Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but a bit lengthy and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct minor grammatical errors like 'takes part a great draw' to 'plays a major role'.

예시: I don't have a favourite machine, but the washing machine is very useful because it automatically washes and spins clothes, making household chores easier.

제안: Your answer has some unclear phrases like 'produce the intensity of the household chores' and 'sleeping machines' instead of 'sweeping machines'. Try to use precise vocabulary and structure your answer with clear linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are important because they reduce the workload, especially for mothers who have many tasks. Therefore, these machines save energy and help keep the house clean.

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy and repetitive. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid awkward phrases like 'when coming to electronic appliances'.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions carefully before using any electronic appliance to avoid injuries and ensure the machine works properly.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and unclear, especially the phrase 'deal with any interactions if there is and also we have to.' Make sure to complete your sentences and provide specific reasons with linking words to improve clarity and coherence.

예시: Yes, reading instructions is important because it helps us understand how to operate the machine correctly and handle any problems that may arise.

× the washing machine takes part a great draw because we just have to put the clothes in it

✓ the washing machine plays a great role because we just have to put the clothes in it

The phrase 'takes part a great draw' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'plays a great role' to indicate importance or significance. 'Take part' means to participate, and 'a great draw' is not appropriate here.

× So it's very helpful machine

✓ So it's a very helpful machine

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'very helpful machine'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner.

× Yes, I think washing machines and sleeping machines are important

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important

The word 'sleeping machines' is incorrect; it should be 'sweeping machines' as per the context. This is a vocabulary error affecting pronoun reference.

× but that will really help to produce the intensity of the household chores

✓ but that will really help to reduce the intensity of the household chores

The phrase 'produce the intensity' is incorrect. The intended meaning is to lessen or reduce the intensity of chores, so 'reduce' is the correct verb here.

× So it will ease their energy and effort and also helps to make the house clean and also wash the clothes

✓ So it will ease their energy and effort and also help to make the house clean and wash the clothes

The verb 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'it will ease their energy and effort and also help'. Also, 'help' is parallel with 'ease' and should be in base form.

× when coming to electronic appliances, it is very much important that we need to read the instructions

✓ when it comes to electronic appliances, it is very important that we read the instructions

The phrase 'when coming to' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'when it comes to'. Also, 'very much important' should be 'very important'. 'We need to read' can be simplified to 'we read' in this context.

× So I'll read through that and understand that and then we'll only start the machine

✓ So I'll read through that and understand it, and then we'll start the machine

The pronoun 'that' is repeated unnecessarily; 'understand it' is more natural. Also, 'we'll only start' should be 'we'll start' for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because it will help you understand about the working of the machine and also have to deal with any interactions if there is and also we have to

✓ Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because it will help you understand the working of the machine and also help you deal with any interactions if there are any

The phrase 'understand about the working' is incorrect; 'understand the working' is correct. 'Have to deal' should be 'help you deal'. The sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring for clarity.