Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeated phrases. Also, clarify your points with better structure and vocabulary. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why the blender is important to you with specific reasons and linking words.

예시: My favourite machine at home is the blender because I use it daily to make protein shakes. Since I am very into fitness, the blender helps me prepare healthy drinks quickly and easily.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about the benefits of these machines.

예시: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time and effort. In the past, household chores were time-consuming, but now these machines make cleaning much easier and more efficient.

제안: Try to complete your sentences and avoid abrupt endings. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a clear explanation of why reading instructions is helpful, with specific examples.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand the different functions. For instance, the quick dry option on the dryer allows me to dry clothes much faster, saving time.

제안: Avoid incomplete sentences and improve grammar. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and provide a more natural and effective response.

예시: Yes, I believe it is very important to read the instructions before using any machine because it helps prevent problems and avoids damaging the machine due to incorrect use.

× It's available in every hospital.

✓ It's available in every household.

The preposition 'in' is correct, but the noun 'hospital' is incorrect in this context. The student likely meant 'household' to refer to homes, not hospitals. Using the correct noun improves clarity.

× I have to make a lot of shakes all the days to, uh, get protein from them.

✓ I have to make a lot of shakes every day to get protein from them.

The phrase 'all the days' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'every day' to indicate a habitual action. Also, 'them' correctly refers to shakes, so no change needed there.

× back in the time when there was no machines, it takes lots of time and efforts by the household women

✓ back in the time when there were no machines, it took lots of time and effort by the household women

'Machines' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' not 'was'. Also, the tense should be past ('took') to match 'back in the time'. 'Effort' is uncountable, so 'efforts' should be 'effort'.

× Even men can know the laundry.

✓ Even men can do the laundry.

The verb 'know' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb is 'do' when referring to laundry. This corrects the meaning and usage.

× it automatically wash clothes.

✓ it automatically washes clothes.

The subject 'it' requires the verb in third person singular form 'washes' not 'wash'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.

× Certainly I do read the section so that I'm clear what function can help me while washing.

✓ Certainly I do read the instructions so that I'm clear about what functions can help me while washing.

The word 'section' is incorrect; 'instructions' fits better. Also, 'clear what function' should be 'clear about what functions' to use the correct preposition and plural form.

× there are different sort of option, for example quick dry on the dryer.

✓ there are different sorts of options, for example quick dry on the dryer.

'Sort' and 'option' should be plural to agree with 'different'. The correct phrase is 'different sorts of options'.

× reading instructions should be the priority first thing which a person should do before they provide any machine.

✓ reading instructions should be the first priority for a person before they use any machine.

The phrase 'before they provide any machine' is incorrect. The correct preposition and verb is 'before they use any machine'. Also, 'the priority first thing' is awkward; 'the first priority' is better.

× Because you never know if machine can create a problem or trouble for you as well as it using the machine without any knowledge could damage machine itself.

✓ Because you never know if a machine can create a problem or trouble for you, and using the machine without any knowledge could damage the machine itself.

The sentence has pronoun and article errors. 'Machine' needs the article 'a' or 'the'. 'It using' is incorrect; it should be 'and using'. Also, 'damage machine itself' should be 'damage the machine itself'.