Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat natural but a bit long and slightly unclear in places. Try to be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add supporting details with clear linking words. Avoid informal phrases like 'brain rot' without explanation. Also, watch for grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity.

예시: I used to be good at memorising things, especially numbers and names, because I practiced a lot. However, recently I find it harder to remember things, possibly because I spend too much time watching short videos online, which distracts me.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then explain with specific examples using linking words like 'for example' or 'because'. Avoid repeating similar ideas and try to use varied vocabulary.

예시: Yes, I have forgotten important things several times. For example, I once left home without my phone and keys because I thought I had put them in my bag but actually took them out by mistake. This caused a lot of trouble when I couldn't unlock my door.

제안: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'I keep my nose'. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence clarity to make your points understandable.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember many tasks for work and study. I usually follow a schedule to complete as much as possible because unfinished tasks pile up and become harder to manage. However, I sometimes forget the things I need to buy.

제안: Your answer is relevant but lacks fluency and clarity. Avoid starting with unclear phrases like '4 genuinely important things'. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your method clearly. Also, try to avoid informal expressions like 'lose my mind'.

예시: To remember important things, I use Google Calendar. I set the date and time for each event, and the app sends me a notification 30 minutes before. This helps me stay organized and avoid forgetting important tasks.

× I used to, I have to say I was straining myself for years to memorize as quickly as possible for the numbers, for names and even for longer text.

✓ I used to, I have to say I strained myself for years to memorize as quickly as possible numbers, names, and even longer texts.

The phrase 'I was straining myself' is a past continuous tense which is less appropriate here because the action is a repeated or habitual past action. The simple past 'I strained myself' better expresses this. Also, 'for the numbers, for names and even for longer text' is better expressed without 'for' before each item and 'longer text' should be plural 'longer texts' to match the plural form of 'numbers' and 'names' (singular and plural issue).

× for the numbers, for names and even for longer text.

✓ numbers, names, and even longer texts.

The word 'text' should be plural 'texts' to be consistent with the plural nouns 'numbers' and 'names'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× But that ability, I lost it now I have to say because I've served too much short videos on YouTube and as I research that is called brain rot, so I can't remember things now.

✓ But that ability, I have lost it now I have to say because I've watched too many short videos on YouTube and as I researched, that is called brain rot, so I can't remember things now.

The phrase 'I lost it now' mixes past simple with 'now' which is present. The present perfect 'I have lost it' is more appropriate to indicate a recent change. 'I've served too much short videos' is incorrect; the verb should be 'watched' and 'too much' should be 'too many' because 'videos' is countable. 'As I research' should be past tense 'as I researched' to indicate completed action.

× I've served too much short videos on YouTube

✓ I've watched too many short videos on YouTube

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'videos' is countable, so 'many' is correct here. Also, 'served' is incorrect verb choice; 'watched' fits the context.

× Unfortunately, I've done this very often so far.

✓ Unfortunately, I've done this very often so far.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present perfect tense to express repeated past actions up to now, so no correction needed.

× Some important belongings like my kids or even my phone, I remembered that I put them into my bag, but I didn't notice that I took them out.

✓ Some important belongings like my keys or even my phone, I remembered that I put them into my bag, but I didn't notice that I took them out.

'Kids' is incorrect here because children are not belongings. The correct word is 'keys' which fits the context of important items to remember.

× So sometimes when I came home, I didn't have a key to unlock the door and that was terrible.

✓ So sometimes when I came home, I didn't have the key to unlock the door and that was terrible.

The sentence is mostly correct, but 'a key' should be 'the key' because it refers to a specific key needed to unlock the door.

× So sometimes when I came home, I didn't have a key to unlock the door and that was terrible.

✓ So sometimes when I came home, I didn't have the key to unlock the door and that was terrible.

'The key' is more appropriate here because it refers to a specific key needed to unlock the door, not just any key.

× There's a list of things I have to remember every day for work I keep my nose and I've tried to follow my schedule finished as much as possible, because I mean if I don't finish the day tomorrow, everything will be accumulated and it will be harder for me.

✓ There's a list of things I have to remember every day for work. I keep my nose to the grindstone and I've tried to follow my schedule and finish as much as possible, because I mean if I don't finish today, tomorrow everything will accumulate and it will be harder for me.

The phrase 'I keep my nose' is incomplete; the correct idiom is 'keep my nose to the grindstone' meaning to work hard. Also, 'follow my schedule finished as much as possible' is incorrect; it should be 'follow my schedule and finish as much as possible'. 'If I don't finish the day tomorrow' is unclear; it should be 'if I don't finish today'. 'Everything will be accumulated' is better as 'everything will accumulate'.

× And for my study I've done something similar, but for the list of things I need to buy sometime I forget.

✓ And for my study, I've done something similar, but sometimes I forget the list of things I need to buy.

The phrase 'for the list of things I need to buy sometime I forget' is awkward. 'Sometimes' should be used instead of 'sometime' to indicate frequency. Also, the sentence structure is improved by placing 'sometimes I forget' before the object.

× 4 genuinely important things.

✓ For genuinely important things,

The phrase '4 genuinely important things.' is incomplete and unclear. It seems to be a mishearing or typo. It should be 'For genuinely important things,' to introduce the method used to remember important things.

× So I will be more careful for the tasks which is going or else I will lose my mind and I will not realize anything until someone calls me and say well.

✓ So I will be more careful with the tasks that are coming, or else I will lose my mind and I will not realize anything until someone calls me and says well.

The phrase 'for the tasks which is going' is incorrect; it should be 'with the tasks that are coming' to indicate upcoming tasks. 'Which is' should be 'that are' to agree in number. Also, 'calls me and say well' should be 'calls me and says well' to agree with third person singular subject.