for sweeping machines, I think they are not so vital, but they are still good items.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and subject-verb agreement. 'What about sweeping machines are I think' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence uses 'As for sweeping machines' to introduce the topic, corrects the subject-verb agreement with 'they are', and pluralizes 'item' to 'items' to agree with 'they'.

× Sometimes appears to some complicated systems such as coffee machines.

✓ Sometimes, there are some complicated systems such as coffee machines.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb structure. 'Sometimes appears to some complicated systems' is ungrammatical. The correction introduces 'there are' to properly express existence and clarifies the sentence structure.

× Therefore I need to read the instruction.

✓ Therefore, I need to read the instructions.

The word 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple guidelines or steps. Also, a comma is added after 'Therefore' for correct punctuation.

× However, another types of machines are really simple in usage, for example ovens and washing machines.

✓ However, other types of machines are really simple to use, for example ovens and washing machines.

The phrase 'another types' is incorrect because 'another' is singular and 'types' is plural. It should be 'other types'. Also, 'simple in usage' is better expressed as 'simple to use'.

× From my point of view, it's significantly vital to read the instructions before the usage because they provide long term and safe usage of the device.

✓ From my point of view, it's very important to read the instructions before use because they provide long-term and safe operation of the device.

The phrase 'before the usage' is incorrect; 'before use' is the correct expression. Also, 'significantly vital' is awkward; 'very important' is clearer. 'Long term' should be hyphenated as 'long-term'. 'Safe usage' is better expressed as 'safe operation'.

× Moreover, the extractions can can help to avoid some serious mistakes.

✓ Moreover, the instructions can help to avoid some serious mistakes.

The word 'extractions' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'instructions'. Also, there is a repeated word 'can can' which should be corrected to a single 'can'.