Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。例えば、「memorize easily the words that is quite difficult to remember memorize」は不自然で、文法的にも誤りです。より自然で効果的な表現にするために、簡潔で正確な文を心がけ、接続詞を使って論理的に話を展開しましょう。

예시: Yes, I am quite good at memorizing things. For example, when I study social studies, I can easily remember difficult words, which helps me achieve higher scores.

제안: 回答は具体的な経験を述べており、内容も理解しやすいですが、最後の文が不完全で意味が曖昧です。より明確に伝えるために、文を完結させ、接続詞を使って話の流れをスムーズにしましょう。

예시: Yes, definitely. When I was a kid, I had to give a speech at school and was supposed to memorize it. However, I forgot to bring my speech paper, which made me very nervous. From this experience, I learned the importance of being well prepared and never forgetting important things.

제안: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して直接的に答え、具体的な内容を簡潔に述べることが重要です。また、繰り返しの表現を避け、正しい文法を使いましょう。

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember important words by repeating them several times because this helps my brain memorize them more easily.

제안: 回答は基本的な内容を伝えていますが、言い淀みや不自然な表現が多く、最後の部分が意味不明です。より自然で効果的な表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: When I want to remember important words, I repeat them over and over again. This method helps me remember them easily and work confidently.

× Yes, I think I'm quite good at memorizing things because when I'm studying umm, especially social studies, I can memorize easily the words that is quite difficult to remember memorize and I can take the score higher in.

✓ Yes, I think I'm quite good at memorizing things because when I'm studying, especially social studies, I can easily memorize the words that are quite difficult to remember, and I can get higher scores.

The sentence has issues with verb forms and sentence structure. 'is' should be 'are' to agree with the plural subject 'words' (subject-verb agreement). 'memorize easily the words' is awkward; 'easily memorize the words' is correct. 'take the score higher in' is incorrect; 'get higher scores' is appropriate. The sentence also needs commas for clarity.

× Yes, definitely. When I was a kid, I had to give a speech at school and I was supposed to memorize it. However, I forgot to bring my speech paper with me, which made me very nervous. From the experience, I learned how important it is to be well prepared and never forget important.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a kid, I had to give a speech at school and I was supposed to memorize it. However, I forgot to bring my speech paper with me, which made me very nervous. From that experience, I learned how important it is to be well prepared and never forget important things.

The phrase 'From the experience' is unnatural; 'From that experience' is better. Also, 'never forget important' is incomplete; it should be 'never forget important things' to complete the meaning.

× The thing that I need to remember is in my opinion, say saying over and over again because by by repeating the words that I want to remember, my brain become to remember easily.

✓ In my opinion, the thing I need to remember is to say things over and over again because by repeating the words I want to remember, my brain can remember them easily.

The sentence has redundant words ('say saying', 'by by') which should be corrected. 'my brain become to remember easily' is incorrect; it should be 'my brain can remember them easily'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by moving 'In my opinion' to the beginning and clarifying the subject and verb.

× When I have the words that I want to remember, I always say every time umm over and over again. By doing so, uh, I can remember the word easily and it leads to con work confidently.

✓ When I have words that I want to remember, I always say them over and over again. By doing so, I can remember the words easily and it helps me work confidently.

'say every time umm over and over again' is awkward and redundant; 'say them over and over again' is clearer. 'the word' should be 'the words' to match plural context. 'it leads to con work confidently' is incorrect; 'it helps me work confidently' is correct. Also, unnecessary fillers like 'umm' and 'uh' are removed for clarity.