Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence naming the machine, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and grammar errors (e.g., subject-verb agreement, tense). Focus on clear phrasing: 'I use it every other day' and 'it makes my chores easier'.

예시: My favourite machine at home is my washing machine. I use it every other day to wash the children’s clothes, which saves me a lot of time. In addition, it has a separate quick-wash setting for small loads, so I can clean delicate items without mixing them with other clothes.

제안: Answer directly and avoid gender-generalizations; use linking words to organize reasons (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Secondly'). Correct grammar: 'appliances have made life easier' and 'it has become'. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences and give specific examples of benefits.

예시: Yes, I think appliances like washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important. Firstly, they save time by handling tedious tasks quickly; secondly, they reduce physical strain—for example, a vacuum cleaner makes cleaning floors much faster and less tiring.

제안: Be direct and specific: start with 'Yes' or 'No' then give clear reasons using linking words. Use correct tense and phrasing: 'they help me know how to operate the machine and understand any risks'. Mention a concrete example of what you learn from instructions.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using an appliance because they explain how to operate it safely and efficiently. For example, the washing machine manual showed me how to choose the correct cycle and what detergent to use to avoid damaging clothes.

제안: Give a concise opinion followed by two clear specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'Firstly... Secondly...'). Correct grammar: 'settings' and 'appliances' plural agreement, and 'reading the instructions is essential'.

예시: Yes, reading instructions is essential. Firstly, they list safety precautions, such as not overloading the machine; secondly, they explain the correct settings for different fabrics, which helps avoid damage and prolongs the appliance’s life.

× Uh, one of my most favorite equipment, which I use at home is my washing machine.

✓ One of my favorite pieces of equipment that I use at home is my washing machine.

'Equipment' is an uncountable noun, so 'one of my most favorite equipment' is incorrect. Use 'one of my favorite' (avoid 'most' with 'favorite') and a countable expression 'pieces of equipment' to refer to a single item. Also use a relative clause 'that I use at home' for clarity.

× I used it, I use it every alternate day at it has make my chores more easy, like washing the, uh, children's clothes.

✓ I use it every other day; it has made my chores easier, such as washing the children's clothes.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. Use present simple 'I use it every other day' for habitual action. 'Has make' is wrong; present perfect 'has made' is correct. Use the comparative adjective 'easier' not 'more easy'. 'Alternate day' is better expressed as 'every other day.'

× And also I did close up. I can wash it separately. It has.

✓ I can also wash delicate items separately.

Original fragments are unclear and ungrammatical. 'Did close up' is not an appropriate phrase here. Combine ideas into one clear sentence: 'I can also wash delicate items separately.' This uses correct verb form and conveys the intended meaning concisely.

× Of course, I think the uh appliances has made uh life easy, uh, because it is very difficult for women to work at home and run for a struggle with the uh job work with the machines and appliances it has, it is become very quick and convenient to.

✓ Of course, I think appliances have made life easier, because it is very difficult for women to work at home and manage both housework and a job; with machines and appliances, things have become much quicker and more convenient.

'Appliances' is plural, so use 'have' not 'has'. Use 'easier' not 'easy' after 'made'. 'It is become' is incorrect; use 'have become' or 'things have become'. The original also has run-on structure and unclear phrases; split into clauses and use parallel constructions ('quicker and more convenient').

× Well, I always, uh, read the instructions carefully before using any kind of appliance because it helped me to uh, know about, uh, the how to operate the machine and also their uh uh, risk with the.

✓ I always read the instructions carefully before using any appliance because they help me learn how to operate the machine and understand any associated risks.

Tense consistency: 'helped' (past) conflicts with 'always read' (present habitual); use present 'help' for general truth. 'Any kind of appliance' can be simplified to 'any appliance.' 'The how to operate' should be 'how to operate.' Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'instructions.' Remove trailing fragment and clarify 'associated risks.'

× Yeah, I think it is very essential to read instructions and, uh, it helps us to, uh, know the, uh, safety precautions and also the, uh, setting which is the most, uh, is most important for running a appliances.

✓ Yes, I think it is essential to read instructions, and they help us know the safety precautions and the settings that are most important for operating an appliance.

Use 'Yes' rather than 'Yeah' for formality. 'Read instructions' is fine but 'it helps us' should be 'they help us' because 'instructions' is plural. 'The setting which is the most' is wordy; use 'the settings that are most important.' 'Running a appliances' mixes singular and plural; use 'operating an appliance.'

× So I think reading the instructions are much more essential.

✓ So I think reading the instructions is much more essential.

The subject 'reading the instructions' is a gerund phrase and is singular, so use 'is' not 'are'. 'Much more essential' is acceptable but 'very important' could be a simpler alternative.