Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity by using correct verb tenses and sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and make your answer more concise and coherent by linking ideas logically.

예시: I'm not very good at memorising things, especially in history, because there are many events to remember in chronological order. Therefore, I find it quite challenging to recall all the details accurately.

제안: Focus on correct verb forms and sentence structure. Use linking words to make the answer more coherent and provide clearer details about the situation.

예시: Yes, I once forgot the date of my UH visa application because I didn't show up on the scheduled day. A few days later, I suddenly remembered that I had an appointment on that day.

제안: Use clearer vocabulary and sentence structures. Avoid filler words and improve coherence by linking ideas logically. Also, correct word choice (e.g., 'lock' instead of 'leach').

예시: I need to remember to bring my key every day because it is required to unlock the door, the elevator, and the front entrance. If I forget it, I have to go to the reception and ask the manager for help.

제안: Reduce hesitation and filler words. Use complete sentences and linking words to make your answer more fluent and natural. Provide specific examples clearly.

예시: I usually set reminders on my phone to remember important things, such as paying rent. Since I need to transfer the rent to the agent every two weeks, I set a reminder a few days before the due date to ensure I don't forget.

× I feel I'm interest about it but there are lots of thing I need to remember in the timeline order.

✓ I feel I'm interested in it but there are lots of things I need to remember in the timeline order.

The adjective 'interest' should be 'interested' to correctly describe the speaker's feeling. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple items. The preposition 'about' should be 'in' when expressing interest in a subject.

× there are lots of thing I need to remember in the timeline order.

✓ there are lots of things I need to remember in the timeline order.

The noun 'thing' should be plural 'things' because 'lots of' indicates a large quantity, which requires a plural noun.

× However, I counted as it's quite challenging for me.

✓ However, I find it quite challenging for me.

The verb 'counted' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'find' to express opinion. Also, 'as it's' is awkward; 'it' is the correct pronoun to refer to the situation.

× I used to forgot my UH visa application date 'cause I just didn't shows up on that day and few days.

✓ I used to forget my UH visa application date because I just didn't show up on that day and the following days.

The verb 'forgot' should be in base form 'forget' after 'used to'. 'Shows up' should be 'show up' to match past tense 'didn't'. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' for formal correctness, and 'few days' should be 'the following days' for clarity.

× After few days that I just remember that I have booked the UH application in that day.

✓ After a few days, I just remembered that I had booked the UH application on that day.

'Remember' should be past tense 'remembered' to match the past context. 'Have booked' should be past perfect 'had booked' to indicate an action before another past action. 'In that day' should be 'on that day' as the correct preposition for days.

× I need to bring my key every day umm cause the door leach is unlocking by the key and the elevator and the front door also need to use the key to access.

✓ I need to bring my key every day because the door latch is unlocked by the key, and the elevator and the front door also need the key to access.

'Leach' is a misspelling of 'latch'. 'Is unlocking' should be 'is unlocked' to indicate passive voice. 'Need to use the key to access' is better phrased as 'need the key to access' for clarity.

× If I didn't bring it I have to go to the reception to find the uh manager to help me.

✓ If I don't bring it, I have to go to the reception to find the manager to help me.

The conditional sentence requires present tense 'don't bring' for the 'if' clause. 'Uh' is filler and should be omitted for clarity.

× I will set a reminder to help me remember important thing, just like the rent.

✓ I will set a reminder to help me remember important things, just like the rent.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple important items.

× Every two weeks I need to transfer a rent cost to the uh agent.

✓ Every two weeks I need to transfer the rent cost to the agent.

'A rent cost' is incorrect; 'the rent cost' is appropriate as it refers to a specific payment. 'Uh' is filler and should be omitted.

× So I just set a reminder to uh, before the rent day.

✓ So I just set a reminder before the rent day.

The phrase 'to before' is incorrect; 'set a reminder before' is the correct structure. 'Uh' is filler and should be omitted.