Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you are good at memorising things, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (examples or methods). Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words (for example, because) to make your answer logical. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I’m fairly good at memorising facts, especially for school. For example, when I was in high school I could remember historical dates and vocabulary by using flashcards and regular revision, which helped me get high marks. Because I practised regularly, those facts stayed in my long-term memory.

제안: Give a concise clear example: state what you forgot, explain briefly why it was important, and describe what you did afterwards. Use correct tense and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking words like however or after that to connect events.

예시: Yes, I once forgot my close friend’s 20th birthday, which upset him because it was a special day. After realising my mistake, I apologised, organised a small belated celebration and set a reminder on my phone so it would not happen again.

제안: Answer directly with a topic sentence naming key items you must remember, then give one specific reason or example. Avoid hesitations and redundant phrases. Use linking words such as for example or because to connect ideas and choose correct article/noun forms (e.g., emails, messages, coworkers).

예시: In daily life I need to remember to send emails and messages to friends, family and coworkers because clear communication keeps relationships and work running smoothly. For example, I always check my inbox each morning to reply to important work emails and confirm plans with friends.

제안: State your method clearly with proper vocabulary and a short explanation of why it works, and include one concrete example of how you use it. Avoid pronunciation/word-choice errors (e.g., 'habit', 'notebook', 'useful') and redundant phrases. Use linking words like because or for example.

예시: I make it a habit to write important tasks in a notebook because writing helps me remember better than relying on memory alone. For example, I list my deadlines and set deadlines in my planner, then tick them off when completed, which keeps me organised.

× I'm quite a good artist, memorizing things, especially for academic skills.

✓ I'm quite good at memorizing things, especially academic material.

The original sentence misuses 'artist' and has awkward pronoun/phrase structure. 'Good at' is the correct collocation; 'memorizing things' matches 'good at'. Replace 'artist' (irrelevant) with correct structure and 'academic material' is clearer.

× I usually got Marks and tests and when I was a high school student, which is really good for me because I like memory.

✓ I usually did well on marks and tests when I was a high school student, which was good for me because I have a good memory.

Use past tense 'did well' to describe past performance. 'Got Marks' is non-idiomatic; 'did well on marks and tests' or 'got good marks on tests' is better. Also clarify 'like memory' to 'have a good memory.'

× I like memory, memorize the history words or something important thing, so which is really good for me.

✓ I like remembering things, such as historical facts or other important information, so this ability is really useful for me.

Sentence fragment and incorrect verb forms. Use verb 'remembering' and noun phrases 'historical facts' and 'important information'. Replace vague 'which' with 'this ability' to refer clearly to remembering.

× Ah, yes, I did. I forgot. I have forgotten my friend's birthdays, which is really important for them, but I was really regret to, I forgot that thing because it is really, it is the 20th birthday for them, for him, so I should have, uh, remembered his name.

✓ Ah, yes, I have forgotten a friend's birthday, which was really important to him, and I regret forgetting it because it was his 20th birthday, so I should have remembered it.

Mixing past simple and present perfect and incorrect phrasing. Use present perfect 'have forgotten' for life experience; or past 'forgot' for specific past event. 'Regret' should be 'I regret forgetting it.' Use 'it' to refer to the birthday, not 'his name.' Keep pronouns consistent ('him'/'his').

× And after that I tried to.

✓ After that, I tried to make it up to him.

Original ends abruptly and lacks an object/verb phrase. Provide a complete verb phrase such as 'tried to make it up to him' to show intended meaning.

× I need to send an emails with something messaging to my friends or something coworkers because it's really important to uh for communication, uh, to keep in touch with my friends and family and coworkers, and it's also essential for uh, for keeping work effectively.

✓ I need to send emails or messages to my friends and coworkers because it's really important for communication, to keep in touch with family and colleagues, and it's also essential for working effectively.

Use plural 'emails' without 'an'. 'Something messaging' is ungrammatical; use 'messages' or 'send messages.' Remove extra filler 'uh' and correct 'work effectively' to 'working effectively.' Use 'colleagues' as a clearer synonym for 'coworkers.'

× I I make it hobbits to write down notebook, uh, because it's really use helpful to remember well, important thing because writing down is stronger than my memories and.

✓ I make it a habit to write things down in a notebook because it is very helpful for remembering important things; writing things down is more reliable than relying on my memory.

Multiple issues: 'hobbits' should be 'habit'; need article 'a habit'; 'write down notebook' should be 'write things down in a notebook'; 'use helpful' -> 'very helpful'; 'remember well' -> 'for remembering'; comparative 'stronger than my memories' -> 'more reliable than relying on my memory.' Complete the sentence to avoid trailing 'and.'