Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific benefits with correct verb forms and clearer phrasing. Avoid repetition (e.g., "saves time" repeated) and unclear phrases like "enhancing sense of belongings."

예시: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves a lot of time and effort washing clothes. For example, it handles heavy loads quickly and removes stains effectively, which gives my family more time for work and relaxation.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and complete the example. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "moreover") and specific details about benefits. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases such as "remove the strain or bacteria."

예시: Yes, they are important because they save time and reduce physical strain. For example, a washing machine removes stains and cleans hygienically, while a vacuum cleaner removes dust and allergens, which helps maintain a healthier home.

제안: Fix small grammar issues and be more direct. Use a topic sentence and one supporting detail that is specific. Avoid redundancy ("effectively and efficiently" both used) and repeated words ("it it").

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it prevents accidents and helps me use the device correctly. For instance, reading the manual for a blender tells me the safe speed settings and maintenance steps.

제안: Avoid repeating "I think" and improve coherence by using linking words. Provide a clear topic sentence then a concise example with correct grammar (e.g., "the correct temperature").

예시: Yes, it is important to read the instructions because they explain how to use appliances safely and effectively. For example, the washing machine manual tells you the correct water temperature and cycle for different fabrics, preventing damage to clothes.

× I would say washing machine is my favorite appliance at my home as it saves tremendous amount of time and effort to maintain hygiene and clean our clothes.

✓ I would say the washing machine is my favorite appliance in my home, as it saves a tremendous amount of time and effort in maintaining hygiene and cleaning our clothes.

Missing definite article 'the' before a specific noun (washing machine) and incorrect article usage before 'tremendous amount' (needs 'a'). Also use 'in my home' (preposition) and parallel gerunds 'maintaining' and 'cleaning'. Use commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Additionally, it also saves times and make it more convenient for other family members to do their work at time, enhancing sense of belongings at home.

✓ Additionally, it also saves time and makes it more convenient for other family members to do their work on time, enhancing their sense of belonging at home.

Use the uncountable noun 'time' not 'times', subject-verb agreement 'makes' for singular subject 'it', preposition 'on time' for punctuality, and correct noun 'belonging' and possessive 'their'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Yes, I believe washing machine and sweeping machines are important for modern household because it saves considerable amount of time and physical strain allowing people to focus on work and family.

✓ Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are important for the modern household because they save a considerable amount of time and reduce physical strain, allowing people to focus on work and family.

Use plural 'washing machines' to match 'sweeping machines' and plural pronoun 'they' with plural subject. Add article 'the' before 'modern household' and 'a' before 'considerable amount'. Also rephrase 'reduce physical strain' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:1

× For example, a washing machine helps to remove the strain or bacteria while vacuum cleaner helps to extract dust allowing people to benefit from the.

✓ For example, a washing machine helps remove stains and bacteria, while a vacuum cleaner helps extract dust, allowing people to benefit from them.

Incorrect noun 'strain' should be 'stains'; missing article 'a' before 'vacuum cleaner'; sentence ended incomplete 'from the' should be 'from them' referring to machines. Also remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I read the instruction before using a machine because it it prevents from any possible accidents to occur and it also helps us to use the machine effectively and efficiently so that we could benefit from it.

✓ Yes, I read the instructions before using a machine because it prevents any possible accidents and also helps us use the machine effectively and efficiently so that we can benefit from it.

Use plural 'instructions' (common collocation), remove duplicate 'it', correct verb structure 'prevents any possible accidents' (no 'from' or 'to occur'), use 'can' instead of 'could' for general present habit. Also remove unnecessary 'to' before 'use'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Yes, I think it is more crucial to read the instruction before using it because I think that we should learn the process or methods before using any appliances.

✓ Yes, I think it is more crucial to read the instructions before using an appliance because we should learn the processes or methods before using any appliance.

Use plural 'instructions' and 'processes' for general statements; use 'an appliance' or 'any appliance' consistently. Avoid repeating 'I think'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× For example, while using washing machine I should know about the exact temperature which I have to keep while washing clothes.

✓ For example, when using the washing machine I should know the exact temperature I have to set when washing clothes.

Add definite article 'the' before 'washing machine', use 'when' instead of 'while' for this structure, 'know the exact temperature I have to set' is natural phrasing, and avoid redundant 'while'. Grammar problem type ID:11