Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변 구조를 분명히 하고 문장을 간결하게 만드세요. 첫 문장에서 직접적으로 기계 이름을 말한 뒤, 이유를 1~2개의 구체적인 세부사항으로 보강하세요. 또한 문장 연결을 위해 'because' 외에 'so'나 'which' 같은 연결어를 적절히 사용하고 불필요한 중복(예: "many things that I like" 등)을 피하세요.

예시: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator. I love cooking and eating fresh food, so I use it to store ingredients and leftovers to keep them fresh for longer. For example, I keep vegetables in the crisper drawer to prevent wilting.

제안: 보다 자연스러운 표현과 연결어를 사용해 문장을 통합하세요. 반복을 줄이고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: 시간 절약, 위생 개선). 또한 복수 동사 일치에 주의하세요('both of them are'처럼).

예시: Yes, I definitely think both washing machines and vacuum cleaners are important because they save time and help maintain hygiene. For instance, a washing machine cleans clothes thoroughly while a vacuum removes dust and allergens from carpets.

제안: 문법적 완결성을 개선하고 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요. 한두 문장으로 답을 시작하고, 그 다음에 이유와 구체적 예시를 덧붙이세요. 현재 문장은 문장이 끊기고 어순 오류('instructions' 복수형 등)가 있습니다.

예시: Actually, I usually don't read the instructions before using a machine because I find them time-consuming. For example, when I buy a small kitchen appliance, I often skip the manual and try it out instead.

제안: 중요성에 대해 동의한 뒤 구체적 이유와 결과를 더 명확하게 제시하세요. 중복된 단어('definitely, definitely')는 피하고 문법 오류('lead' 대신 'read' 오타)와 주어 일치를 수정하세요.

예시: Yes, I think it's very important to read instructions because incorrect use can cause damage or even accidents. For example, not following safety guidelines when using a power tool could lead to injury.

× There are many things that I like, but one of the things is refrigerator because I love cooking and eating some fresh food so to keep them fresh I need the refrigerator.

✓ There are many things that I like, but one of the things is the refrigerator because I love cooking and eating fresh food, so to keep it fresh I need the refrigerator.

'refrigerator' refers to a specific single item, so it needs the definite article the and must be singularly referenced. 'some fresh food' is fine but 'them' incorrectly refers to food (uncountable) so use 'it' for food as a mass noun. Also add a comma before 'so' to join clauses. (Korean): 'refrigerator'는 특정 단일 대상을 가리키므로 정관사 the가 필요합니다. 'food'는 불가산명사로 복수 대명사 'them'이 아니라 단수 대명사 'it'을 사용해야 합니다. 또한 문장 연결을 위해 'so' 앞에 쉼표를 추가하면 자연스럽습니다.

× Yeah, I think definitely both of them is.

✓ Yeah, I think definitely both of them are.

Use plural verb 'are' with plural subject 'both of them'. 'is' is singular and does not agree with 'both'. (Korean): 주어 'both of them'은 복수이므로 동사도 복수형 'are'를 사용해야 합니다. 'is'는 단수동사라 일치하지 않습니다.

× We have to wash our clothes and we have to keep clean our home.

✓ We have to wash our clothes and keep our home clean.

Reduce redundancy by parallel structure: 'have to' applies to both verbs; 'keep clean our home' has incorrect word order — the adjective 'clean' should follow the object: 'keep our home clean'. (Korean): 병렬구조를 사용해 중복을 줄이고 'keep our home clean'로 어순을 바로잡아야 합니다. 'clean'은 목적어 뒤에 와야 자연스럽습니다.

× So they're very important things.

✓ So they're very important.

'they' already indicates plural; adding 'things' is redundant and awkward. Remove 'things' and keep 'very important' to sound natural. (Korean): 'they'가 이미 복수를 나타내므로 'things'는 중복이며 어색합니다. 'very important'로 간결하게 표현하세요.

× Actually I don't. I don't read the instruction before I use any machine because I think it's time consuming and I always. Throw them into the trash can.

✓ Actually I don't. I don't read the instructions before I use any machine because I think it's time-consuming and I always throw them into the trash can.

Use plural 'instructions' because machines have multiple instructions. 'time-consuming' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective. Sentence was broken incorrectly ('and I always. Throw...') — combine into one sentence and lowercase 'throw'. (Korean): 'instruction' 대신 복수형 'instructions'를 사용하고, 복합형 형용사 'time-consuming'은 하이픈이 필요합니다. 문장이 잘못 분할되어 있으므로 하나로 합치고 'throw'를 소문자로 작성하세요.

× If I don't, if we don't read them, we can incorrectly use the machines and it can read to a dangerous situation.

✓ If I don't, if we don't read them, we can use the machines incorrectly and it can lead to a dangerous situation.

Use correct verb 'lead' instead of incorrect 'read' in this context. Also place adverb 'incorrectly' after the verb phrase for natural word order. 'a dangerous situation' is fine. (Korean): 여기서는 'lead'가 적절한 동사입니다. 'read'는 오타 또는 잘못된 단어입니다. 부사는 동사 뒤에 두어 'use the machines incorrectly'처럼 자연스럽게 만드세요.